Weekly Winners - 10/10/2011

Here we are, slowly scooping up the dregs of our creativity, which have been splattered all over the battlefield by this last week's soul-stealing relay race. And yet, out of the ashes, a meager handful of poets have struggled to the top of the pack, still clutching scraps of poem-scrawled paper tightly in their fists. How these poets managed to write anything "submittable" this week is astonishing. We have:

"Oxygen," by Karla

"I think the Poet did an astonishing job explaining and showing the last days of ones life, The poem contained many Thought provoking Ideas regarding his/her agony and despair
with the realization that nobody actually cares, very sad, but to me it was mesmerizing. 10 no doubt. " (10)

"One of the best dark poems I've ever read on this site, captivated me, touched me to the deepest core. Thie poetess never fails to take my breath away with every single word she pens. Hats off to you, dear poetess" (4)

"What I love the most about this poem is how it flows. It really moves you mountains away, and the title can say lots of things: a poem with different oxygen (my interpretation). The wording, the message, and the metaphors hit home for me. I honestly like the message behind this. 'NOBODY REALLY CARES ABOUT YOU' - that's why everyone of us should learn how to be strong on his/her own. Amazing interpretation of this message. And the dark theme just added some flavors. GREAT." (4)

"To be honest, I found it difficult to pick a poem to give my final points to, but this one just got the nod. In short, I thought it was quite good without being wonderful. The second stanza confused me a little and was a little cliche (I dont like the word soul being used.) But the other stanzas had me quite interested. It was clear the emotions the poet was feeling in this situation. The image in the last stanza reminded me of the phrase 'the bigger you are the harder you fall,' for some reason; I think it applies to this part of the poem also. It shows perhaps the two-faced nature of people who may claim to be your friend but then wallow in your downfall. The oxygen references ran mostly throughout and there was a sense of suffocation or claustrophobia. I like the image of the dirty pile of dishes waiting in the kitchen. They seem to symbolise the mundane reality of daily life, something from which the poet seemingly cannot escape." (4)

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"Sunshine Comes Easily With Time," by Monster

"I remember reading this for the site contest and liking it then, and when I seen it this week it stood out a little amongst the other poems for me. I think on one level the poet succeeded in completing the challenge well, but on the other its just a good poem, challenge or not. It opens with a good focusing image, and is detailed but not overly so.

"The one that he asked her
not to buy but still, it makes him smile."
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I loved that line, it really described their relationship well for me, through the use of an example of an event that shows us an insight into their character. These opening lines were focused and creative and had me hooked. I think the poem moves at a suitable pace, my interest is kept throughout. The language use is clever without giving the impression that it is trying to be, which is important. The last line makes for a great ending, and draws the reader back to the title. Good poem, interesting and deserving of the front page this week." (10)

"Beautiful love poetry. There really isn't much more I can say. I love the title, I love what he did with this challenge. I thought every piece of it was absolutely brilliant." (10)

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"Our First Date," by The Poetess

"Let's start commenting on every little aspect of this piece: well, you cannot, literally, because each aspect is flawlessly penned. I honestly think this is the SECOND BEST poem I've ever read during my new judging duty (my first best was Price Tag). This poetess reminds me of an English version of (Siham Al Sha'sha' --- an Arabian poetess of Syrian origins). You can say that every stanza is a rainbow or a butterfly swirling around brilliant ideas. Honestly, I loved reading this more than once, and I swear with each read, I discover something new.

I've waited years for her
in forgotten stations, amidst
ghostly Winters and
hallow skies.
^ Who is 'she?'
- At first, I thought 'she' is her friend, her mom... And it's funny how this lesbian love idea surged through my analysis (just a thought).
But this is the best stanza for me though every stanza is remarkable.
Metaphorically, this poem penetrates the horizon of unreachable heights and dimensions (not exaggerating).
In this poem, the writer is trying to discover new depths in her persona and new characters besides confessing to herself, her own self, things most people are afraid of. And how you get this WOAH feeling when a turning point at the end surprises you. The 'she' is 'she' herself. JAW DROPPING." (10)

"Like many others who read the poem I imagine, I was not sure where this poet was headed with her piece until I reached the very end, and when I did, I felt like reading it over and over because it really did take me by surprise,
The content of the poem shows alot of skill, and how mature She can be, Very creative, and very deep.
I Really did love every single bit of it. All the way from the title to the very end, Great job." (4)

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Honorable Mentions

Several additional poets manage to brave the fray this week, emerging with poems that our judges thought worthy of wins. Congrats to all of you!

"The World as we Knew it," by Hellon aka Miss Take

"I really enjoyed this poem alot, It had a high sense of sarcasm, and while this poet was explaining her view of the world, her sense of humor was very noticeable, A very talented poet and a master piece." (7)

"I wish I could give this poem a proper comment, but there isn't much more to say than how amazing the truth within this piece is. This world has gotten so overly politically correct, and no one realizes no matter what you do or say, you're going to offend someone. This poet is always real, and that's what makes me love this poem even more." (4)

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"Marionettes With No Strings Attached," by Lebonese Phoenix

"I know this writer very well, and I think I know what he was talking about in this poem, I guess this was one of the best poems he's ever written, the opening caught my feelings right away, deserves a front page win." (10)

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"At Sea Again," by Melissa

"This was deeper than originally appaered on the surface, no pun intended. So much was said in a short piece. I like how 'you' was used, very effectively, it makes the reader understand that it is written to an unknown but definite person. This makes the poem very personal for the poet one feels. Also in the readers head, this other character in the poem the 'you,' builds up a character profile, with traits and personalities that are explored in the reader's imagination. A simple metaphor is used throughout and somehow, the writer is able to make a usually cliche image (struggling in the depths) quite original and interesting. Well done." (7)

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"Mistress of the Moon," by The Queen

"Beautiful tribute to a wonderful person. I thought this poem held a lot of truth and a lot of beauty. I love the imagery and the feeling this poem made me feel. It felt really strong and very inspiring!" (7)

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"Child -headed households!" by ronel7

"The reader will have chills after reading such a piece, because the message here was absolutely meaningful and really intriguing. Great work. Deserves my vote." (7)

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"Stumbling Block," by Mark Spencer

"People, people, people. Citizens of P&Q Republic. Isn't this worth a front page? TELL ME:

"I've become a stumbling block,
For those less than sincere.
Who only seek my words of praise,
On works they've posted here.

For when they don't receive those words,
They choose a bitter path.
And pass their judgment on my soul,
With a resentful wrath.

The friendship they had offered me,
Was given for a price.
My lack of comments on their work
Rendered them cold as ice."

^ I swear every word is true.
I discovered this old writer in here. He has counted comments, he doesn't take parts of discussions (I don't know why), but still, his talent is far beyond AMAZING. This poem was for me a block that stumbled across my way in choosing my 3 best this week.

What this writer is trying to deliver is simply, the following: when you comment on my work, you expect for me to comment also, and if I don't, you hold a grudge against me.

I think it's an important message, and I really hope, P&Q members to take this message into consideration.
AMAZING POEM." (7)

PSST: "At Sea," by ______... by Melissa!

Congrats all! :)

""At Sea," by ______"
^ bahahaha, don't know why but that's funny.

Congrats all!!

Thank you judges for taking the time to do this AND for commenting on your marathon-day-off!

Ha, just got in and changed it. It was submitted under a different name, so I wanted to double-check.

-Sibyllene

Congrats all :)

and thank you for the HM

COngrats everyone, thank you judges for all the hard work!

Congratulation to the winners and the HMs, but especially thanks to the judges who actually had enough sensibilities left to render well thought-out comments.

^^
LOL Larry!

Congrats to the winners and H'Ms :)

Congrats to the winners and HM's, some brilliant work here.

Congrats to all.

Thanks, guys and sincere congrats to all the others mentioned! :D

Congrats!

Congratulations! Woo!

Congratulations winners, H'Ms! :D and thanks judges.

Congrats winners & H'Ms! Great work. :)

Congrats H'Ms and winners!

Congrats to the winners an the hm.
Ah Karla.. sweet Queen of romance you moved outside of the beauty and penned beauty in dark form lol

wtg everyone

Congrats winners and HMs !!!