My first attempts

Hi I'm new at this, i really haven't tried poetry since I was forced to in school, please rate and comment on my first poem in 15 years, "The Corruption of Tounges"

Ill look at it for you :)

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I liked it a lot, very good point in what you had to say.

I have written another 2, if anyone gets a chance take a look please, I'll gladly return the favor. =D

Thanks, your comments mean a lot,
I'm seriously considering doing more poetry, and in order to ascertain if it is beginners luck I have written another, if you would be so kind as to offer your opinions again :)
any tips on composition would be most helpful...
"orange aura"

Ill be more than happy to look for you!!

Ok this one is a little more serious, and a first attempt at an 'emotional' poem, please take a look at "Missing half" a poem about lost love, and the characters' regret over the choices he made

Okay ill go look now