I'm new but please rate and comment

OK i'm still kinda new, but can i please get some rates and comments. let me know what i can do better and what do you like.

Hey so i read your poems and they are pretty good. the only thing i'd work on is the rhyme sceme. i got kinda lost with one of them but other than that they were pretty good, the story was easy to understand. you got talent. keep writing and if you ever have any questions feel free to message me ;)