Winners, Monday August 28, 2012

Congrats for those who have made it to the front page! Along with myself. Thanks dear judges for your amazing cooperation! Well done for the H'Ms, great poetry indeed as one of the judges pointed out in one of their comments, you guys keep writing great stuff.

These are the comments and votes sorted
by the choices of 3 dedicated judges.

WINNERS:
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In the wake of sunlight
by Ms Sunshine 10

Pa
by The Poetess 10

A Thousand Prayers
by The Princess 7+10

HM's
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Nautica Blue
by Melpomene 7

Removing the poet 7
by Chelsey

Here Comes the Rain Again
by Karla 4

My poetess
by Naughtymouse 4

Mad 4
by Darren

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COMMENTS
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In the wake...of sunlight
by Ms SunShine

I can't stop reading this piece, over and over again I'm taken away by the sheer beauty of sorrowful and heartfelt expressions within each and every line.

To start: The first line captivated me with the words such as "yawning dim night"---- beautiful word display!

The entire piece is filled with an aching heart that yearns for the darkness to bring light, this is my feeling upon this piece.

I can't help but feel a sense of desperation and within these feelings Nana has continued on with elegance...word by word.
This poem makes me speechless... Well Done Ms SunShine

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A thousand prayers
by The Princess

Welcome back Norhan! Way to make your entrance with this talented poem! Talk about a heart moving, gut wrenching, tear jerking poem. This was that. Its been a long time since a poem blew me away that way this poem did. Firstly, I absolutely loved that is was broken down into 3 parts. I can't say I've seen that here on PnQ and the one time I have it was a long story. This remained in poetry form and I loved it. Secondly, everyone always oohs and ahhs over word usage, but wow!! The wording in this is what will move the readers. Your metaphors were mind boggling. Personifying yawn was brilliant. And the repetition created a stutter. A stutter that vocalizes confusion, pain, loss, affirmation in your tone. Lastly, the story behind it..So moving. So incredibly sad. Beautiful descriptions of flags draping over caskets. This is so deserving of a win, you're a gifted being.

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This site is overflowing with meaningful poetry as of late. This poem is no exception.

You've given great inside view of the woes that come from war.

What I like about this poem, especially, is the form. The fact that it's broken up into three parts is very nice - it's broken up well (in appropriate places). Each part feels uniquely independent while you still maintained continuity overall. The tone was well executed and little dabs of repetition here and there helped glue the whole poem together in a neat way.

This had great flow, a great story, and stylistically I'd say it's the best piece this week. Fantastic job!

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Pa
by The Poetess

Nour. It's been a long time since I've read a piece as touching as this. This poem gave me cold shivers and inspired strangled tears. You have experienced something that nobody at your age should ever have to think about.

This poem is very deep and shows wisdom that only brutal life experiences can bring to us. You worded it so well. For such a complicated and heartbreaking experience, it reads amazingly well. Such a fantastic poem.

As you can tell, I was deeply moved by your work, but I need to point something out:

"I thought you were brutal but I know now
that the absence of Winter is even more
harsh than Winter. "

This stanza alone blew me out of the water. It is so true and intrinsic to our nature. If you put thought into this, then good on you for working hard to create an incredible metaphor. If you didn't think and just wrote what came to mind, then I'll say it: You're a genius.

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Here Comes the Rain
by Karla

First - I really enjoyed the concept. Taking a personally significant song which is well known is a great way to reach your readers while paying tribute to something you hold dear.

I'll admit that the quote at the beginning seemed a bit unnecessary at first, but after I read through the piece I saw that it actually works quite well.

I thoroughly enjoyed your use of language in this piece, specifically at these points:

"She exposed herself to the poem
in total promiscuity with her ghosts and feelings,
exaggerating little when hyperboles rained
truths for two weeks and half yesterdays.

She surfed on her brain waves,
falling in shipless oceans where life
struggles to live and death performs
a late drop.

Her mid-latitudes have no rhythm
but she is still in tune with eternity.
(Here comes the rain again)

-The third door was open-

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Tomorrow started yesterday."

Hahahaha. Yes. That was the whole poem. You really nailed the word-choice when you wrote it! I mean it.

I really liked the second last line, too. I'm not 100% on the significance, but it sounds distinctly prophetic and sort of gives purpose to the piece as a whole. Awesome job!

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Removing the poet
by Chelsey

Chelsey, I applaud you!! There are certain times in a writer's life, when they can feel drained. They need to release those raw feelings and emotions within their writings... It's a very deep need that all of us from time to time need to express and share.

Even when you felt the need to strop all creative and technical aspects of a poem, you still allowed the reader to be mesmerized.

There are some times in life when we need to spill our emotions and deepest feelings onto paper because if not, the chaos within is overpowering.

The ending says it all... for there is no one far more greater to please, than your own self... Well Done Chelsey

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Nautica Blue
by Melpomene

What another epic piece by our one and only Mel. I don't understand how you are able to take the simplest words and turn them into something so beautiful, within the saddest poems. Your opening stanza made my mouth drop, I had to of read it at least 5 times. What I love is that plenty of poets have written about poems, poetry, the process of writing, etc, however no one has described so uniquely the "romance" between knuckles and fingers. Nor has described calloused hands as "decorative", I just fell in love with that. Your second stanza just made me smile at your talent even though I was frowning at the topic. Mel the description of the scent was so breath taking, so deep, so creative, so real. I could sense it all and became numb. Numb at the fact you have described someone so perfectly, I could feel and smell what you were feeling and smelling. This was phenomenal

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My Poetess
by Naughtymouse

I'm becoming very fond of your work Naughtymouse. Your love poetry is so real, so in depth , that one can sense your adoration when reading your poetry. This poem was so beautiful. Loved the comparison to a painter, us writers are painters in a unique way. We paint with words rather than with color and that's what I loved about this piece. Is you fell in love with a painter, but called her poetess. I loved your word usage. "Tangible, graciously, recto/verso" The description of the pen curving and arching and the descriptions of her were just perfect. Well done.

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Mad, (An Acrostic Haiku palindrome)
by Darren

With this poem Mr. Darren, I say, don't get out more, because I really enjoyed this piece.

You have managed to create a fun, lively and creative mixed formed poem.

There is allot of messages within this poem. I felt sarcastic tones, questioning the madness, and with the message of a person going mad, to create it into a mixture of formed poems is a brilliant idea and format to get your point a crossed! Well Done Darren

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If I messed anything up, let me know.
Ms sunshine, XXX.

Thanks for my HM!!

Congrats to the winners on some amazing writes!

Congratulations to all the winners and HM's!!! Awesome job :)

Thankyou so much for my HM i so so so appreciate it :-))

Thaaaaankyou Nana xx

and Thaaaaankyou judges :-)

Hope dad liked my poem. Thanks judges, this means a lot to me.

Congratulations Nana (and thanks). Norhan, what a comeback! Wtg!

Congratulations to our winners:
mid east beauties all this week.

Thanks to the judges & to Nana

Congrats to everyone this week. Beautiful poems!

Thanks nana. :D

Congrats all!

Congrats all!!:D

Congrats to the winners, well deserved

Thanks for my HM

Congrats to the winners and HMs.

Congratulations Winners & HMs! I've really enjoyed reading the poems this afternoon.

Thanks to the judge who voted my poem, your words were lovely and very much appreciated.