Winners, Monday August 12, 2012

Congratulations everybody ! Well done for those who have made it to the front page, hats off for the H'Ms.
Thanks a bunch for those great judges, and for their cooperation.

One judge however did not vote, so these are the comments and votes of 4 judges.

Winners:
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Two suns
By Naughtymouse
10+10

My Little Girl
by Yaki
10 + 4

-Ships Sink
by Melpomene
10
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HM's with 7 points:
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Snowy Owl
by Everlasting

Abstract Homlessness
By Meme AKA Ms Rhyme

Mesonoxian Daydreams
by Xanthe

Liquefaction
by Chelsey

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HM's with 4 points:
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Dancing With Death (Tanka)
by Lostlove1

The Dock
by Angel Slain

Fields of Populace
by Naughtymouse

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Comments
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Two suns
By Naughtymouse

This poem is truly mind blowing. Its filled with wonder , romance, and nature, which makes a magnificent combination. I thought your details in this piece when describing the sun and the horizon were absolutely breathtaking. So vivid, that when I closed my eyes I could envision it just as you said. The comparison between the real sun and your mate was incredibly adorable. So often lovers call each other "sunshine", but this was worded in a way that "sunshine" was more than just her bringing you light, she brought you life. I have to admit I've read this poem at least 10 times and its addicting. Beauty drapes down every stanza and if any women read this, I'm sure their hearts were truly melted. Amazing

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This nature poem is very unique and creative. The author designed this poem as a breathtaking nature poem and added a beautiful love scene throughout this piece.

"My day has begun

With two suns." <--------- The ending ties love and nature together with a beautiful finish...

I adore the emotions and elegance thought out.
Mornings are romantic with just the sun alone and when you add a love for another, its mixed with richness and passion, which both love and nature create. Put them together and you have a beautiful poem.... Well Done Naughtymouse

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My Little Girl
by Yaki

This is great, Yaki. You're voice shines through as clearly as a bell. Repetition is a key factor in why I chose your poem this week. Sometimes poetry can be outright annoying if there is too much repetition involved. You make extensive use of the device, but somehow it never gets boring or overbearing.

What I like most is the quiet power you seem to have. The tone that I read this in is one of a person who has spent many hours in meditation, thinking and truly trying to figure things out. Under the surface, I sense that this poem is very peaceful, regardless of the amount of worry that is expressed literally.

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Yaki, this poem is just beautiful and shows just how beautiful you are to be thinking of a lost little girl in another country. That is so precious to me that when I read this I got caught up in your emotions and how sweet it is of you that I didn't even focus on the poem. However, when reading the poem once more, I fell in love with your metaphors. The men growing lies in their adams apples, and a broken chain you still cling on to...you speak of such aching for a soul you've never even met and that is so amazing. This poem was so lovely to read, you did such a great job speaking of your desperation.

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-Ships Sink
by Melpomene

Just from the poem I could tell this poem was going to have a feeling of sadness. Even though it was in the sad category, sometimes that isn't a clear representation that the poem is going to draw out the sadness in a reader as well...this poem did.

They say that girls grow up to marry someone like their fathers and I could just see a little girl fighting that notion throughout this piece. Clawing at it and ripping it to shreds just so it doesn't ring true. Such a beautiful way you told this tale...I like the chronological feel you gave to it with the innocence of childhood and how this man impacted your life to the insecurities he instilled in you that you later saw in a lover. I loved how this was all laid out.

This has to be one of the best poems I have read in a long while. You sure did tug on my heartstrings, girl!

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Mesonoxian Daydreams
by Xanthe

First things first. Your vocabulary is immaculate. Your word choice is often very interesting, and when you use lesser known words, it never feel. obnoxious (I find it's something that can really destroy poetry).

Now. Your story. It's a fantastic and interesting look at human nature. Sometimes, during social interaction, we only hear what we want to hear, see what we want to see (on a perceptual level, anyway). The more lonely a person gets, the more true this can become.

Sad, touching, and wonderfully candid. Great work!

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The Dock
by Angel Slain

I really liked this. The assigned rolls of the ocean and its waves were interesting. In a way, the poem resembles the dock that you speak of. It begins strong, and although, by the third line, you see possibility of it faltering, it remains just as powerful in the end.

This is a nice way to describe strength in human invention. We often look at our man-made world as being flawed and easily destroyed by our friendly neighborhood mother nature. It's very rare that someone writes about the simple beauty that lies within the structure of something like a dock.

Excellent job!

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Abstract Homelessness
By Meme AKA Ms Rhyme

What an opening stanza! I was captivated at this very word, "duvet". Very uniquely used, don't often see that in poems. Already after stanza one, the sadness was felt of missing someone. I love that "cup of smiles" were basically carried out throughout the whole poem with using the sip, and smell, and warmth...keeping the same metaphor throughout one piece is brilliant. The last stanza left me in awe. I was blown away by the use of homeless and it was describing a heart and not a person. Well done with this piece!

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Snowy Owl
by Everlasting

What a perfect opening! I really liked how you tied this poem with the concept of a soul and the transitions it goes through.

"I know bodies become mute
with your elegance and port,
as well as for the faithfulness
for your mate,"
^Such a great stanza! I loved the imagery here and how you expressed that bodies become mute. I just latched on to that image for some reason because it was so unique! My favorite part of the poem.

Great job!

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Fields of Populace
by Naughtymouse

I was really intrigued by the title, nicely phrased! I could just sense the loneliness stitched into your words even if it is self-induced. We all do that, though. Cut ourselves off from others and sometimes it is in order to better find ourselves.

"Just me, with my thought and pen,
re-writing the un-written for
an audience of none."
^You can be your own audience! I think this stanza embodies the feeling of the whole poem for me. So beautifully written

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Liquefaction
by Chelsey

Coffee is such a wonderful Metaphor to write about, and I really adore the way this author created this piece.

The beginning of this poem expresses her dislike for coffee, but then she adds the way this person makes her feeling and wraps her emotions within coffee itself...

"I am the coffee.
Guzzled down your throat and meeting
butterflies in the bottom of your stomach
As we both provide your dose of caffeine"

The creativity of this piece really made me speechless... Love this stanza!

I enjoyed this piece from start to finish! Well Done Chelsey

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Dancing With Death (Tanka)
by Lostlove1

This tanka is well written, and packed with such a powerful and dark message. I could picture a lady dancing with the grim reaper...

I also was taken back to the "Phantom and the Opera" I was filled with powerful visuals and love the word usage! That is what is so wonderful about this poem.

I could actually feel the dark romance feeling of the dark entity and the lady...very intense! I was whisked away in so many angles. Well Done Lostlove1

Ms Sunshine,
if I messed up anything, let me know to edit.

Bennnnnnnn! Congrats on your first win! That poem was my favorite of the week :)

Congrats to mel and yaki with their amazing poems as well!

And thanks so much for the HM

Congrats!

Congrats all!!

Re the judge who didn't vote... Are the sub judges not filling in? Just curious.

Congratulations all.

I am attempting to plan a win...god knows how many years here and only one win...

Nana, You rock!!

Congratulations guys!!!!

Thankyou so much judges and Naaaanaaaa!

Two Suns is something i am really proud of, its meaning for me i very deep so to have it nominated and to win just blows my mind thaankyou so so so much honestly you've made my week just beaming for ear to ear :-))))

BIG BIG LOVES XXX

Britt,
We agreed in a different thread that we would go to 3 judges. Our method of resolving mistakes & mls-communications is as follows: we select 5 judges. If at least 3 of them vote we do not sub. The site breaks ties.
One judge let us know they would be gone for two weeks. We still have 4, so no sub. It seems like we are shirking responsibility but we are not. The fact is that the demand for humans to break ties, combined with the need to sub judges wound up with several injustices. This turns out to have the least risk of someone wrongly being denied the front page.

No, no that makes sense, I just didn't see it before and wasn't sure if things had changed. I was gone for a little bit and didn't read all the threads before. :)

Thanks to the judge who voted my poem, much appreciated!

Congrats to Naughtymouse & Yaki, lovely poems. Congrats HMs.

Congrats to the stunning winning poems! We have such awesome writers on this site!

Thanks for the HM for "Dancing with Death" I didn't realize it was nominated :)