GOOYCZ: Final Results

GOOYCZ: Final Results

Hellon:

"I think Larry may post the results tomorrow...not sure but...he'd taken his Akubra off and was wearing a top hat...ringmaster syle last I spoke to him..thinks it cool but it's lined with Fred the cat hat so...give him a wide berth haha!!! I just want to thank everyone who participated in this contest and...if you learned one form then...you are a winner in my books...One final thing..

BUT THERE'S MORE...

Last time I visited The Shed...I managed to Blag (that's scottish for steal) some mini ladders....you know the ones you use in your kitchen?....they have FOUR STEPS...would you believe that??? and he had plenty so.....each one of you are awarded a step ladder to climb right into Chelsey comp....how good is that!!!

Thanks again guys...it was a blast...for me anyway LOL!"

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Larry:

[Full dress tails. Steps to center of ring after Hellon hands me a giant top hat that has a strangely familiar aura (or aroma?)]

[Holds up extension rod in one hand, 4-step ladder in the other.]

LADIES & GENTLEMEN!

After Much Anticipation, the Judges Have Spoken. I give you the SONNETS and the COMMENTS. Don't skip to the end, revel in each poem and savor the comments for each. Then, and only then, peruse the summary and CELEBRATE THE WINNER:

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Round Four Entries, Comments & Scores

First, that sonnet about the impact of doubt in your life:
1 Renascent Doubts (Shakespearean Sonnet)

Born in the desert just like a sandstorm,
pulling every inch of strength to strike.
In the matter of seconds you transform,
from the fiery sands suddenly you spike.

Everything bows to the tone of your rage,
and time neglects its meticulous pace.
It's hard to determine what is your age,
you easily pause life for those you face.

It takes just one visit from you to plant,
the seeds for this long journey to begin.
An eternal torture is what you grant,
the weak souls of those you maturate in.

The furtive movements adopted by you,
conquers any heart without further do.

J1 This poem is a deep and thought provoking piece. Really enjoyed the message, however for me, the flow seemed a bit choppy in places... I will explain:
"you easily pause life for those you face."
"conquers any heart without further do. "
^^^ these two lines are beautiful... however, when you're restricted in a formed piece you really have to be careful with your word selection... to me, when I read sonnets I want them to flow... and both of these lines stumbled a bit while I read the poem...
In my opinion, Sonnets are difficult to write...very challenging and I think you did an overall great job... ~ 80

J2 This sonnet touched me deeply but without further ado I feel I must subtract four points 96

J3 Loved how the poet has developed the thought from starting to the end, with a smooth flow. None of the rhyme sound forced to me.
And I loved the title too. It gives a proper picture of the poem. Very well written sonnet. 10+20+25+32 = 87

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Followed by the ANIMAted illusion of love:
2 Dream Interrupted-- Shakespearean Sonnet

When we embraced upon an empty field
The soft tempo of our hearts intertwine
Engaging a rhythm only revealed
When the moon persuades the stars to align
Many whispers we exchanged on the breeze
Until our eyes only remained speaking
Time went on, our moments began to freeze
While above a sun is slowly sneaking
I feel your tempo escaping my chest
As dawn begins its reign over the sky
Another absence I'm forced to digest
My being can't stand another goodbye
Six o'clock a.m. my alarm clock screams
Tearing away the woman of my dreams

J1 This truly is a beautiful poem....the dream is romantic, beautiful imagery... and the ending message made me frown (only because of the sadness of waking up)The ending ties up the poem really nicely .... .... Very pretty piece~ 90

J2 This one flowed flawloessly and the sonnetform was an added bonus 100

J3 What a lovely piece, beautiful imagery, smooth slow and an ending that tugs at heart.
//Many whispers we exchanged on the breeze// I so loved this line. A very artistic visual .9+20+26+35 = 90

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Racing across your screen, James Dean's own spiritual heir:
3 Death Race

Pedal to the metal then slam it in four
Adhering rubber to steaming pavement
Smoke filling the air with the engine's roar
Unforgettable scent, strong and vibrant
Cruising on mountain roads without a care
As rock and roll music blasts through the noise
Relish the feeling of wind blowing hair
At home behind the wheel with unknown poise
Lights flash, sirens blare, a Smokey is there
Dust trail behind, the world becomes a blur
Tampering with the law, powered by fear
Blistering speed, headed for the slammer
Curve off the road to an old mountain trail
A single soul chose death, instead of jail

Smokey - Old American slang for a police officer

J1 I found this poem unique and fun... It reminds me of the old rocky mountain drag races.. (moonshine runs)...I could picture the race in my head.... Very nice piece...90

J2 A sonnet that also reads like a ballad written quite well 99

J3 Indeed speed kills,
//A single soul chose death, instead of jail// the last line is very touching.
I loved the narration, very descriptive, the reader can imagine each scene clearly.10+20+25+27 = 82

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Nest we slow down the tempo with that timeless sonnet to the discovery of the end:
4 Unforgiving

Tonight's dream was the choreography
of every moment I described you as
an acoustic city; your rib cage has
a sailors compass and maps modesty,
your language as unknown as honesty
and fierce like the identity of jazz.
Tonight was the last time I saw you as
the morning after curiosity

the familiarity of a scent,
the brush strokes in Monet's garden of France,
a thirty dollar cottage not for rent
housing an avalanche of starving ants
yet home to this unforgiving sonnet...
and the beauty of decay in romance.

J1 This poem blew me away...
The mixture of nature tones, art, romance, music and sadness all within a metaphoric sonnet, Is elegant and just brilliant.. LOVE this poem~ 100

J2 I always hate the forced rhyme criticism so I will take the blame of losing something in the translation of these complex metaphors 97

J3 The imagery in the first stanza is very interesting and creative.
//your language as unknown as honesty //
//and the beauty of decay in romance. // these two are very thoughtful lines.10+20+25+32 = 87

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And finally, that ode we were privy to hear of a beloved elder's passing:
5 The Sonnet of the Sun and Shadows
(Petrarchan Sonnet-Italian Sonnet)

These old feeble eyes weep 'neath raven's call
As thunder's distant edge doth touch the sand,
Born shadowed mist drifts, burning skies and land
As time flows in whispers, only to loll.
And through thorny dreams, cruel sleep shall crawl
Drowsing in the webs, of thy trusty hand.
Meadows blooming daisies shall wake and stand
A rising of breath for all big and small.
Mists melt into rainbows, from far and wide
As mountains of green tip blue painted skies,
While the moon slumbers ,'neath the breast of dawn.
Rays red as roses blush from the moon's bride.
As sprouts on the hilltop all start to rise,
Until the sun's curtains are slowly drawn.

(Petrarchan Sonnet-Italian Sonnet)
The first 8 lines is called the octave and rhymes:
a b b a a b b a
The remaining 6 lines is called the sestet and I used -
c d e c d e

J1 I felt like I was dancing In a rose garden under the moon alone, feeling sadness within such beauty while I was reading this beautiful sonnet....I adore this piece...very nice~ 95

J2 I see no reason that poetic license should limit archic english to english based sonnets and i liked this one 98

J3
This is an amazing piece, each line is filled with lovely imagery that kept me captivated from start to end.
Brilliantly written. 10+20+27+37 = 94

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Scoring totals:

5 The Sonnet of the Sun and Shadows [95+98+94=287]
4 Unforgiving [100+97+87=284]
2 Dream Interrupted-- Shakespearean Sonnet [90+100+90=280]
3 Death Race [90+99+82=271]
1 Renascent Doubts (Shakespearean Sonnet) [80+96+87=263]

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AND THE WINNER IS:

[drum roll]

FIRST PLACE: Lu [The Sonnet of the Sun and Shadows (Sonnet), Garden of the Night (Terza Rima), It's All in the Way (Cascade), Dark Rising (Acrostic)]

Runners up:

2nd place: Melpomene [Unforgiving (Sonnet), Timeless (Terza Rima), Nightfall (Novo Otto), You are Everything I Write (Acrostic)]

3rd place: Acoustic Odyssey [Dream Interrupted (Sonnet), Ignite The Flame (Kryielle), Angel of Music (Triolet), Peppermints and Dandelions (Tanka)]

4th place: AJ [Death Race (Sonnet), Forgotten Soldier (Kyrielle), Strings (Pleiades), Love and Pain (Acrostic)]

5th place: gIrL [Renascent Doubts (Sonnet), I Do (Palindrome), Tragedy (Triolet), La Vie En Rose (Acrostic)]

Congratulations to All Five, Who Came Ahead of 20 Other Worthy Opponents
[What the h is up with this top hat? That SMELL! Wait a minute, Fred? Argh. Hellon!]

Good luck in practicing the four step program with Chelsey! Now, after all this, Hellon & I each need a drink. I'm going for a pitcher of Raspberry Ice Nymph, a la Sibs. Happy pishing! It's been fun.

EDIT:
I would like to invite the judges to take credit for their efforts, but it is entirely up to them to do so. They will otherwise remain anonymous.

Awesome job everyone, you all did so great! Woo hoo Lu and Mel, and AJ, way to represent MM!!

WHOOOOOOOOOHOOOOO

M&M's Reprezentsszzzzzz.,.,!!!!***

Like A BOSS.

congratz errybody~

Congratulations winners!

This was the first time I ever judged one of these and it was a learning experience for me. Actually I thought all the poems were outstanding and did not enjoy looking for the nit picking flaws, but figured that is the name of the game. I now have a new found appreciation of the judges that judged all these other contest

Wowwwwwwwwww!!!!! Absolutely amazing job you guys!!! Congrats Lu for dominating this!! And to all the other runner ups as well!

Congrats winners, thanks to the judges for all your effort and ofcourse thanks to Hellon and Larry for making this really interesting! :)

Congrats, Lulu! All five of you powered through this beast of a contest with grace. Do you feel your poetic bones going through a growth spurt?

As for myself, I was out in round one. Bahaha!

Thanks Ringmaster Larry and Ringmistress Hellon! I hope your shed is all cleaned out, now.

Thank you and a special thanks to Larry & Hellon for hosting such a magnificent contest. Though I do need to wear a hat now to cover the little bald patches on my head from all the hair pulling I did ... lol

Many thanks to the judges also. That was a huge amount of poems to read and comment through-out this contest.

Congrats to Mel,Acoustic Odyssey, AJ & Girl. Loved all your sonnets !!!!

Congrats to everyone who entered. I enjoyed reading everyone's entries.

Looking forward to Chelsey's contest that's up next :)

Congrates everyone :)
Was a great contest and learned alot from it.

Special thanks to Larry and Hellon, and to all of you judges.

^"I do need to wear a hat now to cover the little bald patches on my head from all the hair pulling I did ... lol"

Lu, I have just the hat for you. It's a top hat with a decided character to it. [I think I knew this character - Fred.]

I have to say this was not an easy contest to judge. I want to thank Larry and Hellon for asking me to judge and be a part of this awesome contest.. I LOVE formed poetry... and what a beautiful display of poems! You all did a beautiful job... and I enjoyed reading them.. :-)

"As for myself, I was out in round one. Bahaha!"

Ditto! Way to rock it, TC.

Congratulations winners! I haven't had time to read any of the poems yet, but I'll get to it. I hear there are some good'ns!!
Way to go, MM.

Congrats Lu! Way to go Mama Bear!

Congrats to all of you for even attempting a sonnet. Holy Mackarel I would be bald if I were to attempt it.

great entries all contest long, congrats everyone that entered.

Congrats Lu, you did an amazing job as always! I know you generally write free verse too so high 5 for rocking this formed challenge!

Congrats AJ, gIrl & Acoustic Odyssey on the runner up places, it's a pleasure sharing the runner up title with you all. Fantastic work!

Thanks very much to the judges, you caught me on a couple of things which is great to see ;) & thanks for the second place, I appreciate it ...

Larry, Hellon! Such a fun contest. I can't see myself writing a form again, you killed me with that Sonnet. I think I stared at the description for a good few days before I even attempted it.

Thanks all!

Congratulations Lu and all the runners up...awesome job everyone. Many thanks to the judges for the huge amount of time and effort you guys put in. Special thanks to the independant judge who stepped up to judge the wildcard round and ended up staying up half the night to do it. Thanks to Larry for doing all the hard yards while I was off sunning myself...(mind you that seems like a lifetime ago).

Larry before you get too pished maybe you can post the names and poems of ALL the entries...I still don't know who wrote what but I really would like to.....grabs glass from Larry and takes a huge slug...cheers everyone!

Congrats all entrants /winners ! :).

.........empty glass

Pished now, will later for certain.

[Picks up second glass]

Raspberry Ice Nymphs all around!

[PS, Thanks, Hellon, for being such a fantastic co-host! And stop underplaying your work.]

Parades around the ring holding number card for ROUND 5...hick..hick...I'm pished too!!! That Rasperry Ice Nymph certainly has a kick to it LOL!

Here are the final tabs on who wrote what:

Acoustic Odyssey: Angel of Music (Triolet), Peppermints and Dandelions (Tanka), Ignite The Flame (Kyrielle), Dream Interrupted (Shakespearean Sonnet)

AJ: Death Race (Sonnet), Forgotten Soldier (Kyrielle), Strings (Pleaides), Love and Pain (Acrostic)

Blissful: Could it be you? (Kyrielle), Hope's Destination (Etheree), As I Weep (Cascade)

Britt: Only In Time (Acrostic), Mother Mayhem (Nove Otto), City (Pleaides)

Chelsey: Liar (Nonet), Selective Listening (Cascade), Baby (Pleaides)

Colm: Wishing Hours (Tanka)

Draco dormiens nunquam titilland: Hunter (Pleaides)

End Of Eternity: Maliciousness (Tanka)

Everlasting: A lost soul (Nonet- Acrostic), Entities of Water (Nove Otto)

gIrL: Renascent Doubts (Shakespearean Sonnet), I Do (Palindrome), La Vie En Rose (Acrostic), Tragedy (Triolet)

Jenni: Sensuality(Palindrome), Better Half (Cascade), Ocean (Tanka)

Just Nei: Love, The Accident (Terza Rima), Alcohol (Acrostic), Two Left Feet (Nove Otto)

Lioness: God's Gift of Life (Terza Rima), Unborn Child (Nove Otto), Untitled 1 (Etheree)

Lu: Garden of the Night (Terza Rima), The Sonnet of the Sun and Shadows, It's All in the Way (Cascade), Dark Rising (Acrostic)

Melpomene: Unforgiving (Sonnet), Timeless (Terza Rima), Nightfall (Novo Otto), You are Everything I Write (Acrostic)

Ms Sunshine: Silence, speaks the Deepest (Cascade), The Long Drought ( Acrostic)

Nevi: Bathtub (Limerick), Droplets (Nonet)

Paul Gondwe: Born with Pride (Acrostic)

Pinky Princess: Untitled 2 (Tanka), Blossoming Love (Triolet), Luxury (Pleaides)

ronel mccarthy: Shackles (Tanka), Expulsion (Pleaides)

sibyllene: Suddenly I've Won (Myself) (Nonet), Amateur (Pleaides)

silvershoes: Will Anything Count? (Acrostic)

slighte: Lost And Found (Terza Rima), Night Music (Triolet), Waltz Interrupted (Nonet)

Sylvia: Scavenger Hunt (Nonet)

Tara Kay: Cataclysm (Limerick), Puppet String (Nonet)

TJ Becker: Bleeding rose (Triolet), Peace in white (Reversed Etheree), Invisible me / Suspicion (Kyrielle)

26 poets wrote 64 form poems!

CONGRATULATIONS LU!!!

Also to the runners up and all the other people that entered the contest as well. The poems were amazing.

Thanks Larry and Hellon for organising such an awesome contest. I don't think I would have written some of the poems I did in these forms which is great!!!

Awesome job guys

x

I love formed poetry and I am really glad Larry gave me the oppurtunity to judge the contest.
I must say judging the poems was tough, the contestants did a great job. I enjoyed reading all the poems and it was a wonderful learning experience :)

Congratulations Lu, a well deserved win :) and others for writing such amazing poems.

Congratulations all!! Many thanks to Larry, Hellon, and the judges. It was an honor to participate in this challenging contest, alongside these amazing writers. I will definitely carry this learning experience with me, I had a blast!

And now that the judges have each identified themselves, I want to thank them for all the hard work they put into this contest. I never expected them to have to evaluate and comment on nearly 60 poems! They did a superb job!

Thank you:
Michael (Michael D Nalley)
Raj (Lonely Rider)
Andrea (Maple Tree)