Hesitating on an expression

Hail all,

Not being a native English speaker I'll always need an advice when it comes to tricky or fine expressions.

Here I'm writing a song about a traveling guy who gives a promise having the best intentions, but his way of life doesn't allow him to keep his word. So I've come to an expression "...words written in the sand...", but that has more syllables than the music length, so I hesitate between these two replacements: "[...words left in the sand...]" or "[...just words in the sand...]".

Here the lines:

"I'll come again"...
"I won't forget"...
...words left in the sand...
==>or
[...just words in the sand...]

They both match well the music length but to me the first one seems better. Any opinion?

Thanks a lot and best vibes.

Bad Disciple

Good luck with the song, that's neat you are into song writing and it sounds like it's a real inspiration to you..

Hmm....either one works, but I'd have to say that "just words in the sand" speaks enough, that you don't need the "left" to be implied. I feel like it would be stronger just saying it straight out in the sand.

Thanks and that's a fair comment, I'll keep it.