Read my chit now

It's gewd.

Sure, I'll read and comment a few of yours. You wanna do me a favor and just read my "Requiem for a Memory". I really need critique. Just tell me anything you didn't like about it.

Like i said i have marines and army friends who have gotten blown up and so i have a biased opinion on your story, Requiem for a Memory. I told you what I think you did right but honestly I don't like the story because I personally believe that nobody should write about something like that unless you have experienced it first hand.

Until you can look a 19 yr old kid in the eyes and see the pain he lives with knowing that he will live the rest of his life without legs and missing his left arm, and knowing that the only hand he has left is so deformed he can't even shake your hand when he meets you, until you can identify with his pain, I don't think you should write about people getting blown up in war.