The Unspoken Tales - Round 2 RESULTS

Hi everyone! Thanks for the wait, Round 3 will be much quicker & I hope to have results ready much sooner....thanks to everyone for participating, the five of you. Thank you also judges! We had a lot of different thoughts in the comments and also some very close scores......well done everybody.
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POEM #1 [Between Two Walls]

JUDGE 1
COMMENT:

-I love how this poem gets my brain thinking and my eyes visualizing. This is one of those pieces where the reader can become one with the poem...I could picture feet slowly walking past a wall, hands grazing it, while pondering home life....which really the walls were metaphorical, but that's what I love about poetry, I can still picture it happening..

These new walls, have stayed standing,
longer than the ones I cut my palms on,
trying to grip something that wasn't as
exhausting as breathing.

I'll open my eyes to what could be,
Sempre e un giorno.

^ I have to say that stanza was just amazing. I love what you have done with the new walls, describing the difference between the old ones and how it "tore you apart" basically. Describing cut palms and exhausted breathing, it truly shows the kind of tiring life, tiring memories you kept "harbored."..speaking of that..I quite enjoyed how you tied in the quote with that word choice and I also loved your ending line. Amazing incorporation there, with the quote you were given.

VOTES = 8/10

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JUDGE 2
COMMENT:

Beautiful opening here, I am really fond of first line as it makes me think that the poet is referencing that their heart is now hidden behind walls that he/she has constructed? "pondering whether home was closer than I imagined." I adore how simple and straightforward this is. Too many people search for the illusive and manage to forget about what is really close to their heart and this line makes me think/remember that. I love this poem, it's like I can see the authors dreams, everything they want, what they are fighting for and yet at the same time I find it to be somewhat melancholic because of how it's mentioned breathing is exhausting and cut palms. Lovely use of Italian at the end, I've always found it such a beautiful language and it fits very well here. Lovely work.

VOTES = 8/10

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JUDGE 3
COMMENT:

One word comes to my mind when reading this piece: Rustic! Really love the tone in this piece and the scene that was set in my mind while reading this... a few breaks in flow here and there but overall a lovely piece. I admire pieces that allow me to feel the scenery presented. The wall imagery and Madame Butterfly opera added a beautiful touch to this poem!

VOTES = 8/10

TOTAL POINTS = 24/ 30

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POEM #2

JUDGE 1
COMMENT:

I was hoping for just a little more detail in this round...I see where you have described your quote here, longing for hope, but I feel this poem could have went more in depth...more metaphors, more wording, more captivating.

With hardened knuckles
we remain broken
in our hunchback dreams,
longing for the night to come
allowing us to steal away
an ounce of rest.

^ I really enjoyed this stanza. Good word play here with "hard" knuckles, yet remaining broken, I also enjoyed hunchback dreams and the way the night is stealing rest from these people...that was beautiful.
Over all you did well with this piece, I was just hoping for some more deep writing.

VOTES = 7/10

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JUDGE 2
COMMENT:

I really like how the first two lines paint way for a lovely visual only for the tone of the poem to immediately change when followed with the next two. I love what the author took from this picture prompt, it is incredibly sad and yet it's something that needs more widespread attention throughout the world and the author manages to create sympathy for those that go through this on a daily basis as well as simultaneously raising awareness about this matter. I enjoyed the closing verse as although it ends on a somewhat negative note there is also that tiny trace of hope and positivity in there too.

VOTES = 7/10

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JUDGE 3
COMMENT:

Many times I often say: Simplicity is divine.. and so it is with this powerful and well written piece! The message is clear from start to finish. The word usage of hunchback.. says it all.. and the ending leaves a thud in the heart... well crafted and beautifully written poem!

VOTES = 10/10

TOTAL POINTS = 24/ 30

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POEM #3 [Divine Picturesque]

JUDGE 1
COMMENT:

This poem was flawless..I fell in love with the word choice! Your first stanza was something I have never seen when describing nature, or a waterfall...I was sucked right in and fell in love with this poem, and to me, that is what makes a poem amazing when you have that attention getting first stanza...
The feeling one gets when reading this poem it utter happiness and peace, just like the poem describes. I can feel myself in this water, I can hear the sounds, I come alive in its atmosphere.
I'm so pleased with this poem and its beautiful descriptions. I truly wish I could say more. Incredible job.

VOTES = 10/10

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JUDGE 2
COMMENT:

I thought this read more like a narrative play than anything else and I wasn't keen on the amount of fillers throughout the piece. I do enjoy the imagery portrayed throughout and I found myself smiling at the positivity that remains present throughout, the hope and optimism here can be felt from start to finish. Water is known for its healing powers and the way the author describes their actions in this poem only amplifies the feelings it can create. "as I dive downwards for a raised esteem." Really liked this line, I thought the use of diving "downwards" to raise something up was a nice twist here.

VOTES = 6/10

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JUDGE 3
COMMENT:

This piece made me want to dive into the waterfall... crisp, cool and refreshing was this poem! I admire word imagery that gathers my thoughts to see the scene in words. This poem did that and much more. Its like the author gave me views of this scene in stages as it was flowing down... now to me, that is really cool... well written!

VOTES = 9/10

TOTAL POINTS = 25/ 30

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POEM #4 [We are Born Climbers]

JUDGE 1
COMMENT:

I thought this poem started off pretty strong, but then half way through it loses its punctuation and its detail. I like what you did with the picture, describing humans as climbers that always have to persevere in life, but I wish it was less about the downfall we may face and more about the journey through the climb, which would tie in the quote a little more...Still a nice write, just lacks a bit of intriguement.

VOTES = 7/10

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JUDGE 2
COMMENT:

I thought the author portrayed the daily struggles of life here wonderfully. They manage to capture that feeling of hope when we attempt something and the disheartenment when we fail and have to try again. What I liked was how they state how we try again, even if we may fall because it's a stark reminder to never give up on those things in life worth fighting for or those that you love. "if we continue tripping our way upwards
instead of skipping our way down?" I like how this ended with a question as it leaves it open for interpretation and thoughts and the ever so subtle rhyming of tripping and skipping was a nice touch and was pulled off without losing the flow of the poem given the rest is free verse.

VOTES = 8/10

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JUDGE 3
COMMENT:

Beautiful piece of imagery, but the third stanza made me stumble a bit while reading... and I don't mean that as a pun, ha ha but the last line "detaching from wall" makes it stumble a bit and quite a few filler words within this piece that halts its beauty.. Describing the climbers and the mountain could have been tightened up a bit... over all its a lovely piece.

VOTES = 7/10

TOTAL POINTS = 22/ 30

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POEM #5 [Caesar in Tuscany]

JUDGE 1
COMMENT:

Wow...this poem was hard for me to read for personal reasons, I'm not a huge history or Greek fan, however I read this with an open mind and tried to imagine being interested by that and found this poem to be incredibly well written. It looks like you've done research or just really enjoy the topic of Caesar and I thought the knowledge behind the story is what made this poem amazing. In fact, even though this subject is not my cup of tea, half way through it I was becoming more and more interested...well done! To get a reader interested in a topic that would usually turn them off is awesome talent.

VOTES = 9/10

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JUDGE 2
COMMENT:

I love this. This was my favourite of this round, and a poem that I found myself reading repeatedly. I sincerely enjoyed the history and political references and what I enjoyed most was that this was one poem that really makes you sit back and think about things. I couldn't help but smile at the slight humour of "their Great Ass". I also really enjoyed the mention of Plato as some of my favourite quotes were stated by him. This flowed effortlessly, the words just fall right off your tongue and combined with the visuals the author creates, all of this makes for one stunning piece of poetry. Beautiful work.

VOTES = 10/10

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JUDGE 3
COMMENT:

In my opinion, this one was difficult to try and convey. It was well written, but I got lost in the scene set... a bit drawn out and lost me in parts.. if shaped up a bit, this piece can shine. I got lost with the line of "Pompey their Great Ass".... I realize this is a scene of a ruler... Caesar- and his battles and tribulations, I just feel it was more prose and story form... overall well done..

VOTES = 6/10

TOTAL POINTS = 25/ 30

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Poem #4 is the lowest score [by a mere few points!] and will be eliminated, the author of this piece will not continue on.......had a tie for first in this round also, keep it up! Round 3 should be posted tomorrow!

The scores were really close. Nice job everyone.

Wow yeah they were! Thanks MA and judges :)

Incredible comments.

Thanks POTP and Judges:):)

Great comments judges. Keep going everyone x

Well done, in-depth comments. This is great!