Weekly Winners 8/8

A day late, so sorry! This one was totally my fault. I'm hopping in and out of internet here, so let's hope this posts this time!

A hearty congratulations to this weeks Weekly Winner for the site. In no particular order, this weeks laurels are worn gracefully by:

silvershoes, for her poem "Hopelessness."

"What I liked about this piece was the creative comparisons, obviously the whole poem was creating a comparison as a whole but what I found is each on their own was extremely effective in provoking thought and even emotion. Usually I'd cringe when reading a poem that is filled with 'it's' at the beginning of each line, however I liked that you broke it up when you included longer comparisons and minimized the 'it's' within a few lines, this technique was a key feature in keeping the reader interested. The insertion of the starved dog honestly was painful to read, part of me cringed when reading it and wished I hadn't but it created a sense of reality and the shock people need to understand the feeling of hopelessness on a different level. I enjoyed that you left this open and the poem can relate to any feeling of hopelessness, a lost relationship, the destruction of the world, many different problems came to mind and it allowed me to focus on the one I related to most - a nice way to include your audience.

To elaborate on what I said last week: Again this week this poem shined, it had the ability to provoke emotion in me even after I had read it numerous times. I can't actually elaborate too much more on what I said except to say that it was the gloomy and I want to say 'grimy' images that really take the reader's attention. Your descriptions were vivid and created a sense of a dark cloud lingering over head. A poem that had so far kept giving me a chill with each read. (10)

"The poet really had some interesting similes and imagery here to describe the feeling of hopelessness in a unique way. The ending really packed a punch for me; it really held a lot of power as far as emotion goes. I've never been much of a fan of repetition, but to me here it works quite well. It helped with the flow quite a bit,
and I feel it is what helped the ending have so much impact. Well done." (7)

"I am loving the cast of unique poems up for nominations this week. This has a lot of repetitive beginnings but it was worded so that each one was individually needed. All of the phrases worked together in bringing about the title of the poem and what the author thought it was like. Another great write from this poetess, which has come to be expected." (7)

Mel, for her poem "Painting Worlds."

"The first line indicates that the entire poem is about the author digging up their memories and their past. Such a structure (a single opening line and uneven stanzas) and with the right punctuation gives the poem a regimented feel. Arguably, the heart of the poem is neither the first line nor the second, but in my opinion, the first two lines in this poem are already enough to make a great poem. The idea that is presented to the reader in the phrase "giving birth to fantasies and our own religion" is mutually connected with the closing line, "were we not" as it could be seen as a direct answer. Overall, another mesmerizing and powerful poem, keep it up!" (10)

"This poem has that child-like innocence to it. While it also speaks of the idea of growing up, the writer uses interesting comparisons to show you what you don't see when you're a child and by doing so she takes you to the fairyland where we all dwell before eventually growing up and make our way into the real world. Of course your word choice was clever, the way you used child like images with 'cities of sherbet,' 'lavender skies' and 'musical boxes' allowed for the reader to make their own connection or perhaps remind them of their own childhood. While this poem is filled with those innocent images I mention it also speaks quite maturely. While I personally made the connection to this poem being that of transitioning into adulthood I also felt it can be interpreted in many other ways such as the beginning of a new relationship and how we often don't see what can lay ahead even though it's right under our noses. I adored the reference to the cities and stars decaying and turning black like tar, such tragic and yet beautiful imagery. The mention of smelling dirt before rain again reinforced this idea of maturity and left the reader wonder what is it that the writer new was coming? what was looming overhead. A great read." (4)

"This poet has been consistent in the poetry I have read, It is amazing! Upon first read I thought maybe that 7mm should have been spelled out and not just abbreviated, though I believe it was actually fitting for the poem. The abbreviation seems to leave in question about the original question or at least the way it was worded in the end. "Were we not?" The idiom that we are all legends in our own mind seems to fit most here. Great write, fantastic read." (4)

"Some sweet images here in this reminiscing reverie of a poem, though a little too fluffy, cliche or overblown at times for my taste. "on 7mm lines" was the most solid, tangible and distinct line in the poem. Nevertheless, the sentiments were expressed pretty sincerely and I feel this writer has potential, as long their writing stays grounded while aiming for uniqueness." (4)

Mera Luna, for her poem "To rinse a reverie."

"I loved the beginning here, daydreaming of being like someone else. The personification was lovely, as the symbolism of a dandelion fits the message of this poem perfectly. I really adored your images - 'hedge-hog hair' really caught my eye; quite original. Also loved the insertion of 'anti - Luna(tic), makes the poem much more personal this way as the poet is clearly speaking of them self. This was a very rare love poem I thought. The idea of lost love, and the way it was represented was quite impressive.
You feel that bit of sadness in this poem, yet realize by the end that they've come to turns with the situation and have moved on in a way. Always wonderful usage of alliteration and metaphors to add to the poem. Nicely done!" (10)

"What a clever write! I absolutely loved the play on words and especially using your own screen name within the poem. Awesome write!" (10)

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Honourable Mentions:

"Anti-Ode to a Large Nose" by Narphangu

"Once again this lively poet presents us with a sincere and charming poem. The title alone was enough for me. This poem displays great humour and the poet's inherent love of words. I would caution here, though, that her enthusiasm for words and wordplay are felt almost acutely. As poets, it is quite an art to master our affection for these things, especially when we are so fond of what words can do. However, I often feel that certain words should speak for themselves and should not be crammed with others of equal power or excessive alliteration and other "poetic techniques" studied vigorously in schools that flow all-too-naturally onto paper. The effect of the message can feel drowned by loudness. Does that make sense? Nevertheless, I have been observing the growing maturity in this author's poetry and am in love with her boundless passion for things in general. I look forward to more." (10)

"This poem is not only funny but holds much deeper meaning than what meets the eye. This is a kind of poem, which begins with a negative image and ends with a positive statement, written intensely and innocently perfect." (4)

"Dancer" by Yaki Love

"I adored the concept behind this piece, the idea of using dancing as a metaphor to explain you writing poetry was a lovely one. The only suggestion I could make is that you used the word 'dance' or 'danced' four times within this piece, I felt that perhaps you could of taken it a little step further and perhaps used different types of dance just to change things up, though as per usual that's just my personal opinion. The simplicity of this poem is what made it elegant, the way your tone was creating a sense of you swaying with your words, this left quite a tranquil feeling over the atmosphere. Another suggestion is that you didn't capitalize after the full stops within this piece, I got the understanding that you do this in order to keep the flow going, however punctuation wise it isn't technically correct. The imagery of the disco ball for some reason stood out to me, for me instead I got you sitting beneath a disco ball, pen in hand, exhausted and just writing what you were feeling in a need to express yourself. I believe we all here can relate to this poem and that's what made it such an interesting read. Well done." (7)

"I really loved the perspective used in this piece and how you
incorporated poetry in a way as you are dancing with your emotions and thoughts to pen a beautiful piece. Good job!" (4)

"Last book senryu" by Larry Chamberlin The Godfather

"Oh, how I feel the same. For me, the impact of a haiku/senryu-type poem lies not so much with the scene being painted, but an emotion being expressed with exquisite sensitivity and abstractness/singularity of delivery- all in a limited number of syllables. This was a good one." (7)

"Desperate Convictions" by The Poetess

"I really enjoyed reading this piece. What I like about this piece is that it is relatable to an emotion/feeling that, at some level, other people experience, too. I like how this poem captures exactly how the author felt while writing this down. It has a good rhythm all the way through, good structure and line execution as it paced it really well. Overall, this poem's imagery is very powerful and effectively conveys its potent message. While the word choice is elegant and powerful, it also is reflecting the strong emotions of those that are forlorn." (7)

SIB, you rock

Congrats for the winners and the missing H'Ms..
I am sure, well deserved.. :p :D
muccch love!
<3

Thanks Sibby for posting this! :D

congratsssssssssssssssssss
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WINNER! :P bagggggggh
awesome writes!!!! :)

Congrats winners and possible HM's :)

Congrats to the winners and indeed the possible HM's..

Congrats winners and possible HM's

Congrats!

Congrats :)

Comments are now posted! An additional congrats to our honourable mentions. The judges seemed pretty much in accord this week! Thanks for the participation, everyone.

-Sibyllene

Congrats winners!

Congrats Winners & HM's, well deserved :)

Congratulations Jane, Mel & America, also to the HMs (thanks for mine) and thanks to the judges & Sibs

EDIT:
My 'smart' phone automatically changed Mera to America. %#*^$ phone.

Congratsss all :)

Thank you so much! Congratulations everyone.

Lol, Larry I was like... O.O

Before it was Meta Luna now it's America, wonder what would be next.

:D

Congrats once again to everyone!

Congrats to the winners and HMsss once again and thank you for the HM judges :)

Congrats winners and HM's

Huge congrats to the Winners and the HM. Also a big thanks to the Judges. Great job and nice picks.

Thanks for the HM! Nice poems all around this week. Good job writers and judges!

3 people in a row have made the effort to "downrate" my poem, and none of them have left comments. That irritates me. I don't care what rating you give me, give me a 1! Heck, I don't think it's a very good poem, but if you're going to take the time to read the poem and rate it... and you have something to contribute other than, "great work!" - maybe some criticism or advice? - then by all means, please leave a little comment to go with the vote.
I'm not going to hound you for not liking my poem lol. The feedback is welcome.

Does this kinda thing bother anyone else?
My apologies for the rant.

Cheeeeers!

Congrats all!!

Jane I don't like the voting at all. It should be mandatory that your name and comment must go with a vote if given, or at least that's what I've always thought.

Oh Jane, go have a look on my poems, those that won the weekly contest and/or my featured ones, be them BAD or be them GOOD, when your poems win the weekly contest you definitely will have your work down voted! I don't look at the rating these days :) would do the same, if I'm in your shoes !
Oh and maybe you gonna have to google your poem as well in the next few days to make sure it' not published on another website, under the name of another poet ;) lol

"Jane I don't like the voting at all. It should be mandatory that your name and comment must go with a vote if given, or at least that's what I've always thought."

Agreed. It's best to hold people accountable, be it good or bad. I personally would be more inclined to "downrate" poetry if my name was attached to the rating. That way, people will know I'm being honest with my opinion, not just being an ass hiding behind a wall of anonymity. Ya know?

Anyway, blasted rating system. Guess it doesn't matter. Thanks for the comments for those who have taken the time to leave one! And thanks for the moral support, Nana-pants.

Janey, yes, OH my gosh, I go insane when someone downrates me! I even deleted my account few months ago because of this, LOL. But I learned to not give it a damn! because they are only jealous people :)

And we should all uprate Janes piece, guys!