Weekly Winners 1/9/2012

Thanks judges for the amazing work, for the dedication and no bet for taking this position seriously!
[if there's any mistake while pasting and collecting your votes, please let me know]

Congrats for the winners (and for the votes given for me, really appreciated) and for the amazing H'ms, brilliant poems everybody! Keep the great work!

Winners and H'Ms:

*Maple Tree: 10+10=20
*Ms sunshine: 10+7=17
*Yaki: 10+7=17

*Kiko: 10+4 (14)
*Hellon: 7+7 (14)
*Mandy 4
*Lebanese Pheonix: 7
*Karla: 4
*Lostlove: 4
*Tara: 4

Acid Ghost
By Maple Tree (10+10)=20

I'm drawn to this short piece, it is captivating and well written. Its only 6 lines but packed full of meaning, which leads the reader on a merry dance of interpretations, thinking yes I think I've got it but wait, maybe I haven't. An intriguing write, and although my review maybe short what this poem conveys is not. Well done (10)

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Such a short piece,but so evocative. The emotion in this is unbelievable some people just rock short poetry while others need so much rambling to get their point across, can't find much to say really I keep reading the piece and I keep on falling in love with it..

"so the ghosts in my head
will not die of hunger"

I never knew ghost could eat..that phrase has me in a trance, I honestly wish it was mine..
Well done. (10)

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10 pointsAn eclipsed sunshine
By Ms Eclipsed Sunshine (10+7)17

When you read a poem with this much emotion, it changes your own path of thought,I can't comprehend the way this touched me, with the metaphors that were fantastically added surrounding the take of the German wine and just the sheer strength of the sadness in each stanza. The flow was flawless and unbelievably co-ordinated so that the tone stayed soft and sad until the very end, It was a piece of poetry that really spoke to the reader. We are often lost in ourselves, trying to find that person who we once were, and sometimes we search too hard to find what we crave that we forget that change can be good.(7)

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The title and the composition is so original, I knew it had to come from none other than the "Princess of sadness," someone who knows how to project the inner state of sadness so well. Once again, the symbolism using celestial bodies, the sun, and the moon will always get some attention. Most poets use the symbolism of the sun and moon in a love poem,
to describe how big, deep reaching or intense is their love. This poem, however, converts common symbolism in a most uncommon way, to project an inner sadness blocking one's "sunshine" (=happy feelings). Use of "Riesling", a sparkling white wine,
to describe sunbeams, that are "drunk"; "a river of blue light" to describe the flood of melancholic feelings "while I burn in the shadow of the solar eclipse" are amazingly used here to magnify the personification of the sadness within.

Though 'tis not a planet that is
blocking my sunshine, nor a silvery
coconut that others eyes do hope to reach..
But it is passing recklessly between
me and the earth...
This stanza captures the dark emotions so well, by expressing that it is neither a large
body (planetary), nor a silvery coconut (a full moon) as the cause of my eclipsed sunshine.
A thoughtfully worded riddle here:

Perhaps it is a world's new black wonder that
won't pass by just like a wandering gray cloud
no, nor will move on as the new moon is born

It is an everlasting eclipse that will conceal the love that the fraud beams once revealed. The above expressions, presented as a riddle, seem to refer to a sunspot (= a dark spot) that are blocking her sunshine (=warm and friendly nature), evanescent phenomenon caused by magnetic storms that disturb surface temperature, used here as a perfect analogy to describe the sad feelings causing the sunshine to be eclipsed, hopefully temporary like the sunspots.
A lovely ending, to this poem suggesting that perhaps some day a coffee storm (=sun storm) will stir up enough heat to clear the cooled down surface (=sad feelings) to clear the dark sunspot that is blocking her sunshine (=warm feelings) currently. In my personal opinion this last stanza could have been bettered by using "sun storm" instead of the "coffee storm",
to complete the metaphorical projection of the energy needed to clear the sunshine, of its dark spot, in the context of this wonderfully sad poem.

Unless a coffee storm hits deep down
my intoxicated core
I, will no longer be bright and wild.

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Enlighten
By Yaki Love (10+7)=17

I was immediately touched by this message that only we can make choices for ourselves,and lessons are taught through pain that we ourselves are strong and don't need anyone else to be so. The flow was undoubtedly smooth throughout, and each stanza fullof power and knowledge as if this reader has finally made sense of her life and her strength in
the world. I loved the gentle uplifting spirit, that just lingered in each line, that grew and grew to that ending that blew me away. (10)

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A simple yet very effective descriptive write, it almost has a whimsical feel to it. I like the way it conveys the stake in the ground approach, "this is me from now on'
which gives the poem strength, adding weight to the poems intent and meaning. I thought turning "my emotions into arrows, shovels and brooms" was very effectively carried over into the next stanza, which not only added added to the whimsical feel but also added impact, helping round out the piece into a very good poem (7)

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Hands
by Kiko (10+4) 14

This poem sort of blew me away. As I read it I became more and more disgusted at the imagery that flocked to my mind's eye. The first stanza presents itself like a modern day horror flick - the hands flying about and the panic and fear portrayed are very appealing to the senses given the topic of the poem.
As far as the rest of the poem goes, it never loses its finesse and does the theme further justice right until the bitter end. This is a poignant piece
and more than well deserving of the front page this week.(10)

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I don't know what kind of medication,magical pill or skill pill this writer has been taking, but he surely has been kicking some behind lately...the attention to detail here was amazing, "angry hands", I don't know if I'm alone on this,but personally..I have never
thought of hands being angry..hearts,souls,minds..yes but never ever have I thought hands so that really impressed me..

I love how the writer keeps the title connected to the poem it all revolves around them, first they are angry,then they are scrubbed clean and then they are praying..now that I think about it, "angry hands,then scrubbed clean hands,and then praying hands"

I see it all so well in my mind..this must has something to do with sin. The wording of the piece was excellent..and the message is so strong,
unbelievably strong.

Clever write.. sad,but clever. (4)

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Bleeding Crimson Rain
by Hellon (7+7) 14

Another poem that makes an effort to keep us aware of how terrible the world can be sometimes. This poem makes great use of historic references, although I'll admit I didn't catch that until after I read the footnote.

The subtle metaphor describing the 'birth' of the bomb that was dropped is very clever but what really catches my attention when I read this poem is the ending. The poet closes the poem by drawing attention completely away from images of death and destruction, bringing into play the quiet sadness that was and surely still is felt by millions of people.
This made a wonderful read.(7)

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"Little boy fell silently
from uncaring mother's womb"
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here,my mind scattered everywhere
I was thinking all kinds of things
I was like,drugs,,miscarriage,
abortion,young mother,not taking care
of the pregnancy..

it was only when I reached the 3rd stanza that I started getting the "idea",I got the Idea I was not even sure that it was about war..I love how many metaphors they are in this piece, I absolutely adored how she incorporated the true names of the weapon and made a story build around it, its like..
the writer was using her mind in a whole other way,
"oh little boy?,little boys need mothers right?,lets give it a mother then"

"Seventy thousand paper cranes
drift o'er Hiroshima skies"

loved the choice of "paper cranes" here,the "o'er" threw me off a bit,but that is just me being picky..
way to take an heartbreaking event,and turn it into such heartbreaking poetry..

I can't complain..amazing.. (7)

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Metaphorical Case Love
by Lebanese Phoenix

A pumped up humorous love poem, disguised as a life poem, by someone who is getting to be a master at
metaphorical projections, deserves some fun words of praise. The playful theme strikes the inner core
of any desiring lover's heart. If we want love from a person, we often hang around that person until
he/she finally notices us, or as LP says 'till he's caught". Any real life criminal would have long
departed from a real crime scene, but this is not a ordinary criminal, it is LP (a go getter, dashing Lebanese Prince of words) and his projection of desired love as a "crime". Made me smile, as it is very true. Difficult to let go if we truly desire someone with our heart, sometimes even with a "no". The expression "My case in love..." very much sounds like a "heart sick" patient, googly eyed in love! Funny and lovely! The "attempted to murdering...." stanza to project infatuation is uniquely Abed style :), shocking and eye-catching. God save his intended target
if she wants to get away from him! For she may not have anywhere to run, if he decides to throws out his metaphorical knife (=pen) at her. But for now, she is safe, as he hasn't figured out exactly how to "murder" her heart. A "love criminal" who just wants to be arrested "red-handed." I have to say I am just love smitten with your metaphorical case! Worthy nomination, perhaps a winner in many a playful hearts. (7)

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Sweet Taste of Satisfaction
by Tara Kay

I love this. I'll admit, as a male I was very intrigued by the apparent sexuality involved in this poem. At first it seemed rather explicit to me...I thought "What
is this doing on the nominations page?" I read a bit farther and I still wondered. Then when I least expected it...right at the very ending, the poem was about chocolate.
Chocolate!

I really think that this is a wonderfully smart write. Excellent work here.(4)

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Origami
By Karla

Not often can one find a short poem that really touches the heart, It's the simplicity of folding paper and the way the ending gave that uplifting inspirational message that draw me to this poem. The flow was smooth and transitional and the break in the poem worked to the advantage here (4)

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Exit Sign
By Mandy

As always picking three poems from a long list is difficult, I gave this poem 4 points for a number of reasons. Firstly the first two lines catch your attention and draw you in, in fact I think the first stanza is the strongest. Yet the rest of the poem also remains strong.The title is apt and nicely incorporated within the poem. There was also effective use of alliteration. I question the use of Muddled after using Addled in the second stanza, and the phone "who' in the third, but all these are minor criticisms for what is a good read. Well done (4)

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A Human Touch
by Lostlove1

A beautiful and simple poem, a story of kindness and love bestowed upon a destitute child (a songbird here) and her rescuer, who adopts her as her own child that lifts your spirits up, miles high. The ardent appeal in this story is to every soul who has witnessed the love
between a doting mother and her child. Just warms your insides out! when you watch these loving moments. The title could have been a "mother's touch" and the songbird could have been a destitute human adopted child, and the story would have been the same. This poem is deserving of its nomination,
and the hard work put in by its author to bring forth the story of a loving bond between a hapless child (a songbird in this case) and her adoptive mother. The thoughts are so heartwarming, this time of the year. A very touching write for this week, amongst
friendship/life poems, for all mothers and animal/bird lovers alike, to appreciate (4)

Thanks for that sweet comment, and congrats all... especially to NaNa, you LTFR master!! :)

Congratulations to everyone! :)

And thanks for the HM! Didn't expect that at all, :)

xxx

Congratulations to all the Winners and HM's!!!

Such wonderful poems!!!

Well deserved to all x

Congratulations to everyone and I thank you judges for the awesome comments... really was a nice surprise~

Congrats Winners and HM's There were alot of great poems!!!

Thank you for the HM, sweet Judge :)

O(^_^o) yay!!
Congrats to everyone!

Congrats everyone.

But Origami was judged lat week.I had 7

Origami
by Karla

I've had my eyes on this little jewel the whole week, as I gathered my thoughts about it..all I can say is that those few little words probably touched
me more than any long poem ever would..I appreciate the explanation the writer left behind as well,it only adds more to the purity of the poem.

when I finished reading I too,
felt a sense of peace inside..

"When the bird was completely folded,
it was her who could finally fly"

I can't even grasp onto the depth of that phrase,it could be so many things...huge creativity in here,like major.What a dazzling heartfelt poem, I think it could even be used as some slogan for an origami campaign or so..

such beauty,such sincerity
I'm speechless really.(7)

And it was judged again this week.HOW COME?

Congratulations to everyone! :)

Karla - because of the date it was posted and nominated, it rolls over into the next week.

Congratulations to all the Winners and HM's

*Yakari: 10+7=17

NANA -___________-'

yakari is my alter ego oke.

:)
Congrats everyone!!!!

Congrats guys!

Narphy, is that you???

Hahahahaha it is!

Narph did you photoshop a picture of you and Nevi together? haha.

Congrats to the winners, very lovely reads! Great work judges as usual and thanks to Sunshine flower for the posting.

Congrats to this week's winners and thanks to the 2 judges for their indepth comment on Crimson Rain....very much appreciated.

Mel... I don't know what you're talking about.
My name is Nerp.

Congratulations to all three winners and the HMs..
Good work judges, thank you.
Thanks, Nana & congrats, too.

EDIT: Wait, is that "Nerp" or "Perp"?

It's Nerp! :D
Congrats winners!

Congrats!