Contest Winners- September 16, 2013

Hey guys! Still only have 4 judges this week, as one is on a bit of a leave. ....We had 3 clear winners today. Two poems were tied with 14 points and looks like the site broke who won that.

Well done to all chosen poems :)

WINNERS:

This Pendulum Of Feelings
by The Queen- 10 + 7 = 17

Time Bom- 10 + 7 = 17
by Britt

Ela
by Melpomene- 10 + 4 = 14

HM'S:

Bored to death
by Michael D Nalley- 7 + 7 = (14)

Overwhelming
by Satish Verma (10)

Scars Are Beautiful
by Redangelwings- 4 + 4 = (8)

Sun Shower
by Biancas Veil (4)

WINNER COMMENTS:

Ela
by Melpomene

This poem is very personal. It comes from fog and disappears in fog . "Your" exit wound worries your mother but when she call, "I" can not come. And then in the end she ends up calling upon both of us, but "we" can't go. By changing from "I" to "we" and "come" to "go" the poet tries to make an statement that is so surreal like in the Dali's paintings: images that repeat but each times differently.
This is a lost love story, a flame of pain that keeps on burning on the lantern of our lives; it burns us and sheds light and brightens the night in the same time. It gives birth to our poetry:
"but you, you birthed my first
real love poem, about lanterns and
naked flames"
this is the story of lost and self discovery braided together.
"I used to follow you into sleepless
nights, tiled floors and those
hours waiting for you to come
home, to where?

I still don't know. "

the separation between the line and the stanza is to emphasize on the paradox of lost and home, still braided together.
In the end after all the barrier that we built between us, nobody comes, nobody goes, no matter who calls. They are all frozen on a miss match, in a relationship inside an ice cub of time (10)
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Ela
by Melpomene (4)

This poem touched me and I could feel the pain and sadness in it. It was very unexpected for me because Ela is a name associated with fairy tales and happy stories, I didn't know it was Greek. The beginning was strong and showed how others can feel our pain, especially our mothers. Ending with the same stanza with different pronouns "I" to "we" also gives a strong effect, showing the shame of the writer, who doesn't respond because of her losing a relationship. It also shows how attached the poet is to her ex-lover. The poem is tied perfectly together and written with strong feelings of sorrow and helplessness, which can be felt throughout the poem. The writer also shows a sense of attachment to writing poems which also are linked to the person whom she writes about, which makes the poem act as a letter to others who write poetry, and even those who don't.(4)
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Time Bomb
by Britt

This is amazing! I could feel the sleeplessness of the poet as her thoughts take over. This is a typical woman's mind when thinking about all the hardships in her life. She thinks of all the times she has been silent and how one day she will give up... that is why the time is ticking, that is the time bomb! and I think even men can understand how woman behave this way. (10)
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Time Bomb
by Britt

Another poem with great free flow and mysterious metaphors . I was drawn in by the imagery and sentiment. (7)
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This Pendulum Of Feelings
by The Queen

Heartfelt, heart-wrenching writing. There was a sort of detached tone present, one that is present in someone who has started to distance themselves from pain in their lives. In this poem, I got the impression that this glazed tone came from the character's decision to end the pain. The poem felt like the recitation of a suicide note that factually depicted a past, present and anticipated future. There was a throbbing emotion, held tight. (7)
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This Pendulum Of Feelings
by The Queen

This poem was too smooth to be true though it had a genuine tone and rhythm from the heart. (10)

HM COMMENTS:

Bored to death
by Michael D Nalley

This poem is well rounded: the massage is as strong as the tune and the language. The clarity and the simple ness dose not undermine the depth and the strength of the massage.
They kill the people out of boredom; they shoot and the bullet goes around and kill people no mater who, no question asked. They do not even need to hate because the bullet do not chose or exempt, it kills who ever is in its path. (7)
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Bored to death
by Michael D Nalley

I think this is the first dark humor poem I've read on this site. I love it! I didn't understand it at first but now I see the pun in the tittle and how that links to the poem... it is one of those poems that provoke thought and awaken questions of ethics and how the world works. It pushes on issues we have in our current world and who to blame for all the miseries that effect us. (7)
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Overwhelming
by Satish Verma

I am voting for this poem because I kept returning to it and I wanted to know the writer. I love finding new brains to explore through poetry. This poem showed an impressive handling of words - of selecting them and stringing them in long and short sentences for effortless impact. The content was intriguing, and I'm not going to pretend to understand it or offer my interpretations. It is clear the poem has an obvious sheen of quality to it, a naturally intelligent style. This writer has the ability to connect the big things to the little things, the material to the spiritual. Beautiful writing. (10)
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Scars Are Beautiful
by Redangelwings

This poem is very simple and uncomplicated. The images are so clear and the massage is so bright: Scars are not beauty marks but they are the sign of experience and hardship. They are the mark of wisdom on our face that give definition to our inner beauty
The last two lines are irrelevant conceptually but they are beautiful on their own. Maybe that is why the poet rushed used them.
There is the sign of haste in this poem that the poet could developed to perfection if he had given it more time. But I choose this for originality and beauty of thoughts. (4)
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Scars Are Beautiful
by Redangelwings

Although the competition on free flow was fierce this week I could not pass this one up for content I believe so many can relate to. (4)

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Sun Shower
by Biancas Veil

I wasn't sure what it was about this poem that made it so endearing to me. It was child-like, and its middle lines were almost clumsy and cliche. Yet it projected a clean, white image that was very real. There was no context, no dragging details, nothing too prescriptive that would have marred its beauty. It was clear and evocative, and classically so. Its first and last lines were, indeed 'pure bliss'. It warmed my heart. (4)

Thanks judges & Chels -- congrats all winners & HMs!

Congrats to the winners and Hm's!!!!

Congrats to all the winners & HMs.

Great efforts by the judges and Chels...

:)

Congrats to the winners.
Thanks to the judges & Chels & to Colm, the mod on duty this weekend.

As to Satish Verma, he is a professional poet & writer of screenplays in India. At one point there was a membership that was deleted because it was created & managed by his agent, not himself. There is no response as to whether this member is actually Satish Verma or someone else.
If it is himself, the membership is legitimate. If not, it is not allowed under Janis' rules.

Congrats foppers,

awesome achievement.

thanks to the judges, Chelsey and mod-bods.

Congrats! The 3 front page pieces are marvelous :-)

Have any of the mods tried checking the ip address of Satish Verma? I notice on his account he posts two of three poems every other day and most of them don't have comments on them. I have to wonder why someone as famous as he is would a) bother with P&Q and b) have the time to post so many poems. He(or someone else) also has them posted here...

http://www.poemhunter.com/satish-verma/poems/?search=Overwhelming&B1=SEARCH

Thank you guys and congrats as well to Britt, Mel and HM winners.

Thanks, judges and Chelsey :)

Thanks for the HM. I had told someone on YT I was going to write that poem a few days after I heard of the tragedy and the words did not even come close to expressing my sorrow after I waited almost a month . Congratulations to the winners also

Well done winners and thanks to judges and Chelsey :)

Congratulations to the three winners as well as the HM's! And thanks to judges & Chelsey as usual!

I thought I posted a thank you note, then I realized I only responded in FOP. Thank you very much for the lovely comments, judges. I appreciate it. Congrats to Britt and Myryn, well deserved, ladies!