Song Title Poetry Contest Review

Hi
Thanxs for participating in my poetry contest and I hope you enjoyed and had fun :)

This is how I scored the poems:
5 points for entering
Emotion-10pts.
Rhyme-10pts.
Flow-10pts.
Spelling-10pts.
Wording-10pts.
Imagery-10pts.
Poem-10pts.
(how good it was done,ect. And depending on how much I liked it)
Title-3pts.
(if poem involved song or song title)
Extra-3pts.
(if you created your own poem title)

Rewards:
1st Place: 20 COMMENTS; 25 RATES; 1 NOMINATION!
2nd Place:15 COMMENTS; 20 RATES
3rd Place: 10 COMMENTS;15 RATES
4th Through 6th Place: 3 COMMENTS; 5 RATES
7th And Up: 1 Comment; 3 Rates!

Winners:
1.Larry Chamberlin The God Father
-Peace For The Fighter
(fighter by Christina Aguilera)
2.Lebanese Phoenix AKA Abed
-Flies On Fire
(Fireflies by Owl City)
3.Roses and Lilys
-You Lost Me by Christina Aguilera
4.Biya
-Only Hope by Mandy Moore
5.The Poetess
-Hungry Eyes by Eric Carmen
6.Dollwithafrown
-Little Sparrow by David Cook
7.TJ Becker Airzona eagle
-She's Like The Wind by Patrick Swayze
8.Biya
-Somebody's Me by Enrique Iglesias
9.Beautiful Chaos
-Core Of My Addiction by Fireflight
10.Larry Chamberlin The God Father
-Toxic by Britney Spears
11.Roses and Lilys
-Cut by Plumb
12.Flynel
-Somebody's Me by Enrique Iglesias

Great job everyone you all did terrific and made this contest a very hard contest to score and everyone's poems were lovely,,I loved them all

I will post a review on everyone's poem soon
And thank you once again and great job,,,all shinning stars in my eyes :)

Thank you, Kristian, and thank you for making this contest happen.

Ur welcome,,it was great an very busy keepin my mind occupied at the end :) but fun and great
And I'm pretty sure everything was well deserved :)

Congrats to everyone! :D
Sir Larry, you rock! thanks for this contest, it was fun! x)

P.S. You didn't tell us to rhyme the poems? how did you count the points based on the rhymes? it wasn't one of the rules.

Thanks Kristian :)

way to go Larry.

Sorry that's just how I thought I score,,I don't believe it affected anything but I guess I should have mentioned somethin,,,it is my first contest still getting used to how to do things an I just wanted to do somethin fun,,,but everyone won something

Lol, Did You Copy My Rewards? Haha:)

It's ok. I just wanted to point it out because when you want to score you should read the rules. Some of us thought a free verse would be more effective, so...yup. ;)

Congrats to everyone! :)

Innocent Fairy, thank you for 6th place. Very happy with that considering the talent in this competition was huge. Should we PM you the poems we want you to comment, or...?

Hey Thanks fairy :)

Ur welcome everyone,,,if u wish me to read certain poems then u may PM them to me if u want but if not I'll just read what I want :)

Ok so I've got the reviews done sorry took so long and I'll finish doin the rewards soon,,thanxs :)

Larry Chamberlin The God Father
Peace For The Fighter (fighter by Christina Aguilera)

Automatically 5 points for participating
Emotion-10pts.
Rhyme-8pts.
Flow-10pts.
Spelling-10pts.
Wording-10pts.
Poem-9pts.
Title-2pts.
Imagery-4pts.
Extra-3pts.

Total points earned: 71pts.

Words I liked best:
Gin, Scarcasm, Scorn,
Decades, Modicum, Standards,
Means, rending, chase,
Receding, Challenge, Satisfied

Favorite lines/stanzas:

Why did you make me fighter?
Thought you did me a favor

Cut to the bone sarcasm

Haunted by your scorn;
took decades to let go.

Without the heart rending

The important thing is becoming
satisfied with who I am
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Why did you make me fighter?
Thought you did me a favor

- this to me came across strong in sending the message and strong emotion,,,a great beginning to suck the reader in for the rest of the poem

with gin soaked breath, and
cut to the bone sarcasm

- this to me was sayin who this person was and how she nagged you or maybe how they were a drunk

Looking down from the top
of a house on the hill
haunted by your scorn;
took decades to let you go.

- this stanza had great an strong imagery as you can see a house on a hill an someone lookin from a window dwelling and drowning in sorrow and struggling to move on

Others rest easy in their
modicum standards and means
without the heart rending
chase of the receding target.

-I feel this is how everyone you see around you is in love or lusting but no broken heart like you an their chasing their desires

Still the challenge is there
not for success- that's too easy;
the important thing is becoming
satisfied with who I am.

- this is like it's easy to find a replacement and easy to move on but that's not important cuz you got lost or confused or somethin like that and you don't care for someone else and you just wanna focus on you and find your self

A very fantastic poem I loved it

Labanese Phoenix aka abed
Flies On Fire (fireflies by owl city)

5 points for participation
Emotion-7pts.
Rhyme-0pts.
Flow-10pts.
Spelling-10pts.
Wording-10pts.
Poem-10pts.
Title-3pts.
Imagery-10pts.
Extra-3pts.

Total points earned: 68pts.

Words I liked best:
Oaken, Fuzzy, Untamed, Hastily,
Starlit, Ivory, Gleams, Throbbing,
Hypnotizing, Drift, Kinky, Myraid,
Fluttering, Amidst, Weary, Ballads,
Succumbing, Inhale, Jovial, Tranquility,
Exhale, Flicker, Lustfully, perchance,
Twinkle

Favorite lines/stanzas:

As untamed waters flow
against me hastily

Through a starlit sky,
an ivory moon gleams

And I drift with kinky air

Fluttering amidst damp grass

Love ballads

Succumbing to warm nights

As my dreamy eyes
sigh and flicker,
lustfully...

Perchance they twinkle again,
with a handful of fireflies.

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Though I did not feel much emotion fromthis poem I still loved it from all the wonderful wording that also helped this poem in imagery,,,it's a very vivid poem as I can see low hanging trees with bushy bushes by a lazy slow moving river and you think and stare at all the beauty all around,,,the starlit sky with a gleaming moon,,,how the warm July winds arouse you and the daisies flowing amidst damp grass

And maybe in the end I see you showing your love in this beautiful spot,,opening your hands as the fireflies flutter out and float around the two of you and they twinkle and gleam making everything perfect

A very delightful poem

Roses and Lilys
You lost me by Christina Aguilera

5 pts. for participating
Emotion-10pts.
Rhyme-0pts.
Spelling-9pts.
Flow- 10pts.
Wording-10pts.
Poem-10pts.
Title-3pts.
Imagery-10pts.
Extra-0pts.

Total points earned: 67pts.

Words I liked best:
Eroded, Deceit, Shame, Derserving
Embraced, Fierce, Clutched, Affections,
Unchecked, Sore, Sorrow, Moped,
Enveloped, Flame, Trance, Pitta-full state,
Nerve, Senile, Content, Immature,

Favorite lines/stanzas:

Trust lost, eroded over time
Lies; deceit.
That's all I ever got.

It hurt at first; something fierce.
Felt like a hand
clutched my heart.

in the darkness I moped

Anger enveloped me like a flame

in the senile dreams of a loser

I'm over you
and your immature ways.

..............................

This poem had a strong emotion and a sense of humor

I laughed in your face

Sorry honey,
that only happens
in the senile dreams of a loser.

Now go cry
go cry to your mommy

You could feel strong emotion,,,shame, embarrassment, sadness, anger, hurt

You can vividly see a girl crying and feel that she's moved on and that fact that he wants her back is funny
I just loved this poem very greatly done

Biya
Only Hope by Mandy Moore

5pts. for participation
Emotion-4pts.
Rhyme-10pts.
Flow-10pts.
Wording-4pts.
Spelling-10pts.
Poem-7pts.
Title-2pts.
Imagery-10pts.
Extra-0pts.

Total points earned: 62 pts.

Words I liked best:
Waves, Caves, Stays,
Shock, Till, Fate,
Moonlight, Reflect

Favorite lines/stanzas:

Footsteps of my own
Taken away by the waves
All joys with air blown
As I stand alone in the caves

Glancing at the stars
Sitting on a rock
I tried to find how far
I came with this shock

Moonlight will reflect our shine

What's written in my fate
Yet with a hope I go

...........................

I loved how you wrote this poem,,the imagery of bein on an ocean and coming with a shock that this guy you love has always been around and you never realized till this moment of thinking of who could be your only
How you try to think what your fate is and you pray it's with him only an always forever and I think the rhyming tied it all together

A delightful poem indeed

The Poetess
Hungry Eyes by Eric Carmen

Participation- 5pts.
Emotion-8pts.
Rhyme-0pts.
Spelling-10pts.
Flow-10pts.
Wording-5pts.
Poem-10pts.
Title-3pts.
Imagery-8pts.
Extra-0pts.

Total points earned: 59pts.

Words I like best:
Lock, Slumber, Jungles,
Wooden, Inspirations, Swords,
Star-shaped, Misery, Emptiness,
Reveries, Tint, Sleepy dawn,
Trills, Amidst, Dusty, Cerulean

Favorite lines/stanza:

Whether between
the jungles of my
wooden words,
where inspirations
lay down their swords.

Beneath the tent
of my star-shaped
misery, cuddling
within the emptiness
of time.

Whether amidst my
dusty loneliness
or above, within the
cerulean coat of God

...................................

A very good read I loved it and how you fantastically worded the poem mad your poem very good and wonderful it was not to strong in imagery but it had vivid moments and I felt the emotion was not that strong but maybe the desire was great your longing to explore the world experience love as your parents told you very strictly to not dream to not wonder and dwell on what is evil or something you know you'll never have
I loved this poem and it was greatly written
Fantastic

Dollwithafrown
Little Sparrow by David Cook

Participation- 5pts.
Emotion-8pts.
Rhyme-0pts.
Spelling-10pts.
Flow-10pts.
Wording-8pts.
Poem-10pts.
Title-1pts.
Imagery-7pts.
Extra-0pts.

Total points earned: 59pts.

Words I liked best:
Nest, Cradled, Pulse,
Firecrackers, Rainbows,
Clings, monstrous, Chirps,
Might, Infant, Frame, Halt,
Rapid, Flutter, feathers

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Not too strong in emotion but I loved how you've written this great poem,,interesting and the great wording added flare and helped the emotion to be felt,,it was very creative and flowed greatly,,,nice work,,I loved reading the wonderful poem

TJ Becker Airzona eagle
She's like the wind by Patrick Swayze

Participation- 5pts.
Emotion-4pts.
Rhyme-3pts.
Spelling-10pts.
Flow-5pts.
Wording-10pts.
Poem-8pts.
Title-2pts.
Imagery-7pts.
Extra-0pts.

Total points earned: 54pts.

Words I liked best:
Pearl moon, Tease my skin,
Indigo sky, Sensual, Thunder,
Disperses, Chaos, Scathe,
Cleaves, Torrent, Brittle remains,
Absolute, Ruins of passion

Favorite lines/stanzas:

The entire poem

Imagery:
She moves on,
Ruins of passion,
Pearl moon-shinny,glossy
Indigo sky,
Clouds cover the sight
Thunder and lightening,
Stole his heart,
Broken branches,
Stealing all he had/gave

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There is alot of imagery in this fantastic, beautiful, lovely poem,,,it is very dreamy for me or any reader I would believe and shows sadness and lost love for sure,,,I think the imagery was strong expessially from all the fantastic wording a delightful read and amazingly written

Biya
Somebody's me by Enrique Iglesias

Participation- 5pts.
Emotion-7pts.
Rhyme-7pts.
Spelling-10pts.
Flow-9pts.
Wording-0pts.
Poem-8pts.
Title-3pts.
Imagery-4pts.
Extra-0pts.

Total points earned: 53pts.

Favorite lines/stanzas:

Should I tell you?
What I felt
The moment you left
'cause my heart you theft

Daily without you
I go through hell
you know I needed you
whenever I fell

I wish you were here
when my eyes roll tear
I wish a day to come
when we should be near

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This is a simple poem with fantastic rhyming and perfect flow,,, except one slip in stanza 3...

There's no one but me
standing alone all night
why could you not see?
Why could you not forget the fight?

But I loved it and the simplicity is refreshing,,,I enjoyed reading this wonderful poem that's fantastically written, a magnificient peice, very well done as the simple written poem was amazing

Beautiful Chaos
Core of my addiction by Fireflight

Participation- 5pts.
Emotion-4pts.
Rhyme-3pts.
Spelling-10pts.
Flow-10pts.
Wording-6pts.
Poem-7pts.
Title-1pts.
Imagery-3pts.
Extra-0pts.

Total points earned: 49pts.

Words I liked best:
Freedom, Independence, Prisoner,
Nor, Peace, Liberation, Bonds,
Revolution, Pure release, Unrestrained,
Wanton, Inhibitions non-existent,
Unconstrained, Core, Addiction
My favorite lines/stanzas:

Each stanza is my favorite
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the wording was not too impressive but I loved it the wording you have made it a strong peice, wonderfully written, not too much emotion felt but I loved how it seemed patriotic, it's very intriguing and I had to read it over and over again I loved it very nicely done as everything was super fantastic
A great wonderful poem indeed