1 for 1 'Dreamer's Never Leave Dreamland'

If you could provide some feed back on my poem "dreamers never really leave dreamland" that would be awesome! I'm thinking about reworking it into lyrical form for electronic song with a vocalist

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/sad/poems.php?id=1018449

I read it and its really good i liked it alot :)