Winners! Monday Semptember 24 , 2012

WOOOT! well done everyboddyy, amazing poems, it was such a week, judges had almost same close choices! I loved all the poems I've read as well.

These are the results summing up the votes of 4 dedicated judges, one judge apologized from judging this week due to medical emergency! with them a speedy recovery ^__^

A tie on 3rd place between Colm, Slighte and Queen was broken by the site, sending Colm to the front page.

VOTES:

Electric Kiss 10 + 7= 17 Points
By Lioness

Whiskey Slumber
by Hannah Lizette 7 + 10= 17 points

Finding Winter Now
by Slighte 10+4 =14 points

Sagrada Familia
by Colm 4+10 = 14 points

Faded Mortality 7+7=14 Points
By The Queen

Creativity choses a path into darkness
By Darren Connor 4 points

Camping in a Heart
by Wild flower 4 points

Electric Kiss

I am really glad you posted again Liz, I can honestly say that the main page missed your poems :) Now back to this epic piece you penned.

The first part of this poem was honestly my favorite. You gave me the feeling of being chased and frightened but then found true meaning of being safe in your lovers arms. What a beautiful image you created here, and if true love is shared between two people then you can honestly find sanctuary in each others arms.
"at that point I knew God existed."
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This line just gave me a sense of peacefulness and calmness. Its like saying being lost in your arms was meant to be, amazing indeed.

I love the idea of using thunder in love poetry, it shows how strong love can affect someone and how surprising and fast love can strike. Its mind dazzling what a feeling like love can do and affect people. You easily lose the pace of time and the sense of it whenever you are close to the person you love, you delivered that idea so elegantly.

Now that ending is what I call breathtaking!
You welcome it, its like awaiting for it to strike again and you actually are anticipating for that to happen.

Masterminds create masterpieces.
Well done dear.

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Liz, you have created a poem that makes people want to fall in love. What you described is a kiss that people will yearn for. Loved the combination of kissing and thunderstorms. I've read poetry about both topics separate which sometimes get a bit boring if I'm honest because they are overused topics, but writing about them together, so different and gave me goose bumps. Loved the expression "lightning never strikes the same place twice" and how you incorporated it into this poem. There is something about that ending statement "I welcome it", that gives this poem power. It really just affirms how powerful that kiss is for you to want it again when usually, being electrocuted is something that one would not want to experience twice. This was such a lovely write and I'd be lying if I said I didn't adore it. I truly did.

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Finding Winter Now
by Slighte

"was to write you
as a poem so you could see
yourself as something beautiful. "

These lines make this poem incredibly beautiful and yet so bitter sweet at the same time.
Upon reading these lines, I found myself smiling but also I was sad-sad that the person described didn't see thamselves as beautiful already and that they had to be informed that they actually were.

The imagery created within the next lines, of weaving in out with the wind-oh my! Such beautiful pictures are created within the reader's mind and I am at a loss for words to describe just how gorgeous I find this.
As I prefer music more than anything else, I absolutely adore the reference to hours passing faster.
"I know that you're tired. " Favourite line of the poem. Isn't it true that -everyone- is tired? We get so weighed down with the bad things in life that we often forget to notice and appreciate the finer things and this line hits home hard with the reader.

The following lines simply become even more graceful and elegant as I progress to the end of the poem. This poem as a whole made me question why people do not tend to believe they are beautiful-we all preach about inner beauty, I am guilty of doing so myself, yet I refuse to believe it when others tell me the same thing. These lines make me question and examine my own thoughts and opinions, which I am always happy to do, as I find I learn alot of new things.

My other favourite part of this was the closing lines-they are filled with so much love and emotion and such sincerity that it makes my heart completely melt.
I honestly have nothing bad to say about this poem. I truly feel it is a wonderful piece of writing.
This has to be one of my favourite poems that I have come across on this site, and I will be reading more of this author's work.

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This author knows love poetry...WOW! He took me away into the wide world of Romance with this elegant love gem!

"Darling, all I wanted
was to write you
as a poem so you could see
yourself as something beautiful"

^^^ I melted with this beginning stanza, I was a puddle of mush from the very start!
To write his love as a poem, describing how beautiful she is through words, I really adore the creative twist he took here.

In my mind, he wants her to see her image within poetry. I got chills for he sees her as more of a poetic piece of art than she sees herself perhaps. I was left speechless by the ending as well.. What a beautiful and creative love poem! Outstanding!!

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Whiskey Slumber

What an intriguing opening! The "Hello lover" makes me immediately think on happy thoughts, and yet I know that's not going to be the case as this is in the dark section. This in turn makes me want to read more. The next stanza blows me away. Almost everyone puts on a show at some point in their life, to stop others from guessing what is really going. I'm sure many people can relate to this. I know I can.

The next stanza drips with bite and sarcasm, and add the imagery from the last lines here and this becomes my favourite part.

I adore the small lines inbetween each stanza, I find it adds a beautiful effect to the depth and emotion behind the words, yet manages to continue capturing the evilness and darkness behind the poem.

I found this poem to become more instense as it porgressed. It's so true every person can only take so much before they finally snap, and to me this poem shows the author has finally had enough and that they can not take anymore.
I love how the end has such a twist-the opening of the poem begins with the author somewhat confused and down as to how they are being treated and yet ends with them as the villian as the piece, which is not something that you often see. My favorite imagery would be the crimson matted hair-crimson reminds me of blood, and this makes me wonder if the author was extremely violent to the person she/he was talking to throughout the poem.
I also liked the closing lines, the opening was full of such promise and hope, while the closing lines ended in such a brutal way, leaving no doubt in the reader's mind what had slowly happened throughout the poem as a whole.
The only thing that I found I disliked within this was the constant use of "I." I don't believe so many were needed.
As the author states this poem was written for a club challenge, I do think they did a great job with this.

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Hannah, I can't say I have read your work often, but compared to the ones I have read by you, Whiskey Slumber was entirely different, unique, and really mind blowing. The story you tell in this amazing poem is just fascinating. Definitely a poem I didn't want to end as I was reading it. Let me briefly tell you what I like about this poem. First, was the twist. It's been a while since I've came across a poem that has a twist, and an amazing one at that. Loved that your poem started out with "Hello lover", that's somewhat inviting, and ends with "Goodbye lover" and was tragic. I also love that they were spoken by two different people. I thought the "Zzzz's" added so much to this piece. I thought to myself, when do we see an onamonapia's in poetry? Not often, which made me love this more! People use "slumber" a lot in poetry, but adding the sound somehow made this poem even more intriguing. I also loved describing him as a snake and using words that made him seem evil and dark. Over all Hannah, this poem really grabbed my attention with every little detail and I believe you deserve more recognition for it

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Faded Mortality

This is beyond dark, beyond creepy, beyond all senses of creativity! What you managed to do here is take the reader with you to a fantasy world; a really dark and mysterious one, and WOW what a ride is that!
I honestly learned some new words reading this piece, which means I read it more than once to get the whole feeling to it, and the more I read; the more I love it.
The images were also spot on. With the black birds and feathery trees; I got to scenes from this picture. Either a lot of dark birds standing on trees or maybe a reflection of leaves and branches left feathery shadows on each other, either way the image was still perfect!
The pauses you created were in my opinion so essential to this peace. You allowed the reader to see and feel the same way you did while writing this. Especially the pauses in the middle, gave me chills. The fear, the darkness, the creepiness OMG you painted a perfect dark atmosphere right there.

That ending ... What can I say about that ending. Epic? Wouldn't do it justice at all!
How did you even find that idea to write it that way? It felt darkly and viciously romantic.

Hats off to you ..

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By far, one of the best dark pieces I've read to date! This poem had me from the start, visualizing a lady in dark clothing, granting me a gothic feeling.. I felt like this was a dark romance almost, very haunting, with the deep nature tones of the night, very breathtaking. It made me feel like the author was talking about deathly spirits, returning to their grave as one. I also felt a dark passion in sense. I love the display of "Owlish eyes" and the ending is mouth dropping... (no - pun intended ha ha) It was just a really awesome way of ending this powerful poem. I may be way off base with my interpretation of this poem, but that is just the feeling I got, and I truly admire this poem!

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Creativity choses a path into darkness

I find poems that start with questions and wonderment so intriguing as I try and find answers within that poem itself.
Then the raw sadness of this piece hits you at once. The image of a tower on a hill instantly gave me the feeling of loneliness even before finishing that whole sentence getting to the idea of a club for one which also emphasized the sad truth that the writer really do suffer from the bitter feeling of loneliness.
Such a poetic and heartfelt piece, it shows the inner struggles that we have sometimes, and I also like the little bit of hope the writer introduced at the end of this piece. It shows that with a strong will anything can be conquered.

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Camping in a Heart
by Wild Flower

This has to be one of my most adored openings of a poem that I have ever come across on this site. The intensity created and captured within these opening lines...simply, wow. They cause so much emotion for me as the reader and I want to see where this is going.
I find the next lines to be just as powerful-we all hide part of ourselves that we don't want the outside world to see, whether it be the more emotional side of us, or the more deviousness side, and more often than not, we hurt others by doing this.
How I enjoy the following lines also..we all meet that 'one person' and think we can change them/get them to open up/find out what it is that they are so frightened of being open about!

"Not to burn ashes" Another favourite line of the piece. It creates such sad imagery and emotion, and shows the reader that the author wants more than they are getting.

Wolves are my favourite animal, so my favourite piece of this was the reference to them, and stating about the wolves and owls in the night again adds such beautiful imagery and creates such vivid pictures in my mind.

That ending-holy crap! Too often we always wish to see the 'real you' yet we never get to do so. I like how the author states that maybe they will finally understand the person they are referring to, also.
This poem speaks volumes to me about the way we always hide ourselves within society and how we put on a facade for others so that our true selves do not show.
I found the entire piece to be filled with incredible imagery and a constant, unfaltering flow throughout. I love this.

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Sagrada Familia
by Colm

Colm, I envy the way you write. What made this unique, is you didn't use too many metaphors or similes, you didn't personify much. You told a story and the descriptions you used is what made this poetic. Every little action or thought were described in this poem which really sets up a perfect image in someone's mind. I think that's what poetry should do, and yours did exactly that. I was so disappointed at the end of this piece, but to be honest, I love that I was let down. It made me wonder what happened next. Did this guy ever get to talk to this girl? Does he see her again? Who was she to him? Poems that make a reader think and want more are obviously the best. If you can move a reader to think that way, and to sigh at the end of reading because they want more, that is one good piece of poetry. I can't comment much more because all I will keep going back to is your descriptions which were phenomenal. Well done!

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I can't express enough about how much I admire this piece.
When I read the title of this piece, I was swept away, for In my mind I felt like the author was talking about the La Sagrada Familia, the temple in Barcelona, and in a very unique and creative form of expression, he leads me on to feel like it was a metaphor of a lady... All through out this piece I was taken away, visualizing the temple as a lady... it was really a captivating piece! Another thing I really loved, was the word "gaudy" .... Because the temple was created by Gaudi . Maybe the author didn't mean for that to be a similarity but that is the way I took it and that is what hooked me on this poem... one of the reasons anyway...
I can't stop talking about this piece for its structure is so technically sound and truly brilliant.. The word usage and metaphors was to die for... hands down one of my favorite poems of the year! Beautiful!

MS SUNSHINE

First of all congrats all, very nice poems this week... but may I ask why it's Colm's poem that is on the front page instead of The Queen's?

Both are very worthy though!!

Yeah, same question :P

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And CONGRATS KITE RUNNERS! and all those chosen poems. They are all fantastic.

Okay, it's 7+7 for Queen not 10+7... both scored 14 points, the site broke the tie and chose one of the three poems XD

Congratulations winners and HMs:)

And thank you judge for the HM, it means a lot. As well thanlks for the club" Like the Flowing River" for making me write this poem.

Thank you Nana for your hard work.

Congrats all.

Does the site break the ties now? I thought it was a sub judge that does that?!

Sorry I have a hard time keeping up

Fantastic poetry this week Poets :)

Awwww WF you're super sweet zsfndxjkfhdfjkh <3

Connie! yes beautiful, the site breaks the ties :)

:) Thanks Miss Lebanon, not that I understand how the site would break them...can anyone explain? PM is fine or here...Is it by number of visits, rating, number of votes...eenie meenie minee mo?

Eenie meenie minee mo lmao!! I love you Connie!

Congrats winner, those poems were fantastic

Connie,

On an earlier thread we came to the conclusion that sub-judging tiebreakers wound up causing more mistakes than letting the site break ties.

How does the site break ties? IDK - honest.
Some algorithm based on votes, visits, rating and devotion to the Dali Lama.

If Janis remembers we're still here, he has a lot to fix & explain.

Larry

Thanks Larry. You are a peach!

Thanks for my HM

chuffed : - )

I truly am shocked!!!

Thank you so much! :D

Well done to the other winners and to Hayley and Myryn, I'd love to know how the site picks these winners because it seems totally random. In my opinion the sub-judge was a better way of deciding ties, didn't a mod used to step in to judge if there was a tie back in the day or wasn't something along those lines agreed upon?

Anyway thanks for the judges comments, some nice interpretations and viewpoints, its always appreciated! (P.s the Gaudy reference/similarity was intentional)

I guess, through constant observation since I was a judge, that the computer breaks ties according to everything that Larry mentioned above: number of visits, number of people nominating the poem, number of comments, and rating.

I guess, through constant observation since I was a judge, that the computer breaks ties according to everything that Larry mentioned above: number of visits, number of people nominating the poem, number of comments, and rating.

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I'm not so sure because Myryn's had a higher rating, number of visits and nominations than mine, is it something to do with submission dates? And if it is visits, votes etc. mightn't this be a bad way to sort it seeing as 'downvotes' happen, more well known people get more votes/visits, etc? I'm confused by it.

In short I guess I'm saying I'd be in favour of doing it like we had before where a sub/mod/designated person would break a tie rather than leave it too the computer, if that was changed by consensus in a thread or vote or something I apologise, I must have missed it

Aweeeeesome writes guys!! Fantastic!

Thank you kindly all for your beautiful words they mean a lot to me.

Judges - thank you for your comments, they were awesome

Also congrats to the other winner's and HM's!!!

Nana you lovely lady!!!

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Hmmm.... that's weird. I don't think dates are related. hahha, we truly need Janis in here then!

Sub-judging vs. computer... we went through a winding debate before, and finally the mods decided to have subjudges, but since they aren't committing to their jobs, it is way better to keep the punctual computer working.

Congratulations everyone!!!!!

Congrats all! Stunning work ^^

And thank you judges for the HM and lovely comments. For future reference I am a she not a he ;)

Lol Slighte, check your pms :]

Nana...you created a new month...how creative of you....Semptember LMAO!!!!

YAAAAAAAAAAY someone noticed...this is not the 1st time, but no body payed attention, God, thanks at last someone gave me praise to that! I did last time, but all they moaned about was the date
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thank you hellon <3 <3

We could all sing songs about Semptember....I know there are a few...my contribution....*cough...clears throat*

It might as well rain until Semptember....LOL!

Carole King...I think??????

Congrats all

September means spring, my fav time of the year..

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An optimist for sure.....he lives in Melbourne!!!!!

OMG hellon I LOVE THAT SONG it might as well rain until Semptember....damn I even wrote a poem on that title, but if lyricist saw mine, they would commit suicide. Was horrible. :P

I think someone else wrote it/sang it....can't remember now but...it's a classic!

Just my type :P

When September Ends by Green Day

Summer has come to pass
The innocent can never last,
Wake me up when September ends.....

Love that song

I think it's a beautiful song too Sam...there was a poem on here by a member called Gamma Concept...think she changed her name but I can't remember what it is now. Anyway she had a lovely poem about how she loves the sun in late Semptember.....I'd love to read it again so....if your still out there miss Roxy...please make yourself known?

Awwwwwww Roxy we have a special bond, she changed her name into a story she recommended me to read, the woman is inspiring lol... Sungrl and Mrs Whatsit....but it's been a while since she pmed me, or even logged in, I check her REGULARLY...there you go:

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=209758

Thanks Nana but...the poem I was talking about isn't there :(...I'm sure it was titled...There's something about the sun in late Semptember....

I recommend you to listen to music and read also so....do you like fairytales....I think you probably do?

Congrats guys :) I want to have some peace of mind to be able to read the poems!

Yes I love lol and she used to delete poems ...so I guess she deleted it.

Are you about to make a recommendation ? :D

I've noticed in the past few weeks or so that the judges comments have become quite...well personal. What I mean by this..quite a few of them seem to be familiar/friends with the author....by this I mean calling them by their first name and this worries me because again I'm wondering about favouritism. The judges remain annonymous and yet....by their comments you can tell the are more familiar with some members than they are with others.....

I know I'm a little late but Congratulations to all!!!