Weekly Winners 12/4/2011: surprise..surprise

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NOTE: this thread was posted early,else.. it would have been posted late, since we have a tie and I will have to wait till I come back home tomorrow (late at night) and reorganize it! so it's only an exception for this week, that the results are posted before they appear on the front page...just to avoid making you all wait)

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Let's start this thread by thanking our new judges for their dedication and for taking this position;
offering this community some of their precious time because judging the weekly contest became a bit tougher since it's currently showing a lot more poems than it once did before...And thank them for their commitment and for having all the comments and votes ready on time! (please keep it that way)

Our front page this week will be sparkling by our English 20 years old Charming Prince Danny who's representing "Fragments of Poetry" club by both his winning poem "Her" and an H'm dedicated for "Daniela"!

Danny won by a total of 17 votes, snatching the 1st place
on the page beating his 37 years old fellow writer Meena kerish from India, who ranked the 2nd place by obtaining 11 points on her "Destiny Stretches Her Distance"
poem, causing Phoenix rising, to proudly rise.

However there's a tie between 3 other members who received "10" as a rating, and hence we will have to wait for the site to update itself until we find out who is the 3rd lucky poet who will be shining like me on the front page!

YET-I believe the 3 of them do deserve some credit, Well done for The Poetess(Nano), for Jacey aka Courageous, and for Abed aka Lebanese Phoenix!
The 3 of you received 10 as a rating for your following poems :

I'm Not Fine, winter by The Poetess (10 pts)
Half Caf Coffee by The Poetess (10 pts)
LADY's SLIPPER by Lebanese Phoenix (10 pts)
Vulnerability by Courageous Dreamer (10 pts)

Danny after joining this website back, he won 16 times so far as for Meena she won 9 times! Will it be their last ? or the count is still on! Who will be the ones walking on the red carpet next week ? If you would like at least to
play a small part in choosing them, please don't forget to use your 3 nominations!

Here are the votes, and countless H'ms, these judges do have a serious different taste! fun..fun..

Her by The Prince/total points: (10) + (7)= 17

#The mood set with this piece is engrossing from the start.
It has a 50ish movie feel about it, like watching Dick Tracy and Greta Garbo in third person, with the poet somewhat detached from the scene.
This all adds to the mystique, with some great lines, as others have mentioned "I could breathe the perfume from her collarbones" a stand out. I must say I was unsure of the poems structure with the line breaks on first read,
but having read it a number of times it suits the poems style and feel.

The best poem i have read for some time. Kudos to the poet. Oh and a great last line!
(10)

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#Did this poet take writing lessons from Frank Miller? All that I kept seeing were noir images in a decrepit but cozy bar in a town where anything goes. The imagery put forth by this poet blew me away, I was drawn so far into the setting and almost felt that woman's breath on my ear. I would even go so far as to say that my mind was
stimulated even beyond the realm of this poets words, adding to the appearance of the woman and the setting. To me, this piece feels miles deeper than it looks on the surface. I can see a much larger story stemming from it and hope to see a lot more of this type of writing from this poet.
(7)

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DESTINY STRETCHES HER DISTANCE by Meena Krish /total points: (7) + (4) = 11

#This poem has a unearthly appeal, to the romantically inclined. To compare one's love to the planets, the sun and the moon is always so very exquisite in the language of love. The poet has used, Jupiter and Venus here, and perhaps also the Sun. I have to sigh, jealously hold my heart and utter my ooohs, and aaahs, when someone
describes the vivid imagery of love set in the ethereal world. I wish, I only wish, (and bet you all do too!)....that I can have something like this in my dry life!

The interpretation was somewhat difficult when the poet switches from being Jupiter in the first stanza to being Venus in the last, but then one has to keep with the flow that love can assume any form, to please the lover.

The metaphorical depiction of love using the celestial bodies is what makes this poem stand out. There is not one stanza which is better than another. Each one is passionate, some more than others.
But the two best for me were:

Grand you look with captivating colors and gossamer ring,
how I yearn to be the one queen for you oh mighty king.
Holding me in your arms I want to ride on your windstorm
as we revolve in passion around planets both cold and warm.
(7)

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#So in my opinion, Meena has written a definite masterpiece here, for those who can take their love for each other to an empyrean level, something out of this world.

The input of the planets and solar system here seems very original in the way it was incorporated into the piece.
The layout itself is eye-catching and once read, this piece
leaves an imprint on the heart.
The flow I felt was very good and the rhymes were added well.
The aura was romantic and hopeful and I liked that,
A real beautifully piece
(4)

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Possible H'Ms (any of the following 4 poems may end up on the front page, it all depends on the website, it will automatically pick one of these tied up poems regarding certain strategies.

I'm Not Fine, winter by The Poetess (10)

One thing that always intrigues me in The Poetess' pieces
is the emotional content. I was captivated by the opening,
as if this was an addition to already spoken thoughts.
The language was unusually simple for this writer but it
held much sadness which evidently made the piece feel deep and gave me an emotional time in reading. I felt accustomed to warm the heart of the lost girl. That ending was cliche yet original and the content flow flawless.

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LADY's SLIPPER by Lebanese Phoenix (10)

Unusual and thoughtfully drafted is the best way to describe this poem. The flow, the metaphor's and the vocab is probably the best in this week's poems. The poem is one of the best nature poems ever written with a romantic mindset, that I have seen here. The metaphors at ever turn are just amazing.

Alluding to capricious (=whimsical) ma cherie (feminine) = my love ma (feminine) = my love, or beloved, was a very unique way opening stanza. If there was not the last stanza to give it away, it would have been easily passed as a love poem.
Each stanza's/lines is loaded with interesting metaphor's, e.g......
"I have wandered the two hemispheres (implying the entire world) to find you, but when found still could not place you under my arid (=dry) pillow",
is very heartwarmingly romantic.

"So haughty for a first world-er", alludes to the metaphorical arrogance
for a "first world-er" (I think LP probably meant a "third world-er"= someone not living in US, here). As this unique flower of the orchid family is found
mostly in the Northern hemisphere (US, Europe), is also the State flower for Minnesota. Hence, using the phrase "I'm no more than a Minnesota punk in your pink kingdom", is so apt - took me on a research trip to figure this out.

"though I'm no more than a Minnesota punk in your pink kingdom" , was another
one which was crafty, and so well placed line. Minnesota punk rock, for naive people
like me, is a unique style of rock founded in the mid-1970's, with heavily distorted
guitar amplifiers playing high volumes, a signature sound for many punk bands of that region.
"Lady, you have slipped between my coverlets and dreams... , so romantic!

"And lately, all I could taste is your pouch-like lips drizzling their honey-syrup"....
Aha, the perfect climax, to a very romantic love (masquerading as a nature) poem.
But, beware LP, if you do try to taste the honey of the pouty lips of this plant, you are likely to get a big-time allergic reaction. The plant is known to cause a severe skin reaction on the hands and face.
Beauty comes with its poisons for the unsuspecting!

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Half Caf Coffee by The Poetess (10)

There's something about this piece that draws me in.
The constant use of short stanzas can often be jarring
or might seem a bit to simple, but this is not the case here. When coupled with the beautiful and at times heavy imagery, the length of the stanzas (and the poem in general) keeps the pace without causing the reader to become too bogged down by visuals.
I love the descriptive words used and the last stanza caught my attention. I read it over and over again without losing any interest. I was very
intrigued by the apparent message in those lines. It seems like such an uplifting message but there is underlying bitterness or resentment. Just like the contrastive use of 'nectar' and 'bitterness'. Wonderful!

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Vulnerability by Courageous Dreamer (10)

This writer has a way of painting things in one's head,
she is like one of those consistent artist that come across
as legends simply because they do not disappoint
with her,it is greatness after greatness after greatness

"beneath a tree of raspberries
that once ripened with my cheeks"
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now,it takes far more then just creativity to even come up with things like that.

this write melted my heart, and that ending when you reach that ending,sadness at its best too beautiful .

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Definite H'Ms :

11:12pm by Melpomeme total : (4) + (4) = 8

I like the concept a lot. I get the feeling that there is confusion between 11:11 and 11:12 here because of the mentioned loss and/or failure on the narrator's part. I appreciate this greatly, it's a really creative and thoughtful way to back up belief in folklore and wishes. I really enjoyed the opening stanza - it drew me in immediately. As for the poem as a whole, the flow was very nice and felt natural which was one of the biggest things that caught my eye.

I think that war and battle compared with love and loss is a bit cliche but it worked! I guess I am a bit of a sucker for cliche. I also enjoyed the anthropomorphic pencil being begged not to sketch
- a very nice touch. (4)

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11:12 PM By Melpomene

this poetess,
is often rolled up in all her metaphors and she catches
the attention of everyone with all her complexity,
but every once in a blue moon. she has this thing,she tip toes out of her comfort zone..and put the complexity aside and BAM! this is what you get,

a write that hits you like the waves with rocks sometimes,
I had to do some research on the proverb she was speaking about in this write..
and it goes like "Let her be as the loving hind and pleasant roe; let her breasts satisfy you at all times and be you ravished always with her love."
and it fits perfectly in the poem, and the fact that she
only wrote the number of the proverb instead of the whole thing gives it this mysterious feel..

"With the night sky
that lingered
beneath my eyes"

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I never knew you could have the sky lingering beneath your eye, but when you dig deeper I guess it means
being sleepless and having dark circles beneath the eye..

what a clever,clever metaphor..
I'm speechless. (4)

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I want By Melissa (7)

A beautifully constructed poem, Here is a great example of a poem that has no need for glitter or flowery language to convey deep emotion,
No, but words constructed in such a way that we are drawn within the skin of the poem "thighs loaded like eager guns with all the ammunition of suggestion"
As The Prince also mentioned in his critique, these two lines are brilliant, creating deep erotic imagery. Each time i read this poem more is brought to the surface.

I want to talk about it more!

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Markers by Britt (7)

The innocence of children really sticks in my mind once reading this, it's one of those poems that you can read over and over, we all wish at times to go back to being childlike amidst the misfortunes of life.I sensed some anger yet a touch of forgiveness in the piece,
each image was painted with sincerity and gentleness yet I sense all in reality is gentle. The flow was flawless throughout the piece

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Until we find our humanity

by The princess

first of all,I like how in this write she states that her writings has become "empty and void of poetry"

yet,she couldn't have described the pain she feels in a more poetic way.

this princess,is like the Maya's in mexico if I must say,you know how in history they used to disappear just like that..

but then she comes back,
and grasps us by the hand with this write,
I loved loved loved the use of "sir"
in this piece,
It almost makes you feel as if she was talking to someone,perhaps God..

it could almost be seen as if she was in prayer,
and saying that she is done,and has nothing to give anymore.

this write really makes you reflect on things that are happening,not only where she is at now,but everywhere..

"This age is graceless, Sir.
There is no bringing children in this"

it is just so true,this world needs a rebirth..

withing all the simplicity,this writer has done a beautiful beautiful job
what a heartfelt write. (7)

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ROUND AND ROUND by Lofallenve (4)

This love poem is another very well written and uniquely worded verse. The title seems to be from Selena Gomez's album Round and Round, but has been used so effectively here that it outdoes the lyrics themselves!

Spin me round and round,
On your web of mendacity--
I'm your little fly caught up
In these sweet little stories,

The word which stands out here is mendacity = lies.
Depicting oneself as being in love despite the lies,
reflects a deep affection, very forgiving, despite the
shortcomings of the lover.

I'm your little wasp, Attracted to your honey words,
Drowning in the jar of sugar water.
These lines are so sweet.....honey sweet, what can I say.
In the light of your grandeur,
I'm your little moth,
Drawn to the body embracing flame,
Burning to a black ash,

A moth in the light of "your grandeur" (=greatness)
who is drawn blindly in to the flame, only to burn away to
ashes with its love for the flame....penned so lovingly!

Just to feel your strong arms against me.
Suspend me up with pins and needles,
I'm your little butterfly,
Like a child with a magnify glass,
I'm your little ant,
Writhing in your scorching sight.

Who would not want someone like this, who is willing to endure the worst pain, to be with his/her lover.
So touching...I am blown away!

Like a sick little puppy,
To its abusive owner,
I keep coming back,
Round and round.
A really beautiful ending to a superb love poem, written
by a relative newbie to PnQ. Envious choice of words,
throughout. One of the best, simple love poems that I
have read from a feminine point of view.

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Daniel by The Prince (4)

A poem of innocence and tragedy, a common enough theme where a moments distraction ends in heartache. Here the poet has given us a well thought out, well rounded beginning
middle and end with excellent word choice creating precise imagery. The poem is littered with stand out lines "crimson lost in turquoise " one of many. I also like the use of the second language, it gives it an exotic touch and gives more emphasis to the mothers distraction,
what was said is of little consequence to the poem. Well done!

Thank you so so much. Everyone thank you. You don't realise how grateful I am.

Congratulations and thank you again to all of you beautiful people.

Congrats to all winners and HMs this week.

HALLELUJAH for those amazing judges! :)

There are some comments that made me: WHAT THE HELL??? -- some judges seem to have wide general knowledge and flawless poetic tastes...

CONGRATS Danny, Meena, and (Noura or CD) :)

You really deserve those wins!!

and for the HMs too ..
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Thank you Mr or Ms judge for that sweet comment!!! I now have a smile from ear to ear :)

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>>> for a "first world-er" (I think LP probably meant a "third world-er"= someone not living in US, here).
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^ LOL hahahha :p that is so true!! I was just trying to imagine that I live in Minnesota, that's why '1st world-er' ..... and Lady S is haughty for that!! :p

And :p lol, I swear I'm loving that judge!!!

"But, beware LP, if you do try to taste the honey of the pouty lips of this plant, you are likely to get a big-time allergic reaction. The plant is known to cause a severe skin reaction on the hands and face.

Beauty comes with its poisons for the unsuspecting!"

^ That sure I didn't know.... :p Thanks for the info!!

And thanks for the beautiful comment...

---------------------- Best of luck judges :)

SO it's Abed, Congratulations for your poem, very different, it's your 3rd win since you joined! Congrats, let's see more of that!

Congratulations to the winners and the HMs!

Thanks to the new judges (who all were in before 9:30 Sunday am)

And thanks to Nana for taking on this responsibility!

Congratulations to the winners and HMs! :)

Congratulations

Thanks to the new judges (who all were in before 9:30 Sunday am)

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yap they rock!

My 2nd win, you mean :p

But thanks NaNaNaNANANANANA:)

Oh LMAOOO i was checking your profile and saw this
"The Poem of All Poems [WIN] (17)" hahaha really tricked me

Congratz winners!

Congrats, winners and HM's!

Congrats all!

Indubitably, congratulations!

Congrats to those who won and were HM's!!!

The poems were wonderful!

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Congrats!!!

Congrats. Well deserved winners and HM's.
xxxxx

Congrats all winners and HM's. Great job!

Thanks for posting, Sunshine flower :)

Great work judges on your first week! also thank you for the HM's, appreciated as always.

Congrats Winners & HM's, deserving I'm sure.

Thank you judges and congrats to all the winners this week :)