Winners 5/28/2012

Thanks everyone, for those who have helped get this done this week, much appreciated judges!
Thanks Larry for your 24/7 communication regarding the contest.

Congratulations for those who've made it to the front page, you make us proud.

Well done for the rest of the H'Ms I believe you are all equal! Esp with the tie that was broken, guess you made those judges pull their hair, I've received some complaints that the nominated poems were too awesome to pick only 3 ! :D

Votes:

Estuary
by silvershoes 10+7 = 17

Landscapes
by Poetess 4+7= 11

The Sky's Still Pink, Momma
by Poet on the Piano 10 +
(a vote to break the tie).

Never Leave Me Dreamless
by Yaki 10

Beautiful Muse
by Britt 10

The Web: Kiss of Death (Haiku) by Lostlove1 7

St. John of the Freeway
by Larry Chamberlin the Godfather 7

Her relationship at risk
by Everlasting 4

Where Did You Go?
by Ms Happiness 4

Everlasting Words
by Xanthe 4

Comments:

Estuary
by silvershoes

A play by play of a beautiful relationship gone violent (in the metaphorical, ocean sense).. this is a heartbreaking poem with beautiful images and another poem so many can relate to. I love the title and how perfectly it fits, and was quite fond of the structure, with really long lines, some much shorter. It didn't feel rushed and the pace was perfect. What a piece

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The elegant nature tones of this heart breaking love poem just really captivated me-

This is a wonderful poem. Beautiful inside and out with clear detailed imagery, with tender wording throughout-

The title relates to the poem well and such a beautiful setting with this metaphoric delight.

The poem is spoken in truth from a poet who pours her heart out with such elegance and detailed beauty.

I really adore the way you compare the currents to two hearts becoming one-
Its relatable to life love and pain...

This is a fantastic poem and one of my favorites from this author-
Well done Silvershoes

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Landscapes
by Poetess

The metaphors in this poem are brilliant. I simply love the use of painting poetry in the air, the way bon bons were used (though odd I will admit!), and the idea of stressing the sun to the corners.. so many odd images but vivid and beautiful with such extensive meanings. This was really a great read, one that can make you come up with a new idea every time.

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Whoa! By just reading the title, I was not ready for the clever trip you were going to take me on with your words! What a nice contrast! The first thing that I loved the most about this poem was the use of imagery. You did such a nice job of describing scenes without it being too dull or overdone. There were just so many directions this poem took me that I don't know where to start! Great use of words such as "slithering" and "nestled." It added a nice atmosphere to the poem.

" they were obvious like a white bikini string upon an auburn hip." ^Wow. What an image! What creativity! I am blown away.

This was such a wonderful piece. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.

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The Sky's Still Pink, Momma
by Poet on the Piano 10 points

This poem is so heart breaking, written from the point of view of an unborn fetus. The writer makes you see an unborn child has feelings and emotions too and dreams of being born. I truly loved this, both for the message (which I agree with), but also for the beautiful, endearing and loving way in which this is written. It had me in tears, such a tender and loving plea for life.

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This was a hard choice between four excellent poems. However, this poem is so powerful, it gets the vote. There is a certain vagueness here that works well. There are layers to this poem that can reach different people uniquely.

Is the central theme the desire of the child to compete for the attention or approval of her popular or busy mother?
"The shadows are trying to surround you
please don't listen to them;
they won't be your constant friends"

Or could it be about abandonment or a dying mom?
" I don't want you to let me go"

Could it be about the mother's unfulfilled dreams?
"making memories
of who you so desire to be."

In the whole, going out on a limb, I feel it is about the child as care-giver for a parent with Alzheimer's. The footsteps making memories in the mind of the child, memories of who the mom wants to be but cannot quite get back to herself, the shadows surrounding the mother, taking her away from her senses. The mother's day is too occupied for her to even be able to turn around (to recognize reality), Most poignant, the final stanza:
"the day doesn't have to end like this
there isn't always darkness here
please just listen to my heartbeat....

it isn't telling you to say goodnight."

There is an argument to be made for all these interpretations, but the fact that such arguments even can be made indicates this poem is iconic.

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Beautiful Muse
by BRIIIIIIIIITTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTi

This was just utterly beautiful! The metaphors splashed within this piece were perfect and truly helped draw a picture of the person you spoke of. This was very strong in its consistency without anything seeming forced. I loved the mention of time and how you tied it into "Alice in Wonderland" with the mention of size. Your use of "koi" was very creative and so much more fun to read then the regular mention of "fish." I now have an image of rambling rabbits in my mind teasing me with the concept of time. Very well done here! Nothing left to say...
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The Web: Kiss of Death (Haiku)
by Lostlove1

Each word in this little formatted verse is well thought out. The description of the way the victim tries to escape its fate and the bouncing of the web. It is a very dark and sinister poem and a very good example of how a Haiku should be written.

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Her relationship at risk by Everlasting

Insightful verse about the love of an older woman for her younger beau. Love the metaphors in this poem and how she describes the unfair battle she will probably lose one day, to the cockroaches that are indeed everywhere and merciless at that;)

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Never Leave Me Dreamless
by Yaki

The sadness, the pain, but the vivid hope is what makes this poem for me. The author shows such dispair and it's vague enough that everyone can relate to it, but in the end always putting it in God's hands is what will guide you. I think this is a beautiful piece and I absolutely love the imagery portrayed here. I could go on for hours about this poem, it's one I've read a few times now and I'm just blown away by the maturity and wisdom in this poem. Fantastic.

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St. John of the Freeway
by Larry Chamberlin the Godfather

I have read a few poems in my day on the homeless and I have to say this poem tops them all. The creative structure of this powerful piece touched me and the ending was a touch of reality, mixed with eye opening interpretations.

This poem goes deep into detail- It shows truthfully tones and detailed imagery of the homeless man to a tee- It made me feel like the man didn't care of the condition he was living in, only to read his "treasures" This poem shows spirit! This poem was a joy to read.

I adored the rhyme pattern throughout. Love this piece!! Well Done Larry Chamberlin the Godfather

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Where Did You Go?
by Ms Happiness

I want to express that I do love poetry that is written with simplicity but comes deep from the heart- This poem deserves to be highlighted for many reasons. The author creatively expresses her conversation with "Hope" - and It really grabbed me. The depth of emotion and inspirational desire to keep on moving was mesmerizing...

I really can relate to this piece, for it touches on the desire to stay strong, and within the metaphore it truly makes the reader feel the bond between Hope and the writer... Really loved this poem - Well Done Ms. Happiness

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Everlasting Words by Xanthe

How clever! I liked how you structured this piece with the line breaks and punctuation. This was a personal dedication to someone that everybody can enjoy because it was crafted so beautifully.

"The caramel burnt her own tongue for lingering there too long." ^ I really like the image this left in my mind...great use of "caramel"

This was a lovely piece, nicely done!

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THANKS

Congratulations to the winners, and the HMs:)
Thank you for the HM it means a lot, and to you too Ms Sunshine:)

Congrats to everyone! Awesome job :]

Thank you judges and Nana! You guys rock~

:) <3 xx

Congrats everyone :)

Congratulations to all, Thanks judges and thanks Nana,

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Congrats :)

Congratulations all winners and HM's!!! Well deserved!

Nana you rock!

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Congratulations to everyone :-) Beautiful poetry!!

Congratulations to the winners!

and thank you to the judges and also Ms. sunshine.

and haha more thank you's to the judge who commented on my poem. I like the " ;)" it adds a nice touch to it.

Congrats all, and thanks for the HM!

Thanks judges and Nana as always :)

Thanks to everyone! Nana, Sir Larry and judges, you guys are awesome. What will this site turn into, without your efforts?

Congratulations winners and H'Ms

Congratulations to the first 3 poets to grace the renewed newsletter!

Thanks to Nana & a sub judge.

Thanks for the HM. John is very special.

Congrats all

GUYS GUYS, a 5th judge, sent his commments and votes but were not sent to me, for some technical reasons, however the missing votes and comments are down stairs :P
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Black Rose
by Ingrid
10 points

Ingrid, I must say that this is a very beautiful poem. I've never read a poem that has both a strict form such as this but has as much heart as you put into this.

Not only is the form strict and beautiful in shape, but it plays so well to the reader. I found myself being pulled away to to the field where your character was set. The aural and visual imagery was fantastic and toward the end I began to feel the panic just as one might before waking from a dream.

This blew me away. Amazing write.

Estuary
by Silvershoes
7 points

This is EPIC.

Jane, if you aren't already a novelist of wondrous proportions, I think that you'd make a great one. It's clear in this poem that you're not a stranger to the world of fantasy and your poetry could contend with the best one.

For such a lengthy poem, I found myself intrigued the entire time. I think what I really liked was the continuity of the celestial/gravitational elements and constant pull between the the male/female characters. Your vocabulary is also a huge plus. It's immaculate - wordy but not so wordy that I got lost in it. Everything was so eloquently put.

You're a master of the craft, I think. Wonderful work here.

Des-Construction
by Karla
4 points

Another long poem! There were so many this week and trust me, it was hard to choose which ones were the best.

The two strongest points in this piece (the ones that I think made me decide to vote) were your vocabulary and rhythm.

What you had to say in this poem was very well put - nice plain, natural English. This gave your poem a very realistic tone which is very easy to relate to from a reader's perspective. Poets are wont to keep their heads in the clouds, but it was as though you took a step down and said what you truly needed to say without any embellishment.

The other thing that I really liked was the pace of the poem. The poem flowed fairly nicely and had nice short, choppy sentences. This kept me intrigued as I read. Way that the poem read was sort of like a good suspenseful part of a novel where you just can't put it down because you're constantly wondering what's coming next.

Beautiful work from Karla this week!

Wow, thank you so much judges! I sincerely appreciate your comments.
Thanks once again for hosting, Nana.
Thanks for those who nominated me.

Congratulations to the other winners and honorable mentions.

Congratulations Winners & HM's!

Thanks judge, the one who gave me such a beautiful comment and compliment rolled into one:)

Congrats all.

Awesome poetry as always poets :) Must be really hard on the judges since there are sooooooo many nominations, thank you judges for working so hard

Congrat winners

thanks for the HM for my spider haiku :)

Thanks Miss Lebanon for all your hard work, cant forget about you!

:) <3 <3 <3

:) Indeed, good work, Nana. Lots of people want in on things, but to stay and do it every week is difficult to most:) <3

You're so sweet and appreciative, your words give me lots of energy <3

Hopefully enough to post this weeks winners ;0)

Lmao haha such a coincidence.. I really had something up ...lol :) will do now

I thought this was the new post for the week lol