GOOYCZ Comments & Scores

GOOYCZ Comments & Scores

CONGRATULATIONS TO ALL!!!!!!!
THE FINAL ROUND WILL SHOWCASE THE TALENTS OF THE TOP 5 POETS

1
I Do (Palindrome) 95 + 96 + 85 = 276

J1: Well done! I love this form, elegant and strong piece...It makes the reader think...It brings the feelings of nervousness and second thoughts that often happen just before a wedding...very nice~ On a side note: I love the diamond ring, very creative

J2: The wording and presentation of this Palindrome is very close to excellent

J3: Loved it. Short and precise, yet I could imagine the whole scene.
The diamond ring (I assume ;)) adds a stylish finishing touch.
Though I wish the poem was a bit longer.

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2 God's Gift of Life (Terza Rima) 90 + 97 + 80 = 267

J1: Heartfelt and emotional piece you have penned here... the form is elegant and dances..... This piece describes in detail the emotions and precious feelings....very pretty~

J2: The message is very strong for me delivered well in this Terza Rima

J3: I loved the last two lines the most. A lovely poem which can be dedicated to anyone who's going through hard times, inspiring and motivating them to live on.

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3 Forgotten Soldier (Kyrielle) 95 + 98 + 86 = 279

J1: Oh this piece tugs at my heart....a beautiful Kyrielle for starters, very nice. Then to top it off the emotional depth of this piece is captivating...our soldiers should never be forgotten....well done~

J2: Another very artfully done with a strong message

J3: //thought not given to one man's pain// this line that kept ringing in my mind ... I loved the way it's written.
//empty bedside, no one to see
ticket punched for that long black train// very touching lines...
vivid images of pain and sacrifice, well described.

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4 Invisible me / Suspicion (Kyrielle) 90 + 100 + 74 = 264

J1: I love the depth of this poem along with an elegant form..... the emotions and message is heartfelt....well done~

J2: This had a very strong poetic appeal for me and fit all the necessary requirements
for a Kyrielle

J3: well written. I liked the images of maligned vines and intertwined doubts.

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5 Sensuality (Palindrome) 90 + 95 + 87 = 272

J1: Elegant, passionate, and beautiful....well done~

J2: This is an amazingly sensual Palindrome

J3: a lovely sensual piece, brilliant work done on the form. The thoughts flow smoothly and effortlessly.

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6 Could it be you? (Kyrielle) 50 + 87 + 60 = 197

J1: I'll start off with the technical part first: This poem Is not a Kyrielle.
Here is the criteria for Kyrielle form:
A Kyrielle is a French form of rhyming poetry written in quatrains (a stanza consisting of 4 lines), and each quatrain contains a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the poem consists of only eight syllables. There is no limit to the amount of stanzas a Kyrielle may have, but three is considered the accepted minimum. (Shadow Poetry.com)
that being said... the message is heart gripping.... And I do love your word usage. If you tweak this poem up a bit, and place it to Kyrielle form, It can be an excellent piece~

J2: This one is labeled wrong, it is closer to a Terza Rima, but still not

J3: I loved how in the last stanza, the refrain fell beautifully in place.
Technically - A Kyrielle is formed by quatrains, 4 lines in each stanza not 3.

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7 Garden of the Night (Terza Rima) 100 + 94 + 91 = 285

J1: Oh I'm really loving this piece. The nature message flows like a song.... Word usage is delicate and elegant....
"Yet my soul, in the stillness of the night mourns
the trusty bough that once branched with leaves of gold
now left to bleed a silence that whips and scorns"
^^^^^^ BEAUTIFUL
In my eyes this is a WOW poem.... Very well done!!!!

J2: This is well written. Chime may not have been forced as it could be a metaphor for rhythm and the imagery stands out

J3: Beautiful and brilliantly crafted poem. Loved how the imagery revolves around vines and how each stanza develops the thought around it.
//silently weaving memories upon time// artistically expressed
And some wonderful alliterations too - mournful moon, scarlet shadowed
//Yesterday may shiver leaves brittle with cold
yet tomorrow brings promise worthy to hold// how beautiful, in both meaning and construct. The words roll out smoothly.

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8 Timeless (Terza Rima) 100 + 96 + 84 = 280

J1: I don't know where to start.... Speechless! Each stanza caused my mouth to drop.... Just an all around elegant Terza Rima!! The word usage is yummy!
"Tonight you were soy tea lights; winter cherry.
The fragrance of our last Christmas and hot air,
the taste of pumpkin pie and fresh raspberry,"
^^^^ HELLO!! The creativeness is priceless within this stanza.....
Beautiful.... Beautiful ~

J2: beautifully written with great imagery again

J3: Captivating imageries, the last two lines truly define the title of the poem. I felt there's a subtle hint of sadness and longing in the memories that were actually meant to be happy. Impressive expressions.
//somewhere, in a place never really there.// the line is missing a syllable

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9 Love, The Accident (Terza Rima) 90 + 93 + 82 = 265

J1: I read this piece several times... each time I caught myself feeling a whole "Bonnie and Clyde" feeling.... Forbidden reckless love thing.... Loved the message.....very nice!!~

J2: Very clever ending. A Terza Rima reading like a ballad original and creative

J3: A wonderful way to describe failed love. Very interesting imagery of forgotten highways and costly toll. Creative and unique metaphors.

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10 Ignite The Flame (Kryielle) 100 + 100 + 81 = 281

J1: What an inspirational piece... the inner soul and beauty comes from within...really love the message display here.... And as I've stated before, kyrielles have a certain flow... like a song and its felt within this pretty...pretty poem....very nice!!!~

J2: This one had such a flawless flow and artistic edge I can only give it a perfect score

J3: Very inspiring and uplifting poem specially the repetition, loved how the message flows smoothly in each stanza.
Why deny the beauty within// indeed. Thoughtful question.

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11 Lost And Found (Terza Rima) 80 + 92 + 84 = 256

J1: I really love this piece...
I'm going to start off my comment with a technical note first.
Just a simple typo error:
"I will aways dance with tigers and lions"
^^ I think you meant "always"
This poem is creative In so many ways...... the depth of love can be felt within this entire piece. My favorite part however Is the last stanza...
"Sometimes I look at you, you look right on through.
I will always lose coins, receipts, car keys, you."
^^^^^^ I got teary at the end....just wow... ~

J2: Very good but not the easiest flow for me to catch

J3: I found the first stanza very interesting; In the first two lines I somehow felt the writer is craving for attention even though she gets it. The laughter separating into ions sounds very creative.
//I will always lose coins, receipts, car keys, you.// This is my favorite line ... how the way writer has casually mentioned "you" along with other things ...
//I will always sail through oceans abroad,// This line is missing a syllable.
Overall a well written poem.

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The authors of the following poems will proceed to the final round!

GardenoftheNight(TerzaRima)
IgniteTheFlame(Kryielle)
Timeless(TerzaRima)
ForgottenSoldier(Kyrielle)
I Do (Palindrome)

Rules and directions will be placed tonight, when I return from Court
It will be the nobelist of forms!

Congrats for those who'll proceed to the finale. It's a wild competition..

Woo hoo~! COngrats congrats to those who made it past

Congrats everyone. Let the final battle begin.

All the best to those entering the final race :)

Congrats guys awesome job

Congratulations to everyone!!! The poems have been amazing and I wish all remaining the best of luck ;)

All amazing poems. It must have been a difficult task for the judges here so, thank you for the effort. Good luck to those going through to the final round, Wonder what Larry will come up with for the Grand Finale????

Larry went to court
and never came back
hasn't posted Round 4
is he just being slack?

Poets are awaiting
pens in hand
is he coming back soon
Oh!...now I understand!

The contest is over
Larry's gone to La Merce
no need to write anything
Round 4 is Blank Verse!

Larry....I'm getting pretty bored here right now...so it's not my fault honestly....

BUT THERE'S MORE....FINAL WILDCARD! only for members who have participated in the other rounds...

"Larry's still in court
but he messaged and said
I can have one more wildcard
the prize well....it's Fred..."

Who want's this prized cat-hat???

Write me a wrapped refrain... http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/wrappedrefrain.html

Send it to me..not Larry...he will probably never speak to me again haha!!! 24 hours folks...

<<< Look at the clock

Guess I'm stuck with Fred...he's bloody minging BTW...

And I certainly don't want the critter back either!
Hope your hair didn't fall out from wearing it.