WINNERS :D OH YES 6/19/2012 WINNERS WINNERS

Congratulationssss everybody :) well done people, congrats for the rest of the H'ms.

Judges thanks for everything, and thanks for those who helped get this done.

3 poems, Jordan's, Meena's, and Karla's have one missing comment, from the Sub judge who voted, comments may come soon.

Fog
by Jordan
10+10+4

A Verse of Crime (Huitain)
by Meena Krish 10+7+10

It is not the heart
by Karla 10+7

Old School
by Maple Tree 7

Milk
by Colm 7

Fume by The Prince 7

The Universal Key
by Larry 4

Bright, Brown and Big
by Yaki 4

Germs of pain
by Average thoughts 4

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COMMENTS:
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Fog by Jordan

So much said in so few words. I love to fish, I love being outdoors. There is something to be said in the peaceful, serene view, alone with your thoughts. Here gave a definite spin, a different tone. I love that you can take it as literal - sometimes you get crappy weather and the fish just don't bite. But I tend to take it as sometimes you're alone in this world and even trying to be positive, or optimistic about something, it doesn't always mean it's going to go well for you. Fishermen have to be patient in their conquest, as you have to be in life, most of the time. I loved this poem for everything it made me think and feel. It mostly reminded me of my Grandpa, an avid fisherman who gave me so many stories...ah. This was a great write

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I read this poem many times... each time I kept coming back to it.
I love small poems that say much...

To start off, I love nature poems that are mystical and peaceful in my opinion. With this piece however for me it was very deep...
A mixture of sadness and calm, soothing feelings overwhelmed me each time I read it.

Fishing at midday, and to have a fog set in "At midday" is where the sadness floated in my emotions of this piece..

Sitting and waiting - allowed me to feel like -waiting for the fog or darkness to go away....

And the ending line is what nailed this awesome short piece... "not even the sun bites"..........

Again, no fish are biting, no happiness.... And just a depth of emotions consumed me...
I love this poem, it's fantastic!!!!! Well done Jordan

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A Verse of Crime (Huitain) by Meena Krish

I love this! You truly mastered this form! Great choice of words and the drawing of emotion. What really swayed me to this poem was the title, so creative! Words are a powerful tool and you expressed that wonderfully! Nicely done!

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This form is a fun one to write, but a difficult one in my opinion, to get the rhyming pattern to flow and read with a wonderful rhythm is hard to do, and the author nailed this form! The message was awesome...

I see the author trying to write this form and needing to concentrate and it made me feel like someone was trying to distract her.

It's as if she was crumpling paper up and tossing them at this person...
allot of sarcasm at the end and a touch of humor is what I felt within this poem...

Very creative and artistic!!! Awesome poem!! Well done Meena

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It is not the heart by Karla.

This poetess always pens with such passion that her poems can't be overlooked and this one is no exception. The title draws us in and the sutble smooth start sets a tone of tranquility that blends beautifully into the second stanza. The third stanza completely twists in mood and intensity. Her word choices produce breathtaking imagery and feelings that seems to come naturally to this writer and stay with the reader long after being read.

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Hands Of A Writer
by Tara Kay

I adore this poem, just because it sings the feelings and emotions of a writer with such an elegant word display.

"You hold me between
those knocking knuckles...
and scribble all I dream like
poison from a snakes tongue."

^^ This stanza went in depth of the feelings that a writer experiences of how complex and overwhelming the hands of a writer feels when writing our deepest sorrow...or powerful love...

it just expresses so much... "poison from a snakes tongue"---- this line nails the first stanza!

Second stanza is so darn creative it just left me speechless.... So powerful!!!!

The writer is talking to her hands... A conversation many writers have and how the author described the feelings really left me with allot of emotions... Loved this piece! Well done Tara Kay

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Old School by Maple Tree

This poem was chock full of good stuff in which lots of us can connect. She incorperates poetry forms and phrases into her first stanza which made me curious to read more.
Her second stanza is where we met the poet Maple tree as she writes herself into this poem, in a way which touched my heart and dragged me inside her piece.
The last stanza finishes with flying colors as she pens in some off the old time poets as well. It was a very creative, enjoyable, and heartfelt write.

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The Universal Key by Larry

This poem sparked my curiousity by the title alone. It seems that the poet wants to be all things to someone, to hold the key that opens up everything about the subject he is writing about. This piece has just enough mystery surrounding it to make it thought provoking and interesting. The ending is romantic and beautiful, I feel emotionally attached to this stunning piece.

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Fume by The Prince

Oh dear...wonderful way of adjusting the pace throughout this piece...especially towards the end. In between the two "exhales" it truly felt like I was reading that all in one breath! You truly are gifted.

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Germs of pain by Average thoughts

A lovely piece on lost love. Love does sometimes fill like a disease and you become infected with the "germs of pain" as you have written. It was an unique way to pen the outcomes of a broken heart and how they come about.

"Undetectable,
till they cover
your smile
with
rashes of tears."
^My favorite part, so creative! I love how you described tears are rashes...

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Milk by Colm

This poem made me laugh and I'm probably not reading it the way Colm intended it to be read. I'm a pain in the butt wife and I know it. I don't try to be, it's just my little quirks that are there and somethings that make me who I am. I don't waste milk (just about everything else, yes. Milk, no), so I found the lovely humor here. It speaks so much of the kind of man, and I imagine my husband doing this - thinking 'that stupid woman doing x, y and z to annoy me' and still feed my habits and being loving by picking up more milk. Leaving the gas tank empty for him is something I often do (not my fault he only takes it weekends) and so I can picture Colm in his calm, patient manner, going and getting more milk and there's no more fuel. Insult to injury. I love this poem for all of it's descriptiveness, it's overdone but I love that. He couldn't have created a more clear image, and it just made me smile. Oh the things we do and little habits we cringe through for the people we adore.

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Bright, Brown and Big
by Yaki

The first stanza has me absolutely pulled in, and I can't help but read. I quickly scanned the length of this poem earlier and dreaded reading it due to my impatience, but I was pleasantly surprised. People usually talk about how beautiful blue eyes are, so when someone writes of brown eyes (soulful, big, beautiful) I am immediately drawn due to it being unique. I feel there were some points of this poem that could have been taken out and still had the same effect, such as the eyes being a weakness. It's something that is obvious due to the poem. It didn't take away, just a thought to let the reader feel the weakness, rather than being told about it. While I don't necessarily agree with what the poem is about (cheating etc), I do appreciate the beauty in the words. To be honest I read this as a poem to a lover, without the cheating parts, to try and feel the affect of the emotional and passionate sides of this poem. Great imagery as well, I had a picture of a beautiful person painted perfectly in my mind.

Excellent job winners!

Congrats everyone! Great job :]

Congrats to all the winners and HM.

Congratulations to all the winners and Hm's... thank you to the judges Hm and awesome comment... means allot to me... :-)

Congrats to fellow winners and hm's!

I feel honored to have gotten such positive responses from my little poem. It means a whole lot. Thank you!

Congrats Phonenix Rising - great club ever. Congrats Meena!
Congrats Jordan!
Congrats Ravens!
Congrats everyone!

Congratulations!!! All winners and HM's!!! Well done

Nana beautiful, thank you x

Congrats!

Congrats to all the winners and HM's and thank you for the win :)

Cangrat to the winners and HMs :)

Congrats everyone! And thank you to whoever judge left me that flattering comment :)

Congratulations to the winners & other HMs. Thank you judges & Nana & thanks to the judge for your comment.

Congrats Ya'll !!!!

and Especially KARLAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA,,,

loooove your pieces, and never stop writing!

Great job to our Winners & HM's!

Thanks Judges & Nana for all the effort.

The poems were amazing, you guys really deserved to win, congrats to you all, even those nominated

Thanks for the Hm and comment, the judge really gave me an interesting view of the poem I hadn't seen myself :)

Well done winners and other hms!

Congratulations to all winners and HM's...

:)