Abed's Contest: Round 2 - POEMS & RESULTS

SORRY for the delay..

In Round 1, '8' contestants applied, and '3' of them were eliminated, leaving us in Round 2, with '5' contestants.

But, unfortunately, 2 members chose not to complete 'till the end with us, so we are left in this round with '3' contestants.

In Round 2, '1' only will get eliminated, so we'll have in the FINAL ROUND, '2' members battling to win the contest!

------------ROUND TWO PROCEDURE----------------------

In this second round, 50 points are casted for 'RULES REQUIRED' and another 50 points for 'STRUCTURE & CONTENT'.

I voted on these 50/50 to get a total of 100.
There was one assisting judge in this round only, who voted only for '50 points of STRUCTURE & CONTENT'.

---FORMULA:

My 50 points (rules required) + { [My 50 points (structure & content) + Assistant Judge vote (structure & content)] /2 } = a grade out of 100 + 2 bonus points.

*All the contestants got the 2 bonus points because he/she used more than 4 root words (as demanded in Round Two)

-------------------------POEMS------------------------------

#1:

Kidnapping All Trace.

Her incandescent hair
- like winter ivy -
stirs her northward
where your thigh
is gnarled around elements.....
what permanent soul
you razed sacredly,
her genetic equation-
her guilty inheritance
now upon nocturnal
hallows.

[superseding melodies,
ceasing trumpet snares
and laying herself down-
upon the one-sided pulse
of a broken descant.}

She acts as the naked mirror,
concentrating on taking home
medals of pride-
engraved deep
like black and blue
veins,
communing
her source of interest
to your files.

Frictionless skin becomes
flushed, as her body symbolizes
an eroded credenza....
(individuality locked
inside the drawer, while she
noncommittally
polishes the wood
for the seventeenth time).

Carnal hands
and your monstrous stealth are
impaired by Scotch....
You starve time as
her breaths are monitored
and new livings are written
for this condition-
the liquored use of
affection's procedure.

[While she is trapped
inside the functions...
the unremarkable method
of surviving
life's intoxication.]

#2:

Talk to me

Are we Credible?
Monsters akin are we.

Contraptions built up,
Loudly we speak,
wishing open ears where credulous.
Believe what we say,
do what we will you.
Meddlesome we may be,
molevolent even.
but sacrilegios?
No ones quite sure.

Nocturnes sooth the savage beast,
Gental rifts fill the night.
Wait for chiors,
that do not come,
Let the beats speak.

Communication,
is it key?
Or are we all simply
born to be...

#3:

A souls winter

Whenever a heart
bursts asunder
a nocuous drop falls
and unseals our
souls winter.

Now snow conceals
the dull medly of
feelings and damps
the sounds so that
serenity may comfort us.

Beneath frozen land
vitality and hope concentrate,
melting the ice in oder that
spirited plants may arise.

Bad weeds grow tall
but have confidence
in these buds,
they will blossom
and reveal your dreams.

Sacrifice your credulity,
draw hope from this melody
and know that you overcome
souls winter.

-------------------------RESULTS---------------------------

#1: (49) + { [40+49] / 2 } + 2 bonus pts = 95.5

#2: (42) + { [37.5+43] / 2 } + 2 bonus pts = 84.25

#3: (47) + { [39.5 +47] / 2} + 2 bonus pts = 92.25

-------REVIEWS (Me & Judge #2 of Round One) -----------

#1:

<ME>
An excellent poem, but Structure is a little bit untied - thoughts are complex - wordy stanzas - too much descriptions to reach what the writer wants to deliver - point deducted because 'life' was used.

<Judge #2>
Perfectly penned. To me originality is a must and this was spot on. Formatting was very
good the third stanza was brilliant/ absolutely an amazing write.

#2:

<ME>
The structure is shaking - many grammatical errors - no insertion of two words related to music (choirs, maybe, but it is written wrongly) - the message is awesome, but the writer didn' know how to deliver it with such errors and unorganized thoughts) - the title is less than 4 syllables. Such mistakes can let any judge deduct you many points which are easy to get if you just take your time revising all the rules.

<Judge #2>
Really good it has originality
It was well written with imagination
and format. But misspelled words took away
from it's structure, like:

molevolent > malevolent
sacrilegios > sacrilegious
Gental > gentle
chiors > choirs

#3:

<ME>
very nice images, but they lack organization and linkages - one music insertion only (melody- but, medly and sounds aren't considered musical sounds in such context) - Though the title is so great, this soul wasn't shown so much! Maybe a good structure can inflame the winter's soul!

<Judge #2>
This was beautiful and original
in fact breathaking but many misspellings
taking away from the masterpiece I believe it is:

Nocuous > innocuous
Medly > medley
oder > order
Overall this is fantastic.

-----------------------WINNERS & ELIMINATED---------

* Winners:

1] Kidnapping All Trace (95.5)
2] A souls winter (92.25)

* Eliminated

3] Talk to me (84.25)

--------------BEST OF LUCK WINNERS, WAIT FOR 'The Final Round'----