I need help!

I wrote the lyrics for the song, but since I do not know much English, it certainly needs to be corrected. Please watch it and help me. Thank you!

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it doesn't happen as much as it should
and i'm trying to get to the core
i think i'm able to find the truth
and maybe something more

but I'll try to be careful
cause I know that
love is like a narcotic fumes
cause I know that
love is song full of toxic grooves

it doesn't matter day or night
i fall to the depths of your soul
i want to feel the dizzying delight
i'm gonna lose control

come to me,
feel the thrill
share the secret
lift the ban

spit on all caution
i know
love is like a narcotic fumes
cause I know
love is song full of toxic grooves
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I think the poem is good.

I agree, your song is really good. There's a few minor grammar errors, but no worries. Near rhymes are perfectly fine; you can make the rhyming work with the way that you sing your lyrics.

But I would suggest that you get rid of the "a" in "love is like a narcotic fumes" because "fumes" is plural and doesn't need and "a". Plus, it helps the rest of your lyrics flow better, but this is just my opinion. It's your song, and the only thing that matters is what YOU think. Hope this helps.

Rusheena' right..!
your poem is.good and only need to be rectified on.the grammatical side...:)

Rusheena's got it all yeah.
"love is song full of toxic grooves" < just add "a" before song and you're fine :)

Ummm yeah I luv this poem it speaks to me