The Unspoken Tales - Final Round RESULTS

Poem #1 [A Message of Humanity]
JUDGE 1
COMMENT:

Though the personification in this piece is cute, I was hoping for this to be less of a story and more of poetry.. It was pretty long, which usually I would not mind, but I felt the a tad bit bored in the middle. I get the overall point in the story, the awareness this is trying to raise, however, I feel it could have served better with more structure. Less drug on, more metaphors, more pretty wording....Again, still enjoyed what that you personified objects into people, but I expected a little more for this being the final round.

VOTES = 6/10

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JUDGE 2
COMMENT:

"But they have never portrayed
a sign of Humanity in their acts.
They make every being on this planet
a prey to their pleasure."

I love this. It's sad how true this is and it's something we rarely think about, if ever. We're always so focused on getting what we need or want that too often we forget about the people we may affect with our words and actions. I liked that the author tied the paintbrush and the canvas together to come up with this poem because of course those objects will always hold significance to each other, and I found it interesting how the poem bordered on a simple call to each other from these objects. I adore the underlying message behind this poem and I think it's something we all need to focus more on and think more about. I would have liked to see more imagery in this, as most of this focuses on the conversation held, I think that adding more imagery and less of the conversation would have brought the objects used to life even better.

VOTES = 7/10

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JUDGE 3
COMMENT:

The angle of the two conversing, is something I haven't read in poetry for quite a while and I found this piece to be very refreshing.. The word usage and display of imagery was fantastic.
It created a really nice angle in my thoughts of humanity and that in itself brought this piece home for me... just beautiful!

VOTES = 8/10

TOTAL VOTES = 21/30

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POEM #2 [In Search of Freedom]

I absolutely adored this poem. The details were just mind boggling. Your use of personification completely drew me in, I read it so intrigued, wanting more after every stanza. Its tough using personification and making it sound poetic and not too forced or cheesy, but the author has done a wonderful job of making their personification beautiful and captivating. My only suggestion would be the length. I almost was hoping the poem would end at "wicker coffin" to leave us readers guessing, to just end it with the pain of death. The added stanzas were not needed, for me anyways.

Over all, this was amazing for the tough challenge of this round. Well done.

VOTES = 8.5/10

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JUDGE 2
COMMENT:

"when it rains my tears collect inside
with no one to cry them out for me."
"with my shriveled body stuffed
rudely in the wicker coffin."

I found I really liked these particular lines, they were so unique and moving and it really allows me to feel the pain that the tire swing and the balloon is feeling here. I love this. I thought the author used these objects perfectly and the way they showcase someone growing older and outgrowing them as they become an adult is beautiful. I adore the imagery conveyed in this poem, it really is elegant and dazzling.

"Soon enough we will again
fly away on freedom's wind."

I adore the hope here and I enjoyed how even though the author paints loss and pain previously, they end on such a positive and uplifting note. I thought the author did a magnificent job at bringing the objects to life.

VOTES = 10/10

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JUDGE 3
COMMENT:

I can't get enough of this poem! The word selections and visionary display left me dangling from start to finish. Nature tones are very refreshing in a poem.. it can capture the scene in ones mind.. and this poem holds such beauty.. Love this piece in all its entire form...

VOTES = 9/10

TOTAL VOTES = 27.5/30

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POEM #3 [Noted Needle]
JUDGE 1
COMMENT:

Intereting objects to personify here. The author did well with describing the details of the personification, however this piece lacked punction and was pretty repetitive. Having comma's and a different word choice to break up the piece and help to read better is what I suggest. All in all, I still enjoyed the title, the personification, the story behind this piece.
Well done.

VOTES = 7/10

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JUDGE 2
COMMENT:

"she began to bleed
her colours, being dragged in and out of blackness,"

I thought these lines were perfect. They can be interpreted in several different ways and before I saw what the author had used for their objects I had no idea what they had chosen when reading these lines.

"And he lay himself down before being scratched and tickled"

I can't help but smile here, as I think about the note being 'tickled.' It's such a different way of looking at this object and something I would never have thought of before now.
I thought the ending was splendid, and that it tied the poem as a whole perfectly together. I found it to be somewhat bittersweet, mentioning they would need to find their way home, but I thought it was phrased beautifully.

VOTES = 8/10

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JUDGE 3
COMMENT:

Wind sewing patterns of time is creative at its finest! I can feel the skirt flowing, leaving me with my mouth dropping on this piece! It rings sad tones, but elegance which I adore.
The word choices are fun and lively, and the author brings us a visual display of beauty!

VOTES = 10/10

TOTAL VOTES = 25/30

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POEM #4 [Reflection]
JUDGE 1
COMMENT:

This piece read so elegant, yet so sad to me. I love the story behind it! I'm a sucker for sad stories because they really draw emotions from the readers, and this definitely had me relating to the character described. I actually thoroughly loved how you personified the puddle and tire swing..it wasnt forced, it seemed very natural in this piece..Puddle of secrets tire swing being a best friend...that was nice and fit well with the tone and structure of your poem. Great job!

VOTES = 8/10

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JUDGE 2
COMMENT:

I can't help but fall in love with this more and more each time I read it. I love the first verse as it reminds me of young children at play, so innocent and without a care in the world. I particularly enjoyed how the author mentions the tire swing holding their secrets and mean things others have said as I think in our childhood we all have that special object/friend that we relay our secrets to as well as our achievements and pain and the fact the author mentions this succeeds in bringing them to life here.

"my imagination became
the best thing passed down to me,
and I lived as a child with no regrets."

I adore this. It's positive, moving and beautiful. Our imaginations fuel us, push us, drive us and often at times-save us. And the author portrays that in such an elegant way here.

VOTES = 8/10

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JUDGE 3
COMMENT:

This piece left me in tears. I do love the simple tones, emotions expressed and the heart warming elegance. I however would have like to have seen a bit more creative angle in this piece which is what was needed for this round. All in all... beautiful piece!!

VOTES = 7/10

TOTAL VOTES = 23/30

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And the WINNER therefore is the author of "In Search of Freedom"

----------->>> SIR LARRY CHAMBERLIN

CONGRATULATIONS!!!

RUNNER-UP is TARA KAY with "Noted Needle"

Thanks everyone!

I decided just now to give thorough comments to the readers. 7 for Sir Larry &
4 for Tara Kay.

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A HUGE thank you to the participants: Rusheen, Everlasting, Adreamer, Amreen, Britt, Tara Kay and Larry.

And another THANK YOU to my anonymous judges who I could have done none of this without! The three beautiful:

Maple Tree
Chelsey
& Jenni Marie!

I appreciate your time in critiquing and figuring out what needs to be said among your day. Definitely took a lot of thought :]

Larry? no crap?? I never would have guessed that poem to be his. wow.

Well done everyone!!

Chelsey, I know! it's a pleasant surprised.

Well done Mr. Larry and Tara!

And also everyone who participated as well as the judges and Mary Ann for hosting this contest.

Thanks judges and MA!!

Wow!
Thanks, Mary Ann, and thank you judges. Such thought filled comments!

I have to say this contest was wonderful in it's challenges - from a waistrel in bohemian bondage, a master of Rome deciding his fate and a selfish fantasy of my own: the pictures and prompts were such that each poem wrote itself with me relegated to the position of bystander, like the father in 10 Things.

Tara, as always you blow me away, as did whoever wrote Between Two Walls.

Thanks again for running the contest, MA, and to Andrea, Chels & Jenni Marie for your in depth analyses.

Thanks MA for running the contest.. and to Andrea, Chelsey and Jenni Marie...you're comments were awesome.

Well done Larry. Much deserved.

P.S. it was me who wrote Between Two Walls :) thank you

Beautiful poem, Tara

Sure thing guys! I was happy to and learned a lot since this was the first time I really hosted anything.....the judges did give such interesting perspectives, I know, I appreciate that

I'm glad you enjoyed all the challenges Larry! You should be proud of all you wrote!

& I agree with you about that poem too, Tara, that was one moving piece especially with the ending line then writing it in Italian :]

Thank you MaryAnne and thanks again Larry...
I found myself somewhere in that poem, and just ran with myself and my thoughts.

I enjoyed all the poems for all the rounds, and can't wait to see who wrote what!

Sooooooo whose running next challenge? hehe :)

Congrats Larry Sir and Tara:)

Thank you MaryAnne for hosting the contest and Thanks a lot judges for your beautiful and indepth comments:)

It was fun!!

I could run the next challenge. I'm doing a challenge in FOP right now that I wouldn't mind bringing to the main boards ;)

If someone else wants to go ahead, please feel free!

^ no. nobody likes you. :)

Says the girl who texts me all day..lmao.

I'm using you like a pimp and youre my hoebag company

hahaha

shut up. im jk.

do the challenge..I need to do something different.

Well Princess Chelsey has spoken, however I'm gonna make sure no one else was going to go lol.

I mean when the Princess speaks, do we need the permission of others? mwahaha

Okay.. I'm gonna post it and if anyone wants to complain you can yell at Chelsey :) Hahaha. I want to post it now so people have time over the long weekend if they are free!

They know not to yell at me or theyll get the wrath. hahha