New Contest!!!

So the contest is to create a poem entitled "Breathless"

Requirements: needs to be at least 10 sentences long. Cannot include any profanity or crass language. Must have at least some rhyming included.

Enter by April 25th

Winner will recieve 10 votes and 5 comments and I will personally reccomend your work to others on the site :)

Please send in what you come up with, because I would love to see what you all can do with this title :)

I'm glad this one specifies rhyming.

So I'm guessing no metaphors.

Not neccasarily, it can use metaphors as long as they rhyme and have good flow :)

Ok I will try and come up with something. :)

I'd like to join too :)

Am funa giv it a try see what I can do. Live these contest they get u thinking x

Okay here is mine

I watch out the window
And I see a beautiful meadow
I think about you and I, breathless
Wishing you were here again

Thinking about the past with you
Thinking is just too much pain
I see nothing to gain
So I'm crying in the rain

Remembering your face leaves me sad
I can't stop thinking of you in everything I do
This feeling never goes away
So I will forever remain breathless

The I, is suppose to be I'm.

Good job 'midnight' thanks for entering :)

I'm going to try this one.

My attempt-

Cloaked in the heavy mood of a whisper,
I am enraptured tossing myself freely to the breeze.
Breathless...
Traveling risking time and space; darkness proves sinister 
And the thought of morning a tease.
Breathless...
Mouthing the words 'I love you' as morning drifts like pollution,
Uninvited entering my dreamscape.
Breathless...
Permeating and clouding my vision's resolution,
I drift into the desires of the day my dreams raped.
Breathless...
As if I had been running, running, running,
My heart pounding to the putter patter of my feet.
Breathless...
Subconsciousness a state deliciously cunning,
I am left with the memory of only your heartbeat;
As I am still left breathless...

Sorry I still haven't come up with anything I am still trying to get an idea in my mind. But the poems here seem good, so we will see. It might be hard for ya to judge this one depending on how many entries you get.

Here is mine

Breathless

As my temperature
fell below the normal range,
my body started to sense the absence
of heat within my fleshy bones.

I slowly became pale
and without a want to live
for I fear the pain will only increase

The shivering seemed to never cease
as my tiring muscles became mediocre
and my nebulous thoughts became obscure
with the bearing of the pain that didn't terminate

My head felt like an explosive device
that with a single touch would turn into a mine
and therefore explode into a million parasites
that would infest with hallucinations, my senses.

I tried to find solace within my core
but the virus spores propagated there
hence, it is too late for antibiotics to advocate
and I am too weak to even cooperate.

so now, I rest restless
in my bed just hoping for a cure
while I reluctantly become breathless.

Breathless [Acrostic]

Beneath the stain of a shadow
Rests my cloudy little meadow
Every lost soul finds peace within
Amber clouds will forgive all sin
There is no more use in running
Heart beats reveal where you're hiding
Let's just lie down; watch the clouds dance
Endless days pass, will you hold my hands?
Sweet melodies fill the air and
Soon, I'll wake without you by my side once more--
completely and utterly breathless.

04/17/12

Wow...everyone has done an amazing job so far...i love reading all of your different angles on the title, they are all so unique and unexpected! Thanks for submitting!

This is amazing!

I'm still in the process. Will have something though. :)

Me too! I am still trying. Lol. But all of the ones so far have been great!

Will try and attempt it...

everyone's are so good though =( lol!

Iam in still tryin to make mine tho i know its helpless i can win with all the amazing poems above =P

Everyones have been great so far...but you never know what i'm gonna pick..so feel free to enter whatever you write...I might just pick you :)

By the way, there are six more days til the contest is over so you have some time to think it over :)

Here my attempt,Its kinda dumb tho =P

Breathless

I loved her a lot and she love me back
We spent all the time together
Even when nights were so black
She always shared with me everything she had
But someday i saw her leaving me behind
I tried to follow her
But i couldn't walk
I tried to call her
But i couldn't talk
My eyes started to close
My power started to fade
As i fell to the ground
I saw a feeble reflection of me
I was Shocked when i knew that
I was only her breathless doll

Here is my words
Breathless :

I hold paper piece and pen in hand
Then fingers starts to flow on them
Curiosity brings them so close
Then I go in deep thoughts
To start writing feverish compose
My rhymes starts after a pause,
Its vital for the writer's blood
He Pour words from his mood
His works as unflatter piece of wood
What secret is behind
Always something process in mind
Though it comes like sign
Its his breathless peace of wind

Breathless

So sharp like an archery dart,
was the deep feeling of affinity
that pierces through my heart
whenever she walks past my vicinity.

She was a friend to all,
but unfortunately, not to me.

At least not until this fateful day,
when she walked past as usual
but with an unusual smile,
and a gaze locked on me.

Briskly she turned in my direction,
and walked gently towards me.

I prayed thus within me:
"Oh ground, oh ground,
would you please open up
and swallow me, so swiftly."

Before I could end my prayer,
she was already in front of me.

The strength of her perfume
engulfed me wholly,
and her unrestrainable beauty
took my breath away.

She gave another quick smile,
then gestured her head forward.

The whispers of her sweet voice
was soft and low; very silent,
yet salient,
so much so that it tingled my ears.

Truly, it was the incident and
not the day that totally changed me.

When I regained enough breath,
to speak,
I gave a warm, positive response
to the candid request she made.

And from thenceforth,
nothing was ever the same again.

Thanks everyone...i am thrilled at how many are entering in this contest :)

Here is mine.

Breathless.

Shattered, falling to the ground.
Breathless, can't make a sound.
Blinded, I can not see.
This pain can not be.

Heaving, I'm going to be sick.
This must be some kind of sick trick.
Men in green arrive at my door,
We all know what they're here for.

They said that he is dead...
He placed a rifle to his head...
How could this happen...
How could this be...
How could he do this to me... To us.

Shattering hearts, pieces never to be found.
All left breathless, no one will make a sound.
Blinded all we see is red,
Cause the one we called our hero... is now dead.

This poem is about my brother, who committed suicide in Iraq 2yr's ago... It was a really hard time for us... I guess it is still really hard for me. I didn't even knew this poem was in me, until I started writing for the contest.

Here is my attempt altough not that great. Lol

Breathless

Every time I look at you I always catch my breath
Always thinking about you with every step
My heart keeps racing down this road tonight
The sparks from your eyes my pathway ignites

Your voice is a melody to my ears
You only make me shed happy tears
Can't imagine how I could love you more
Although those words I've said before

The strings to my heart you play
A beautiful melody you create
Creating a moment I'll never forget
Yur undying love will forever leave me breathless.

Your not yur. Lol. Typo there. Sorry

So tear me wide open
And dissect my pathetic soul
You'll find naught but black ashes
a poor desecrated heart.
And blood of the distraught.
Torn apart and left to rot,
Not a part of me remains whole.
I'm left dying in this winter cold,
At the point of no return,
Heaven can't save me now
Resuscitation is but for not,
Do not waste your time,
Do not waste your valuable breath.
For I am left as a walking corpse
A broken shell of what I used to be.
Dead and dying,
But somehow still breathing
Take this minuscule life from me,
End my pain,
Bring to a standstill my suffering.
Let me go peacefully
incinerate my body,
Spread the ashes in the wind
Allow me to soar on the breeze
But do not shed a tear for me.
When your hands become empty
Wash yourself of your pity,
Wash yourself of my tragedy.

I really thought this was beautiful, and i am super happy that this contest could inspire you to write about your brother. Thanks for sharing ;)

That comment was @ Jenn

No thank you for giving this challenge... with out it this poem wouldn't exist. :)

So I finally got mine done. Here it is:

Breathless

Air is such a simple thing
It's the air that we breathe
We let out emotion at different times
Exhale thoughts out of our minds

Deep breathes for someone we love
Butterflies let out for our beloved
Floating about in the still air
One simple breath done with care

When you love that special girl
All the air is trapped in your world
When you embrace her tenderness
Her love leaves you breathless

COOL ONE SOON COME IN

Breathless,
you are so everywhere
you lead while being harness
while with your company you wish to protect your presence, no patience
imagine a vacuum and the universe in it, "you are there!!
strolled through my fragrance garden holding my phone to my ear, and suddenly "you are there"
she darted my heart
realeased my fear
now i am no where but "you are there
Tried to hold my breath once but i soon turned purple
guess that's your colour bright but evil and stained like paint dripping from my heart window.

Wow all i see is fresh i am breathless

Hmm

My best so far is by jenn. i really felt the pain that filled the piece. by the way i am sorry for your brother's loss i know how it feels to lose someone dear!

@ moonlit candles...Thanks bud...I really liked it. I kinda thought everyone would do like love poems or poems about death, but yours was refreshingly original :) and everyone else has also done a great job!