Weekly Contest Results 10-28-13

They're here! They're here! Sorry I got the results up late - I had to write not one, not two, but THREE essays last night! Should have posted the results before I passed out, but it slipped my mind.
Congratulations to three definitive winners, and a tip of the hat to the many honorable mentions.
Thanks judges for making this week a breeze!
-Jane

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WINNERS:

In Agreement
by The Huntress
Total: 27 points

"This is a piece I keep coming back to. Maybe it's because of all the elements I feel in this poem, or that your words seem full, honest, like you have finally given yourself time to be with your thoughts and write them down. There's a lot of self-reflection here. With that opening line, I feel the impact of those words stay with you. Whoever this man is, he did not have confidence in you. I like when you mention the city's waste and stench then make a deeper message that it is broken souls looking for somewhere to turn. It is almost natural of us to have to let go at some point, not hold it in, but let our emotions out... a very striking connection with the city overall. It shows the bigger picture that we are all looking for healing in the long run.
I almost feel later on like you know you are trapped and cannot leave this state of loneliness and depression. I find how personal it becomes later with this one man who maybe crossed boundaries, passed into your heart at a time when that wasn't wanted. That you cared enough that his words stung and left an imprint.
Powerful write!" (10)

"Very beautiful poem, I really like the imagery and the metaphors particularly the one of the city, as well as you mentioning the cities' as if you felt stuck in a place where sadness is the sovereign and everything is nothing but pain and hurt.
You wished for someone who could really love you, a real italian rather than someone who could just make an italian espresso, a real lover, someone who could make you feel worthy when you look at yourself in the mirror and could actually make you feel good.
The sense of yearning, loss and sadness are all present and meld together in such a way that you can't help but to fall in love with this and become more and more fond of it each time you reread it.
The first lines really struck a chord within me as it's something so easy to relate to. Beautiful." (10)

"Strong images that are almost hard to take in, that's what makes this piece for me. So much sadness in the very beginning, it hits you right in the core. I felt so many emotions while reading this poem. I love that there is truly a raw vulnerability in this piece, whether it be reality or not.. it's in your face. The images in the end are so incredibly beautiful. I've read this poem a huge handful of times and get a different feeling each time. I have to say the last half of this poem is truly my favorite. Both halves are strong, and like I said the imagery up top is what makes it. But the end, with the emotion, wraps it up into this gorgeous poem. Well done!" (7)

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Saving Private
by Colm
Total: 21 points

"The wording in this poem is just exquisite and the imagery is breathtaking. I've read this three times, the first two times too fast , the third time slow, and I stopped at every line. My final time reading made me become this character. I was running up sand dunes, I was feeling mist hit my face, I was reflecting on someone I love/lost. Poetry is incredible when you can become one with it and that's what this poem offers. I love the notions of her hair being oiler, freckles bleeding watercolor....oh my, it's like in a sense describing something delicate but using metaphors to hide the delicacy. I found sadness in the end actually. A sense of loneliness, but this piece actually portrays such effective visuals that it overtakes the sadness. I am actually truly lost in the nature of this piece. By nature I mean the scene you set here. Well done, this is beautiful in every sense of the word." (10)

"There was such soul in this poem, along with gorgeous imagery that pulled me in. I feel this piece has a serene tone to it, as well as a crescendo per say when you are on the shore, making those memorable footprints. It almost seems to me like a pivotal point in your life, kind of like where you are letting nature wash over you and you feel a burden lifted. All these senses are revitalizing. They are perhaps prompting a new chapter of life.
Now, I could not decipher if the "you" in this poem is an actual person or a personification. I assumed a person right away.... thinking this person from your past has re-entered and either you are learning to move on from them, they are fading away..... or, you are beginning to see them in their simple form. You have a clearer mind, less complications.
Lovely ending, there was something so satisfactory in this poem, a certain fullness that you portray when you are alone on this beach but giving a positive outlook on it.
Excellent emotions expressed here in a vivid way." (7)

"I feel like I am reading a poem published over a hundred years ago, but a well established Irish poet. Colm has such an old soul, old-timey feel in his poetry, I know I've said it before and I'll continue to say it. His poetry brings such an amazing freshness to PnQ that can't go unnoticed. This poem is exactly that. It's so beautiful, with the images. I picture it to be an exact image of his homeland, and it's overwhelming. There is so many images jam-packed into this poem that you have to read it a few times to really bring it all home. I truly love this piece and hope to see it hit the front page!" (4)

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Brown eyes blind to peace
by Meena Krish
Total: 11 points

"I really like this poem, I haven't had an easy time intepretating it though, however I really liked it after actually understanding it. You are feeling upset about something, you want to come to your lover's arms, but you find it hard and as you are now seeking a release so desperately to the point of attempting to let it out by screaming, you just realize that you just can't release it, not yet, and have to swallow the heaviness of such emotion.
If you really are in love and want to fall into his arms, remember to follow your heart and not your fears. If the love is true, it'll be stronger than everything else, and those desperate screams will turn into graceful whispers of joy. Great job." (7)

"I have mostly read this writer write on Nature, so writing a sad poem was a new thing from her. The poet has so beautifully expressed the fact that eyes are the windows to our soul. And how the heaviness of the heart which one attempts to hide by the smile is rarely hidden by the eyes. And the usage of brown eyes is excellent and the sad words and emotions in the poem is well expressed. Well done!" (4)

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HONORABLE MENTIONS:

Scripturient
by Hannah Lizette

"Incredible! This is one of my favorite poems on this site. The amount of maturity and thought behind the writing is a mark of a genius! I am spell bound by the creativity within the lines and the in depth thought in this piece. A Masterpiece in itself! An Inspiration!" (10)

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Three
by Melpomene

"Melpomene has a really interesting way of repetition in this poem. Three is quite obviously a common theme beyond just the title, and it makes me feel almost like there is a triangle going on in her world, or her head. Her images are so vivid, so strong, and truly bring this poem to life. So much sadness pulls through this poem, but also a lot of strength. I believe there is so much more than meets the eye, and that's what I love about poetry. Very strong and beautiful piece." (10)

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Autumn Sky
by NightFlyer

"The writer has done a brilliant work in describing the joy and occasion of Autumn. The poem revolves around the scenic imagery of Autumn and captures every emotion of it. The word choice is overwhelming and is a perfect choice to read for one who is wanting to explore the deep beauty of this October season. Packed with a silent darkness to it, the poem is an awesome nature poem." (7)

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Bitter Sweet Symphony
By Karla

"I can relate to this piece so much. I have actually had arguments with people about my city and country as well, and I too, can not figure out if I agree or disagree with people who say its hopeless, can't be repaired....I loved this line " you are right: i will always be my land, my people, our pain." Such a beautiful display of commitment to where you came from. It often becomes hard to stay devoted to your home land when it becomes so destructive, but i like the fight you put up in this poem. Really this was a great write and I enjoyed the calm, rational tone it displayed in defending your home." (7)

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Langue du Levant: On Arabic
by Richard A

"Wonderful idea in this poem, it speaks of a richness of this language. I really admire your wording in this piece because it brings a refreshing perspective on your journey through life. There is such depth to this, especially when talking straight to the Arabic language which I guessed were the "you"s. The idea of this language being passed down, sung, and listened to is quite enchanting.
I like the directness of it, how I can feel your emphasis on each word as you introduce it to the reader and let it sink in.
The ending almost made me believe that you have not mastered it yet, but you still hold this language and its history dear. Beautiful poem!" (4)

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Mini(malist) me
By Piogga

"I like the set up of this poem. Describing the increasing pain after each day passes of losing this person. I like the details of things you haven't changed because the pain is too bad. It's very relatable to a lot of people, myself included, who have lost someone and don't want to change the way things were, even the annoyances of that person. Very descriptive and sad read." (4)

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The Marine.
by Poet on the Piano

"That's a fantastic poem, I literally have no words to describe how graceful and beautiful this is. You're able to create a mystical atmosphere with these words of yours, and turn even the most mundane event into something magical and full of meaning.
I also love it how not only are you able to understand the woman's emotions, but you can also feel the marine's emotions as well, in spite of it being written from the woman's point of view.
This beautiful and apparently simple poem reveals an outstanding ability to create poetry, you are like an alchemist whose touch can turn iron into gold. Awesome job." (4)

Congrats everybody!! Also, thank you judge for the comment and HM, I appreciate it!

Congrats winners and hm's. Thanks judges great work.

Thanks to the Judges & Jane-mod-o--week

Congrats to the winners & HMs

Congrats all!

Thanks judge for the lovely comment and HM! :)

Congrats to the winners and HM's and thank you
judges for the comments :)

That must have been hard for you Jane...having three essays to write and knowing it was Sibs turn to do the honours this week?

Thanks judge!Congrats everyone.

Congrats Winners & HMs:)

Hellon - My fault for choosing this week to host when I have so much school work to do. I could've found someone to cover, but it wasn't much work ... everything went very smoothly :)

This is the busiest I've been in a long time! Sheesh.

Congratulations to everyone this week. Thanks to our judges and to Jane for finding the time. A big thanks to the judge who gave me that lovely comment on my poem.

Thanks judges for your comments and hard work. Well done to other winners and hm's :)

Congratulations to all the winners. Way to go Meena!!!!