Winners Tuesday, October 23, 2012

Congratulations, glad two of my nominations won, definitely well deserved for the 3 of you!
Chelsey keep the great work coming! You're gracing the front page baby.

Well done for the HMs, keep writing!

One judge will be sending the comments soon, network issues.

Tie on 3rd place between Chelsey's poem and Noura's, site broke the tie with Chelsey's poem going to the front page, on a side note, Noura, the poem is just outstanding, hats off for it.

VOTES:

Tai Shan - at the top [String Senryu]
by Larry Chamberlin the Godfather 10+10

Used Excuses
by Tara Kay 7+10

*Unscribbled Words
Chelsey 10

*How it Rains in Damascus
by The Poetess 10

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HMS:
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Seasick
by Twiggy 7

I know a girl
by Yaki 7

I am darkness
by maple 7

Make Waves/Dig Graves
by Jordan 7

Religion causes wars
by Darren 4

Coerced in Stillness
by Meme 4

Amanda Todd
by Chelsey 4

A Dying Rose
Amreen 4

Embracing Change
by Formidable Muse 4

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COMMENTS:
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Tai Shan - at the top [String Senryu]
by Larry Chamberlin the Godfather

I truly admire chained senryu's- they are difficult to write, because you want to keep the reader captivated and you are limited with the wording due to syllable structure... this chained senryu had me speechless.

The message itself was a powerful, intriguing and thought provoking. Larry took me on an adventure to this elegant place, and I have to say I was captivated from start to finish.

This piece felt spiritual to me and also very personal, which for me was just a beautiful read from start to finish... Awesome!!-10 points

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*Comment to be added-10 points*

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Used Excuses
by Tara Kay

Tara this was just a brilliant write. You suck every reader in with that beginning stanza. Everyone has to of felt this at one point or another. Where we write and write, and we think we are writing how we feel, but really we are avoiding the depth of our emotions, we are craving to tell more but can't seem to put it into words. I loved this opening.

I actually quite enjoyed the image of "poetry gave me an excuse to curl up". I could picture a writer, curled up under a blanket, pen in hand, for some reason the tone of this poem made me picture a glass of wine and a fireplace, and a lonely person struggling in her "writing moment"...she's saddened, frustrated that what she feels can't be properly explained...yet it still comforts her.

I love poems about poetry and if I'm being honest this is the best one I have ever come across. Lovely write.-7 points

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This is such an elegant poem and I fell in love with the imagery created within the first few lines.
I was fond of how the author conveyed they wished they had originally been stronger when others put them down as I believe it's something we all later feel in life once we have been knocked down a few times. It takes strength to get back up and I adore the underlying meaning within this verse.

The ending was so sad and laced with such despair and yet the author manages to beautifully portray just what poetry is to many of us- a release and a way to hide from the darker things in life.

I thought this was written beautifully.-10 points
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Unscribbled Words
Chelsey

My gosh, this piece is phenominal. The idea of personifying all of these items, the lines, the words, the thoughts, is very creative and it added some new dimentions to what this piece could have been. Your choice of words is detailed to precision. There is absolutely nothing I would change about this piece, the flow is amazing, the style is wonderful, and your voice is crystal clear. Excellent write-10 points

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How it Rained in Damascus
by The Poetess-(Tie poem)

First I'd like to address the note you put on the bottom of your poem. Do not delete any poems you ever write especially ones like these where you ramble. Rambling often times turns into the best poetry. Like this one here.

I was sucked right in to your opening stanza. I think reiterating "death" three times really made me question what is the importance of this word here? What died and how did it die? I love openings that get me thinking right away.

I must say, I really fell in love with this: "Today is one of those days where that could slip through my calendar without dressing in black"....again you repeated the word "death" without actually saying it. Dress in black is obviously a well known symbol of a funeral and I love how you worded that. Creative. I also like the combination of the expression "slip through my fingers" and how you threw calendar in there...that was just brilliant. Clearly stating that today doesn't need to be recognized, it will be overlooked. Somewhat out of your control.

"Everything is as motionless as any of my writes...except its raining"..........I also loved this line here for the simple fact that I think all poets on the P&Q site knows what you mean. Can relate. ..sometimes we write words that we feel are dead. Have no weight, no meaning, are still. And that's how we often feel life is when we lose someone. Still. Weightless. Except there is always something that reminds us life is still going on...in this case, rain. Loved.

Lastly, " too beautiful to morph into a piece of art, even though I was a Bohemian painted by that time".....I really loved how you started to end this...saying this person is still beautiful to you, too beautiful for you to even write about, although you were so use to writing of this person...

Noura this was just breath taking. Again, never delete rambling, you never know how it touches someone.-10 points

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Make Waves/Dig Graves
Jordan

This piece is amazing, the word choice is fantastic and the emotion is stunning, but strong enough for the audience to feel it too. I love the point the poem is making, the story it is telling. I really enjoy the style you used and the way your flow is. Nice job.-7 points
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Seasick
by Twiggy

Whenever I read a poem of heartache my own heart does flip flops, but with this piece my heart stopped. What a creative and sad love poem!

It had such an awesome display of wording and the metaphor was brilliant! It held me captivated from start to finish! Truly a unique love poem and twiggy penned a marvelous piece! Well Done!
-7 points

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I know a girl
by Yaki

This made me tear up whilst reading this, it's filled with so many powerful emotions and such feeling throughout that you can't help but feel empathy for the author. "I know a girl who has people,
who claim to love her,who tell her
she's beautiful, and talented,
and admirable, but she does
not believe it.." This really made the poem for me, too often we fail to realize our full potential and constantly criticize ourselves even when others do their best to make us aware of just how special we are and how loved. I thought the author managed to capture that brilliantly.

The ending was a perfect wrap for this, it really shows the author's self disdain and again makes you feel such sorrow that they feel that way about themselves.

I found this to be filled with such melancholy and yet written so wondrfully-7 points

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Religion causes wars
by Darren

I truly admire poems that have a powerful punch to them and this piece truly is powerful. The message itself is powerful and then to have it creatively written is an added bonus. Darren displays the emotions and painful price religion has caused throughout the decades. This piece is controversial and many debates go back and forth on this issue, and I applaud the author for using his voice and making this piece come alive! Very nice!!- 4 points

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Amanda Todd
by Chelsey

This is heartbreaking and it's so sad that it is based on a true story. The author manages to wonderfully showcase just how dangerous bullying is and what it can do to a person if not stopped in time.
I do not think the authors word usage was the best, I do however adore the underlying meaning behind the poem itself and the dangers that it highlights. I only hope more people read this and if anyone who has done their fair share of bullying themselves or is still doing so, stops and thinks about what their actions could cause-4 points

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Coerced in Stillness
by Meme

Meme, this is definitely one of the most intriguing poem I've come across in a long time .. I loved the idea of this so much!...so often writers write of their physical appearance. How they are fatigued, pale, red eyed, etc...but you described the inside of a distraught person.. loved the pumping of the blood, and what your insides were going through....and most importantly I loved that you said."save me!" at the end...saying this isn't just a day of being angry, a moment of frustrations, a tragic circumstance your overcoming....you are the circumstance. Your crying for help because inside your torn apart and feel like you have no identity. That's incredible. .well done with this write I didn't really want to stop reading!-4 points

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A Dying Rose
by Amreen

This piece is well written, as painful as it seems to be. The emotion is deffinatly well expressed. The title caught my eye and the poem did a fabulous job of bringing me in. The style choice was nice, as was the wording. Your voice was again clear. Amazing poem -4 points

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Ms. SunShine

Omgosh Noura and I both got 10's? This is the second week in a row where the site broke the tie and I won. That is so weirdddddd!! Guys I promise you I'm not bribing the judges or persuading people to nominate me...I feel almost uncomfortable winning a third time..but I will say thank you before Andrea comes and kicks my butt for feeling bad lol. So thank you for nominating me and voting for me judge. I appreciate the wins lately and congrats to all those beautiful poems that were highlighted this week...

: / but I must say sorry again for taking the spotlight I want to give it to someone else I swear LOL

I really didn't expect this, but thank you to you all that nominated and the judges and of course Nana and a big congrats to Chels and Larry and Noura and all the HM's.

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Aw guys thanks for the mention :) well done to all! Serious talent budding right now. *round of applause*

Have a great day everyone!xox

Congratulations to the winners and HMS

Congratulations Larry, Tara, and Chels...

Your poems were beautiful and well deserved to be highlighted!!!!!!!

Congratulations to all the Hms.... beautiful poems and thank you for my Hm on such a personal piece... makes me smile~

Thanks for the win. Hope the other comment gets sent.

Congratulations to Tara & Chelsey & Noura
Well done to the HMs.

Thank you judges & especially to Nana for keeping it going even while enduring uncertainty and disruption. May Lebanon remain at peace.

Congrats to all the winners and thanks kindly for the HM. :)

Congrats to all the winners and thanks for the HM nana:)

Larry... thank you :)!!

Haha, Chelsy, your poem definitely deserved it. Congrats to all!

It's weird how I like the HMs this week more than the winning poems.

:O

Congratulations anyway.
Felicitations.