Winners 6/11/2012 XD CONGRATS

This week seemed to be blessed, everything went smoothly without headaches, and I didn't have to take morphine, which is great!

Thanks judges for your efforts and time,
(thanks for the HM, you're adorable)

Congrats for those who made it to the front page, well done for the rest of H'Ms.

Lately
by Melpomene 10+10

Between rise and ruin
by Mera Luna 10+7

At Midday
by Timothy 7+4

Mumbling while I wait for her
by Karla 10

Spellbound (Fibonacci)
by Steven Beesley 10

Blue Snow
by Ms SunShine 7

Philosophical Feet
by Mandy 7

Hello grandad, im here again......
by Naughtymouse 7

Rejoice (Crown Oddquain)
by Steven Beesley 4

A Wilted Muse
by Jenni 4

Misery
by Jordan 4

Like a Dream
by Lioness 4

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Between rise and ruin
by Mera Luna

What an emotion filled piece! I really liked how your lines got shorter as the poem came to an end because it added a nice dramatic pace to tie everything in together. You did a great job of using describing words to set the scene and made it easy to imagine as a reader. There was such a sweet atmosphere to this poem with words like "sugar" "batter" "cocoa powder" but there was also an ominous cloud draping the sweetness. Great contrast!

"the warmth of day chokes me awake,"
^People usually associate "warmth" with happiness yet you described it as "choking" you awake...great twist! This goes back to the comment I made of the contrast in your words from sweet to ominous with a nice blending of the two.

Great job!

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I love how this poem was so full of intense emotions and feeling, but used baking as a metaphor. Some of the metaphors were spelled out a little too much and didn't leave enough interpretation out for the reader to make it their own, but she really created stark and vivid images. She has a lot of images that make me feel like she's really confused by frustration but also a hope of something good coming out of it. She has images that I associate with fun, but then it's used in a darker way. I won't admit I truly understand this poem, but it makes me think, and I like that.

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At Midday
by Timothy

Wow, you are such a lovely storyteller! I loved how you tied the title into the beginning and ending of the poem because you brought everything full circle with your words. It was short but I feel as if it told a greater story compared to its length. It felt like this piece is a continuation or related to other short poems that can all be tied in together to tell an epic story. It was wonderful! It isn't easy to tell a story through a poem without making it sounds too narrative and less poetic but you did a great job of overcoming that!

Nicely done!

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My mind was tossed into another dimension by this wonderful metaphoric delight! The author left me in awe of his imaginative design of word display.

"Never repugnant, unlike the local mischievous Knave who snickers at a mirror. Snickering whilst his heart
remains stifled in a clotted cavity of anatomy. " <------ so darn creative, these few lines were just wow!!

Loved the different feelings and messages that I received throughout. I was left feeling sad, and yet uplifted at times all throughout this poem. Well done Timothy

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Lately
by Melpomene

Melpomene posts a poem, it get's nominated and it (usually) wins. Why? Because she is damn good. I fall in love with her words, her sorrow, her pain, her metaphors, her symbolism, her structure.. everything about everything she writes just blows my mind, and this is no different. This layout is something new she's been doing lately and I feel it's giving her more of an ability to release her emotion. I won't pretend to know what her poetry is always about but this one just screams sadness, and screams a request for a "do-over". Sometimes you can take her poetry literally, sometimes not. This is one of those times I feel like we can, and it brings through a heartbreaking message and tone. The girl could write an address beautifully.

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I really like this. It plays well to the hopeless romantic. Great use of imagery. Some highlights imo:

"the way your fingertip approached my spine like a plane to a runway"
^^^
Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful.

"your hand was always as unsteady as the shyness of my walk."
^^^
I'm not sure what it is about this. It just sounds very pure, just like you describe your feelings.

"my mind has been skipping rope for hours, your faults becoming as ornate as antique archways"
^^^
very good way to describe rumination.

What sealed the deal for me, though, was the end. The repetition in the final line made me take it a bit more seriously. It sounded like begging, like true fear...something that we do not want to have to experience in a relationship. Great work

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Mumbling while I wait for her
by Karla

Strong words by an equally strong woman. Indeed we should not allow ourselves to become a caricature of ourselves, Barbie- lookalikes. We are more than our looks, more than the proverbial trophy on the arm of men. An intelligent and eloquent plea for equality between the sexes.

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Blue Snow
by Ms SunShine

First off, the opening of this poem is really cool. Seeing an incomplete sentence with such strange punctuation right away grabbed my attention like nothing else.

Again, very interesting word choice and use of punctuation in line 4, stanza 2:

"Just burning me
into an ashen cloud,
that travels
with.for.in-
your memory."

Something else that I really enjoyed about this was the form. The line breaks were nice and felt very meaningful.

Sometimes the imagery was a bit overbearing, but it still worked well to carry your message along.

In closing, I'd like to add that this sounds AWESOME:

"I get lost twice per second there."

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Spellbound (Fibonacci).
by Steven Beesley

This formed beauty is simply magical. The wording and strict form flows.. and simply elegant.

I love the authors creativity and talented gift of formed poetry. This poem left me speechless! The design and way it was shaped shows this form in all its glory!

"My princess come hither and betrove your love to me" <---- How romantic is this!! Love it-

From start to finish I was mesmerized by this passionate and loving poetic gem- Wonderful poem by Steven Beesley

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Hello grandad, im here again....
by Naughtymouse

This Rhyming poem left me speechless. Not only did the Author captivate and touch my heart for the love of his grandfather, but he made me so proud of our soldiers and of men at war-

This poem is emotional, inspirational, and a heart breaker. The flow of the poem was simply breathtaking.

"I admired even as a child
Your strong shoulders i admit
Those shoulders once held up the world
And now all you do is sit" <----- this stanza really got to me.... It says so much in this stanza, very powerful!

Its very difficult to make a rhyming piece flow and this one was smooth like a river... I have read this piece many times... and I will never get tired of reading it... Beautiful and Touching piece by this author- Well Done Naughtymouse

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Philosophical Feet
by Mandy

A philosophic poem with many questions, thought provoking, deep and with a sad, yet very true conclusion in the end. A well worded verse, written by a young author that keeps growing in her work. Well done.

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A Wilted Muse
by Jenni

First of all, I LOVE the title! You had such a powerful ending to this poem that it made me want to read the poem a few more times to bask in the truth in your words. So many tell tales of love in their poetry but you did a great job of making it personal to you and not wrapped in general conceptions about love...

"You veil your true self
by saying all the right things
yet they sound so wrong,
but I only craved to find my fortune,
unfortunately I found you."
^I think a lot of people can relate to this stanza... I know I can. Some people are so great at making you think they're something different than they really are and we feel so betrayed and vacant when we see their true colors. Those are the people, though, that help us learn to be aware of certain characteristics in others and be quicker to pick up red flags.

Wonderfully done here, I really enjoyed it!

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Rejoice (Crown Oddquain). by Steven Beesley

An ode to friendship in a format not used often on here. It has all the goodies in it that friendship offers to us, a real feel-good poem written in a flawless fashion. Welcome back, mr. Beesley!

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Misery
by Jordan

It's funny, Jordan didn't mention if 'misery' was male or female, but instantly instead of 'you' I instead read it as 'she', probably because of the sultry voice bit, and it made it seem more fitting to give misery a gender - as though this woman is his misery. I have to admit I don't usually care for dark poetry because it's doom and gloom, but the images here were really interesting, and Jordan used the word 'gumption' and it made my day. I appreciate the part about speaking inside my head, I often feel like people answer questions I've never asked, and it gives me a creepy gooseflesh feel. I could quickly relate to pieces of your poem.. very well done!

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Like a Dream
by Lioness

I liked this a lot. I find that poems can get boring when they're too literal, but you hit the nail on the head with this one. It's about as straightforward as you can get, but your honesty shines through in a very charming way that's easy to relate to.

The last stanza is beautiful. I've never seen anything like it. For the good of the site, I'll post it here:

"I met this lovely woman
and she was beautiful. Her
eyes were blue like Vanuatu
waters and I felt like swimming
in them. I then thought what
would it be to look like that,

to look like a dream."

It made my jaw drop, I won't lie. Excellent work here.

:) if I messed anything up, you know the drill...pm me XD

Congrats all and thanks so much for the HM and lovely comment, thanks dear judge. :)

Thanks to you too Nana and the other judges!

Congrats to the winners and HMs:)

Thank you for your hard work Ms SnShine, and all the judges:)

Congrats to all the winners and HM's...

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Congrats to this week's winners and HMs! Also, thanks much for the HM this week!

-Jordan

Congratulations everyone :]

Congrats everyone :)

Congrats to the winners and HM's!!!

Thank you for my HM, the comment was lovely judge!

Nana, you beautiful Lady, thank you

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Congrats everyone!

Congrats all and thanks to the norm :)

Congratulations everyone the pieces here were just outstanding, thank you for the HM and for the kind kind words, Big Loves xxx

Congratulations all winners & HMs. Thanks again, judges, for timely voting. Thanks Nana for staying off the GI-cocktail.

Congrats to the winners and thank you for the kind words.

Thank you for the lovely comments, judges!

Congrats to Mera Luna & Timothy, as well as our HM's.

You guys really deserved it, congratulations