Winners! :D

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Votes: P

Suitcase
by Melpomene 10+10

Transparent Lips
by Lioness 7+4

Ouroboros
by The Prince 10 + 4< tie breaker's vote

Untitled
by Xanthe 10

To Love a Firefly
by Poet on the Piano 10

Abandoned Was My Eventual Fate 7
by Haden Chua

Peninsula
by Colm 7

Lydia
by Jordan 7

Faith
by Lioness 7

A Hearts Messenger
by Senryu 4

Blackberry Passion
by Maple Tree 4

AntMen Aren'tMen
by Jordan 4

I beg that dreamers die 4
by Tara Kay

COMMENTS:
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Suitcase
by Melopomene

This poem was an incredible write. You see, to say "your metaphors were great" is such an understatement, because the metaphors, your wording, it was so phenominal to me. What this poem made me, is jealous. Jealous of your talent, jealous of the way your mind was twirling in a 1000 thoughts to get this poem to speak the way it did. When I read this piece my first thought was "she just went beyond her talent". This poem is so worthy of more than just a win on a poetry page. Just to put out the lines that made my mouth drop, here they are:
"I've never understood a one night stand yet
I stand alone in a room for one with the night dangling
its poetry above my head and it mocks me"

"I've been stuffing
my heart into empty soup cans and carrying a rifle to
wake what's dead but faith keeps my eyes blue
and it's your desire for sin that keeps your heart bluer"

"I was seven stops past "home" and
in an abandoned zone, even the gumtrees had bruises."

^ those lines are what make me believe you are most definitely one of the best poets on the site.

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Melpomene is writing very differently here, giving way to structure and her typical abstract type of writing, and it's something very unique to be written by her. I love all aspects of her words and writing, as she is a true artist in ever part of her life. To bring images to life with her words is such a beauty and she does it so well here. The sadness in the tone just kills me, and the lines like

"I was seven stops past "home" and
in an abandoned zone, even the gumtrees had bruises. "

and

"I've been stuffing
my heart into empty soup cans and carrying a rifle to
wake what's dead but faith keeps my eyes blue
and it's your desire for sin that keeps your heart bluer"

had me in complete awe. It's hard to describe what this poem does, and while I know I should give an analysis, I don't feel my ideas bring it justice. I've read this poem a few different times and have gotten something new from it every time - that's the joy of reading something by Mel. She kills it!

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Transparent Lips
by Lioness

-Ahh. I've read the post above this poem, and how we read words as a whole, not letter by letter, but never have I read a poem written off that idea. How original! Love it. This was a clever way to write about loss of cohesion in one's life, and I enjoy how in the end, it slowly comes back to proper spelling, as should the understanding of things around. I also find that this was a bit of a love poem in the lines

"for my lfie no lngeor
mkses snsee to me
so ecah btreah stgrugles
to psas thsee frim lips,

ecxept wehn ksisnig
his."

-And especially

"Wehn our berahts fnilaly
tcouh I can feel msylef
splipnig itno him, and I
plead that eventually,

everything
will become clear again."
-This person gives clarity to the poets life, and they have a touch that pulls all the writer's thoughts together. This poet has had two nominations with the word "lip" in the title, and has a mention of kissing in them this week! Sounds like someone has been bitten by a bit of a love bug ;)

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What a creative piece, I absolutely loved the guts this girl had behind writing this piece. I had no struggle at all while reading the poem and love that there was such a beautiful message behind it! The fact that things are cloudy and being with him makes everything clear is pretty unique, because typically it's the kiss that leaves us breathless and clouded. What a fun and unique write, I adore this!

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Ouroboros
by The Prince

This poem was a metaphoric masterpiece. Breathtaking! Each time I read this piece I gathered so many feelings and emotions from it... it was so well written that I could actually feel the sun on my tongue..

The visual display was mind boggling. Love the creative expressions from within...

" I am one
of a traffic of moths, guided
by trembling fingers that
beckon to touch her rising core"

There is such a romantic and yet tragic feeling within this poem, but with the above stanza... I had to highlight it, because I wanted tell the author that this stanza was so darn powerful.....

To sum up my comment: Explosive piece!!
Well done The Prince

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Tie breaker's comment:

"Normally this writer has a sensuous way with language. His skill and unique fluidity make the writing "sexy." This poem was sexy in an additional dimension. It portrayed a sensual subject matter while never devolving into anything vulgar. He maintains an artful originality of images and phrases."

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Untitled by Xanthe

What a captivating story! It just read so smoothly and sucked me in with your words. I love your use of descriptions and how you pay close attention to detail such as saying "cracked lips" rather than just lips because it really adds a mood to your poem that completes its message.

" before washing the sleep from
my eyes."
^I love how you worded this! So creative!

I honestly could not say enough good things about this poem. All I will say is that it is one of my favorite poems I've read here, ever.

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Peninsula
by Colm

I loved the first stanza, but would have loved it way more if the word "beam" wasn't used twice. I hate repetition in poetry especially when its one line after the other. However, the rest of this piece made up for the first stanza. People can say "commenting a piece and saying the imagery was great is such cliche'", but I could care less, the imagery was amazing throughout the rest of this piece! Your poem literally made me want to go for a drive down a gorgeous, natural, earthly beauty peninsula. From the smell, to the trees, everything in this poem was truly beautifully described. I find the best pieces are the ones that if read to, you can close your eyes and visualize it. That's what you did and that is why you get my vote.

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A Hearts Messenger
by Senryu

Oh this poem, how it made me smile. I found this poem to be so enjoyable. I loved, loved, loved what you were trying to portray in this piece. That writing about life circumstances, or about the environment around you, doesn't make you a poet. I agree with this 100%. A heart's messenger is such an amazing title for one, and for two, it really does speak the truth. Poets often write to entertain, just like authors, but most people on this site, truly do just write from the heart and aren't looking to entertain anyone or get a win on the front page. We are all messengers of our hearts. The way you stated that was so genuine and beautiful. I loved this piece. You should be proud of it.

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Lydia by Jordan

Perfect! There was so much said in this compact piec! It held so many aspects of how humans interact that I feel as if it would be a great piece to start a discussion among people that just want to talk about life...I don't know if that makes sense lol but it reminded me of a piece I read in my literature class in University where we read a poem about human nature then had an in-depth, heated discussion about it. Long story cut short, this poem reminded me of something college professors would use to spark discussion which is why I love it so much.

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7 pts
Faith by Lioness

Liz blew me away with this shape poem. I was lost in the sorrow of her words and the faith and hope that she had throughout the entire piece. I think a lot of believers feel this way during their relationship with God and to pen it and voice it with such vulnerability is just gorgeous. This part here:

"So
Lord, I beg that
you do not
discard what I
threw away so
easily."

had me in absolute tears. A poem that quickly went to my favorites folder, and one I feel I will read throughout my own struggles with faith. We all get down sometimes, but turning to Him is going to open doors we can't open ourselves. This poem is beautiful.

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Blackberry Passion
by Maple Tree

Oh dear, so sweet! I could feel the passion in your words and taste the nectar on my tongue as I read this..."Blackberry soul" really had me pondering...First thing that popped into my head was the blackberry phone lol hello technology era! Then I was thinking of blackberries, the fruit, and how sometimes they can be bitter...well at least for me. So then I was thinking of a forbidden kiss by a bitter soul that's found the bearer of its desires! Whatever way you look at it, this poem was a pleasure to read :)

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To Love a Firefly
by Poet on the Piano

-This poem is full of innocence; it reminds me of a time in childhood, and even of some nights now. Nights when you go out with your friends, and chase fireflies through a field on a summer night.

"Time has chased the brightness
of partially lit avenues,
only to find concrete
like lonely moonlight,
and empty creases where
laughter should have
echoed."
-I think this was a good way to describe sunset on a busy day. Running around all day, until the sun has gone out, and the street lights have come on, the moon is out. The end of this stanza, though, it seems a bit embittered, nostalgic even.

"There seems no reason
for the stars to shine down
on bare corners of the past...

For reality has never indulged
in dreams, forcing away life's
gust of filming dreamers
who came solely to catch fireflies
at summer's beginning age."

-Back to the idea of nostalgia, a yearning for the past, for the simplicity of childhood. Reality, the gravity of life is in the way of your dreams. I feel this stanza really captured that feeling of missed youth, and it was made all the more powerful by the idea of catching fireflies, as we all have as children; that idea, partnered with the phrase "at summer's beginning age" really captures youth.

"Yet the end is always pensive,
when children are remembered
in full-mooned twilight,
and I, like them,

wanting not only to keep
lucid lightning on my fingertips
but to love a firefly, as if
there would be no fleeting
remorse."

-Beautiful ending, bringing it all back home. The word pensive fitting perfectly to describe a memory, bittersweet. It's funny how carefree we can be as children, only worried about living in the moment, out actions having virtually no lasting repercussions, easily delighted by something as simple as the light of a firefly.

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AntMen Aren'tMen
by Jordan

-This is an interesting poem, had to read through a few times to wrap my mind around all these numbers, but I found it quite enjoyable. This poem was critical of people, and of much of today's society. Ants are like machines of the animal world, each one having its own job, and each carrying out its job without interest for itself, everything is for the rest of the colony. People are much like ants, in that we follow our natural tendencies to go about doing much of what we do, but unlike ants, our tendencies are more self-invested. When we look into a large group of people going about their business, they seem as a swarm of ants bustling about, we are very disinterested in the workings around us. What hit me hardest about his poem, however, was the perspective it gives; a comparison between man, and ants. We are the dominant species on Earth, and ants are so insignificant to us that we hardly take note of them. But are we truly better than these pests, when we only act for ourselves, where they play for the team?

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Abandoned Was My Eventual Fate
by Haden Chua

What a heartbreaking and beautiful rhyme piece. This poem is detailed in many ways and the rhyme scheme flow was beautiful!

The author took an old feel approach that made it rich and explosive within the message....

the love and loss can be felt throughout...

"Severed sinews and battered heart,
Oh, how I long for your tender hug"

^^ these two lines here express what I'm talking about to a tee.... The author has such a deep word usage in the first line and then ties together with elegant simplicity..... I really admire a writer who can splash a poem in such a way.... Love it!

Its simplicity is so elegant and then the author gives it a wonderful visual display.... It's hard for me to express the beauty of this piece... it's just magical in my opinion and deserves to be highlighted! Well done Haden Chua

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I beg that dreamers die
by Tara Kay

This poem is rich with emotion that I truly can't stop reading... I've read it over many times and its such a beautiful piece.

"Dreams are really our nightmares in the shadows...
and they will rebirth you...
into nothing better nor worse"

^^^ So true - I have felt this way many times, and I adore this stanza....

Such a somber view of dreamers... and yet very realistic. I too have felt these emotions as well, and the author has taken me to the flip side of a dreamer.

Being a dreamer can and does take its toll.. We can dream of euphoric beauty beyond what's real in the world and yet sadness can consume us. Just my thoughts upon this piece. The elegant flow within this poem was dazzling and very well written. Well done Tara Kay

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A tie was broken, the vote went for Prince Danz,
if I've missed anything over here, please do send me a pm.

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Congratulations to the winners and HM's, the poems are awesome!!!!

Thank you for the HM and the thoughtful comment, and thanks Nana for all your hard work. :]

Congrats to the other two winners and HM's!!!

Also to the judges - thank you SO MUCH for your kind words - they mean a lot to me.

Nana you're a sweetheart. :">

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Congrats all! Yay liz :)

Congratulations to the winners and Hm's :-) Beautiful poems!! and thank you very much the Hm and to the judges lovely comment.

Congratulations to everyone this week! Thanks to Nana for keeping the contest afloat and thanks to the two wonderful comments on my work! I truly appreciate it.

Congrats to All!

Congratulations! Beautiful work :)

Congrats all! Well done ;)

Congrats!!

GO LIZ!

Thank you judges for the lovely comments.

Congrats to Danny & Liz, quality work as usual.

It's so nice to be sharing the front page with poets like melissa and liz, they were both great poems. thank you judges for the comments :)

Congratulations everyone. Such wonderful writes this week. Thanks mods and Nana, you do a perfect job every Monday! :)

Thanks for the HM and well done to all the winners and all involved :)

Congrats winners~!

Thanks guys!

You're all so sweet... I feel like crying now :| but I won't since I'm at work lol

Why would you cry? :(

..from happiness, I guess <3

Thanks folks for making this site such a wonderful place. Of course, congratulations to all winners and hms.