Weekly Winners - 10/17/2011

Weekly Winners

These Nights, Love; Abracadabra
'A love poem I enjoyed, which is quite a rare thing on this website. Simple in one way, and it exudes a feeling of comfort and intimacy. Life is going on around the speaker, and she is an observer of these lovers across the neighbourhood. But in the second stanza we see she is mainly focused on her own love, and how well it is described. No 'burning passion' or 'racing heart,' here, there is a sense that the couple are at quite a developed stage in their relationship, where they feel totally at ease with each other and still are passionate in perhaps a less obvious manner. A soft secret kiss on the neck is enough to show the love that exists between the pair. Beautifully written, beginning with descriptions of the ongoings of a small corner of the world and zooming in to a personal revelation of the nature of the poet's love for another. Excellent piece deserving of the win' (10)
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"Abby writes of the perfect kind of romance. The sweet, without being over the top or disgusting. She brings the simple pieces of love out and really that's what it's all about. She always makes me feel that people often overthink things, and in her poetry I feel it proves that it's those small, beautiful things that you need to hold onto in rough times. What a romantic and sensual poem, about sleeping ;) She is truly an inspiration." (10)
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This poem is a perfect display of how someone feels when they are in love, I absolutely loved everything about it, perfect choices when it comes to picking words, the image I portrayed was very vivid, and the metaphors used were indeed extra ordinary, Good job. (7)

And I Pull Away; Ms Sunshine
The poetess has pulled us into this poem with the wording and the metaphors she has used.
Suppose I might provoke in
your soul a spring revolution
to swing with your goodwill,
in spite of my winters being so harsh.
^ This really hit home for me. I find it so mind-provoking and studded with powerful emotions which were empowered by the words 'provoke in' and 'swing' and 'revolution' and 'goodwill' and 'harsh' .. Those five words gave depth to the poem as well as rhythm. Amazing piece of originality and creativity. (7)
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"This is very different from the type of poetry we read from Nana, which proves the changes in her life. She writes of beauty and still a trace of pain, but the ability of hope as well. This is a poem I think anyone can easily relate to - aren't we all afraid of being hurt? Another beautifully written love poem this week - I think the love bug has bitten PnQ!" (7)
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'This is quite intensly personal, but a piece that has a certain beauty to it and that one in which many people could sympathise with. I think the weather/season imagary works well, and the wording is well put together. The reader can feel the poets uncertainty and self-doubt in the final line, and wonders what past experiences had possibly left her scarred, winter-like and potentially unresponsive to the call of 'Spring.' A piece that intrigued me, and one I felt was crisp and focused without being overly self-absorbed in a way as to alienate the reader. Good job' (4)

Mistress of the Moon; The Queen
I enjoyed Reading every single word of this to be honest, this poet really does master the ability to describe anything she wants, and here, she did a perfect job on describing another person, And the choice of words was beyond perfection, Very descriptive indeed. (4)
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I want to say something first: I would have been happier and more satisfied if the poem wasn't about a PnQ member. Powerful words were used, making the poem denser and thoughts- provoking, "with crimson lips,
kohl-rimmed eyes;
of outraging curves,
and mesmeric laugh"
Those words make you want to imagine the person being described. They range from 'strong' words to 'dreamy-light' ones. And this diversity.. I like so much. may her innocence
be a shield
like a small umbrella
in the rain
^ I would like to clap-clap-clap in here, for this verse is: Indescribable! :) This drew a smile upon my face. I, stereotypically, thought of 'blonde girls'. Lol, I'm the naive in here. But it could be true.. Let me imagine that :D Amazing poem. (4)
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'So, so well-written, worth a front page win! Way to go, Myryn! You described Luna Blue as if you are within her soul, all this deepness, all this creativeness, darkness and smooth flow was to a member of PnQ, what an epic poem. I liked some of the metaphors that were seriously intriguing and clever, cannot say much about this poem, except: Excellent!." (10)

Honorable Mentions

Father; Lebanese Phoenix
Though we had many very excellent poems this week, this one stood out, filled with emotions, the poem described how some fathers can go astray, leaving behind them a path of sadness, loneliness And absolute chaos, all of these which were described perfectly, and while the flow and structure were perfect, the amount of raw emotions is what amazed me in this one. (10)
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"Oh gosh, oh oh lalalalala. Where should I start? where should I...I can't even describe this piece, what a wonderful job, Abed! You are the king of imagination, he imagined his father to be like this and wrote a poem about the sadness he would has felt and the bad life he would have experienced, that is so smart and proves that this poet should take MILLIONS for each poem, nicely penned, worth a win, applaudes." (7)

Her laughs are like a Friday night; The Poetess
I don't know. I just think that The Poetess, with every poem, she shows us something new.. original.. something of disparate air and soul. The title, this long one that draws your attention, makes you think of what's bound to be read. It drew me to read the piece, and as I did.. I felt: woah! This must be a 'big' something. The smooth style with the dreamy tone allures you as the atmosphere is drawn from the first line. I'll skip to the end to let you know what it was all about. It's about a PnQ friend, and that what wasn't expected, for me. Well, anyway, a distance was made by words in the first line. You can feel it. The two are longing to reach one another, but there are cyber space has its boundaries in reality. That's sad. 'Wavy words - Blue atmosphere - sunlit coasts' -- These smooth words has drawn in my mind a colorful scenery. Imaginable, yet unreachable.
and I at times drink pearls
while sinking and I apologize
^ This leaves me pondering... MY best two lines. Like a Friday Night, this poem is. So genuine, straight from the heart, friendly, mesmerizing, crafty, and awesomely studded with metaphors. (10)

Jessica; Larry Chamberlin
'A very profound short poem that is very economical, in that it says so much in so few words. In fact, this poem works due to its shortness. It takes only a few seconds to read but it opens up the readers mind to think about the growing-up/parenting process, and about how life doesnt always go according to plan. Little hiccups, intentional or not, caused by human hands or by forces outside our control, do happen along the way, its how we adapt to them that is important. That's what I got as the message of this poem was, especially with regards to being a parent raising a child but on a wider level too. There is no complicated language, no flowery descriptions or tricks; the words are there, they are raw and this too I think is essential in ensuring the poem works. In a way, the straightforward realistic language, that doesnt claim to be anything that it isnt, mirrors the reality of the message in the poem. I think all readers could glean something from this piece. It has been a long time since a poem has had such a quickfire but lasting impact on me. Well done' (7)

Void; Courageous Dreamer
"I think this was written for the recent marathon PnQ had, and it's so true. Anyone who wrote in that contest will know that you want to scratch your eyes out for the poetry you're writing to just submit ANYTHING to move along your team holds no emotion, no meaning. Some poets can continue to write with meaning, sure, but how many toilet and cat poems can you write that have heart in it? This poem sums up the perfect amount of frustration for poets, and I thought it was brilliant!" (4)
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"This poetess writes all-time-favorites writes, she never fails to draw me in, this one had an interesting title and a wonderful content, good job!"(4)

EDIT: Added comments by final judge. This judge had voted timely and the points were already calculated by the system in determining the winners.

Congratulations to the winners & fellow HMs; thanks for the HM & thanks for the judges' hard work.

Congrats everyone!

'Grats to all!

Congrats all.

Congrats to all the winners and HM's
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YAY :)

Congrats erryone.
And thanks for the HM

Congrats to all

Wait a minute, there is a judge who hasn't voted. Right?

* Edited: how come Mistress of The Moon won with an '8' and thee are poems that are in HM that have a '10'

Congrats all! :)

Well spotted Abed! I am curious too.

Congratulationnnnsssss
myryn....nana and oh abby your poem was OMGGGG

you all mastered !!!
WOHHOOOO

but oh I wanted Abeds poem to win, Father! FATHER!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOo

anyway, thanks for the HM judges you are doing a great job lol!

what else???? sir larry.....jessica is for sure proud of ya! :D

Unexpected ! thanks a lot for the judges and the comments, obviously the judges understood the poem 100 %, which is enough to overwhelm me.

Congrats for the other two great poets and the H'ms! amazing poetry, P&Qrs!

Lol, Nano<3

Congratulations everyone, keep up the great work. :)

Sibs (or other mods?) are we missing a judges comments/votes?

Thank you everyone and congrats to Abby and Nana, and HM's as well!

Yeah, I think, that might be the case, Brittness. :)

Thanks for posting Larrylarrybobarry.

I have to check, but I believe all the judges voted, but one still has to submit his/her comments.

Everyone voted
it's just that some people did not send their comments in time i believe
anyways this week poems were amazing. congratulations to every single wining poem and every HM

Wtg all, great poems one and all

Fanks, guys! I suspect I'm just riding the wave letover from the marathon, but I'll milk it for sure.

Congrats to the others and thanks to the judges and Larry.

Oh, oops, it looks like the final comments have been added after all. -1 for Powers of Observation.

I seriously hope they weren't added before I asked. LOL derr.

Can I say that they were Britt ;p/
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Wellll. I hadn't thought to post it til then. I'm blind, shhh! lol

Yes! Girl power!!! Congrats Ladies<3

Wonderful poems! Congratulations you three and thanks to the judges who gave countless hours to looking over these poems. Also thanks Britt, if your still putting all this stuff together, for organizing all of it! =]

Late as usual! Congrats to all this week, pleasure reading.

Aussy, it was Sibby (I guess?) who made this thread! =]

Oh, okay. Then thank you very much Sibs for making this thread! :)

Congrats!!

Close enough, although Sibs would have put much more panache into it.

Opps, I'm wrong! :/

It was Sir Larry! : D