Contest Winners- January 28, 2013

Hello everyone :) My these weeks go fast don't they?

This week, we had 2 poems voted by more than one judge and 5 way tie between all the poems voted 10 the site broke!

Congrats to all the winners and awesome Hm's

WINNERS:

Valentine's Midnight Song
By slighte- 7 + 4 = 11

Blowing Dandelions
By: Tara Kay- 7 + 4 = 11

Wings of Innocence
By: Baby Rainbow (10)

HM's:

My Medley
by Poet on the Piano - (10)

Like a woman
by Ares (10)

Satori
by Jenni (10)

Necromancy
By: Larry Chamberlin the Godfather (10)

Microscopic Eye [Capturing The Unseen]
By: The Queen (7)

He, Who Observed That Good Lady
by Kiino - (7)

Memories
by Beautiful Chaos (7)

Cyclones
by Colm (4)

Desperation
By: The Huntress (4)

Turning the Page
By: PinkyPrincess (4)

WINNER COMMENTS:

Valentine's Midnight Song
by slighte

It's not too often I see poems broke up into section with Roman numerals, but I think it works extraordinarily well here, because of the emphasis the poet puts on certain words. I love the personification of midnight's light...I would classify myself as a night owl so I am captivated by anything having to do with midnight, I think it's beautiful...and this light is almost a guardian. Watching this person sing then almost merging into him/her. The "I need"'s were so strong here and different. I believed this is what this person truly needed, this song to be almost like their life support. The most haunting line was this "but stars shiver, like me, waiting for the moon to detonate", wonderful imagery that moves me to this place.....I feel as if I am limited by time. The ending was breathtaking- that loneliness is very tangible and the last line inspired me to reach out for more than I've been told. In a way, it's like we have to find what makes us tick even if others say we are not to be part of this or that. Thoughtful and gorgeous write! (7)
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Valentine's Midnight Song
by Slighte

Once I read that all love poems are ridiculous but how can that be possible? I find love poems the hardest ones to write because one has to feel what love is in order to write about it. There are even sites teaching how to write romantic poems, giving tips that might be useful if the poet in you needs some help to develop his writing skills. I simply don't know if they really are good because I still think that inspiration is not enough to write a piece.

Your poem is the memory of your skin, it is the past contemplating you when loneliness embraces your pain. You talk about the pain of love and it is special because we all have stories to tell about that someone we missed somewhere between yesterday and tomorrow. I really liked your emotions dissolved in images and your choice of words. Beautiful piece (4)
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Blowing Dandelions
By: Tara Kay

Tara, here is what I feel from reading this elegantly written piece... To hell with being buried under his wings and being sunk in the city and being so unhappy... get out there and blow those dandelions into the wind it's the trail that you will follow on your journey to chasing those dreams and those dreams will take you to places you've never been. Oh I just love this piece!! (7)
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Blowing dandelions
by Tara Kay

It is nice to read a nature poem that is as accomplished as this piece. I have read quite a few of Tara's poems and I wouldn't expect anything less from her. This poem shows off her ability to take a scenario and suck you into an almost dream like cocktail of imagery. 'I'd still be blowing dandelions in my sleep' is a line that is exceptional and one of the best lines I have read on this site this week. The poem is also nice and short, it doesn't need to be drawn out, it leads us greatly hand in hand to the last line which hits us with real sadness. I just wish I had of thought of stanza 3, it reads as if written by a pro. Well done. (4)
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Wings of Innocence
By: Baby Rainbow

Saffie, I absolutely adore this write, it maybe a sad piece but its written beautifully. I love how each species represents a different feeling or mannerism of each person. Its almost as if the other person tried to make you feel like the smaller one and each time you felt good about yourself, they came back and made you feel insecure. This write is very unique, filled with so many emotions and tells a sad story, the title fits it perfectly, and it flows well. (10)
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HM COMMENTS:

My Medley
by Poet on the Piano

Simone de Beauvoir said that "one is not born a woman, but becomes one" and your piece, Maryanne, portrays exactly what she referred to. Our culture expects women to behave in a certain way, defining what is feminine or not as if a human being could be codified by his/ her gender. Our insane society forgets that each of us is a unique being and due to that, our idiosyncrasies and different tendencies should be respected.
I know how difficult it might be for you to start a new phase in your life and the heavy burden of a label but my dearest one, face everything as a rite of passage: it is just a transition. Don't be afraid of anything. It is not hard to be a woman because it is a natural process in one's life. To be an adult is not a synonym for growing old because our souls/spirits are ageless. Time and age are two stupid concepts. So live your life to the fullest and get rid of the old paradigms: to be a woman is not a legacy, it is just a part of this game called life. Don't also think that being a woman means responsibility because responsibility is something we have throughout our lives. When you are a child, you have to take care of your toys. Then you are a teen and you have to be responsible for your room, homework and etc. As we grow old, responsibilities change but they have always been with us since the brginning.

I found an interesting article about being a woman and I want to share it with you:
"Ten good reasons being a woman is awesome:"

1.Women live longer.
2.Women have excellent communication skills.
3.Women don't have to wait as long to reach their sexual peak.
4.Women are better leaders
5.Women wrote the most successful book franchises of our time: Harry Potter, Twilight, Hunger Games, 50 Shades of Grey, etc.
6.Women own their feelings.
7.Women are more likely to survive critical accidents.
8.Women are more likely to have graduated college by age 22.
9.Car insurance is cheaper for women.
10.Women remember nicer things.

All in all I really liked your poem because it is relatable and candid. .I could see you penned your heart. Many girls who read your piece will see themselves in your lines and a good poem is the one that reads the reader. I also loved the images you crafted. Excellent work. (10)
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Like a woman
by Ares

What Ares has done very well is taken an object and given it a prequel to its existence in his hands. He has shown huge affection for his axe in this piece. For anybody who has played the guitar ( I can hold my hand up to that one) The opening line is very true and very clever. It is an instrument that masters you rather than the other way around. So much dedication is needed to play it properly and for such a long time it does feel like it is playing you. Plus line 3 is spot on, when you just can't get a chord right you do feel a bit simple. I will look past the split word in stanza 2.
Stanza 3 is really deep, it points to the way you are removed from the world for just a moment when you sit and caress your instrument. I enjoyed especially the dramatic way you described how it was made, taking a different almost apologetic view. Then the final few lines link well with the beginning. Great write and worthy of 10 points. (10)
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Satori
by Jenni

I really feel spellbound by what the poet has penned...the poet wrote this brevity that is enchanting and yet makes me try to understand this relationship you are portraying- if one wants the distance but there seems to be nowhere one can go without his/her presence. What I truly admired is this piece is the wording of some of these lines. "Winter becomes you" has more of a intimate, inevitable tone to it instead of just writing the metaphor "you are winter". The power of the first line is unforgettable, and definitely makes me think about this "you" in their mystery. The poet conveyed such a journey and while reading this, I felt no longer will you be guided toward the igloo, you will find your home and only be led by your self. A true gem! (10)
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Necromancy
By: Larry Chamberlin the Godfather

Given the nature of this poem, I thought it fitting that I felt caught up in the brooding, eerie rhyming and flow of each stanza. The language and grammar used were perfect and left vivid images in my mind. (If I'm honest, this poem made me think of the witches in Macbeth.) And the incantation was a great finale. Larry's poem would be the epitome of macabre poetry, if there were such a thing! This was a near flawless write and I just adored it. (10)
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Microscopic Eye [Capturing The Unseen]
By: The Queen

I've read this poem, ten times, at least...
And it leaves me a little perplexed, and makes me question if I have the ability to comprehend what I'm reading...which doesn't happen often and I LOVE that this poem makes me feel like that. I'm left wondering if the author is trying to describe...time. In the first stanza, I feel like I know what an excruciatingly slow day, or a slow motion, moment in time feels like. Second stanza makes me think that the more time something has, the longer it has to flourish and grow. And the last stanza leaves me feeling like I'm watching time slip right on by...and I could quite possibly be way off on how I interpreted this, regardless, the language was fantastic, the flow was seamless-
Awesome write (7)
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He, Who Observed That Good Lady
by Kiino

Your poem is a gem. It made me think of Victorian Times and the naivety of love when courtship advanced by gradations. "The good lady" is the muse, the one who is contemplated, the incarnation of serene beauty, but in no time the narrator portrays her as a seductive woman. Her beauty lies in her respect to the strict codes of that time which made courtship so seductive, in relation to what we have nowadays where people have no time to know each other before they have more intimacy. I am not being puritan but I still think that some stages shouldn't been skipped. Well, at least if you are really interested in a serious relationship.

Well, I fell in love with your peace not only because of the flow: the rhyme is flawless but also because of the images which are idyllic. I also liked your choice of words which are perfect for your piece. Well done! (7)
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Memories
by Beautiful Chaos

Sometimes I re-read my stuff and wonder is it really poetry? I do not write no where near enough rhyming poems. This poem is a great example to us all of rhyming that is unforced. You see this phrase mentioned often, this is the real evidence. Because of this it flows so naturally without and breaks in the pace. I do enjoy reading poems that ask so many questions. This poem oozes sadness and depression and is relevant to the vast majority of people on this site who question their own ability and their own choices in life. Great write and worthy of 7 points. (7)
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Cyclones
by Colm

What a thrill this was to read, I literally felt transported by the poet's words into this event, the confusion the poet was feeling, the chaos of the scene. I admire how the poet
experimented a bit with punctuation placement, instead of writing with the conventional four line stanzas with a comma....these words become alive and I can feel shivers. It definitely is horror to me, and with the twist, as me dying to know how this girl/woman was murdered. If the main character was drugged, knocked unconscious, or maybe had another side to him/her that convinced them this girl had to die. Really intriguing and conveys fear and the unknown so well with its brevity. Great work! (4)
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Desperation
By: The Huntress

I've read this poem several times through out the week and each time I get something a little different out of it. I get a sense of mediocrity from the author, almost like they are merely existing rather than living. I sense frustration and a feeling of abandonment, like the medium that they are so accustomed to expressing theirself through has vanished, cheating them of the release they desperately seek. There's a spectacular display of word play in this piece and singling the last two lines, causes the reader to pause and the impact is felt...the sense of failure and, true to the title, the desperation. This was a great write. (4)
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Turning the Page
By: PinkyPrincess

Sara, this is not just a sad piece, it is heartbreaking and it brings back memories for me of a time long ago and my first real true love. I love to read a poem when I can actually put myself in it and say "I truly understand" and feel as though it was actually written for/about me. When a reader can put themselves into the poets words, it's a damn good write! "There is a cluttered box inside me that you will never discover" this is my favorite line, even though he knows so much about you there is still some he doesn't and now he'll never be able to, its almost as if your saying "your loss mister". The last stanza is the perfect ending for this write. Well done Sara (4)

Wow! So didn't expect this...I know I always say that.
Thank you... The comments were lovely.

Congrats to all winners and HMs and thanks judges, thanks Chelsey x

Congratulations Winners and Hm's!!! Beautiful poetry!!

First win for Saffie- Baby Rainbow!!! WHOOOOOOOOT

Awesome work this week judges and Chels... hugs you!!

Congratulations to the winners!

Thanks for the comment on my HM, it is very much appreciated.

Thanks Chelsey & the judges & thank you site for breaking yet another tie.

Thanks for the hm/comment, and well done all!

Ty and congrats to all

Congratulations to the winners and the HM's!!! What wonderful poems and thank you judges for the HM and comment...I really appreciate the encouraging perspectives as well as the article :]

Congrats winners and HM's. Thanks for the lovely comment. :D

Congrats winners and HMs:)
Beautiful poems:)

Congrats all:)

Congrats winners, some great writing going on here.