Weekly Contest Winners 17/2/2014

Colm here! Sorry for the delay in getting these posted. We only had 3 judges voting this week due to unforseen circumstances. The PnQ coin-toss decided tie for the third place. Which left winners these week as:

Sanctuary 4 + 7 + 7 = 18pts
by: Antithesis

The Poem of Night 7 + 10 = 17pts
by: RealMeaning

A Gift Horse 10pts
by: Daedalus

HM's
"Gypsy Memoirs" by Maple Tree - 10

Desperate for You - 4 + 4 = 8
by Meena Krish

Comments

"Sanctuary" by Antithesis

I love the ideas in this poem. They're interesting. I love the detail and the interesting way that you paint the setting. The intricate details paint a very pale picture of a world that is slowly fading into this... mad state. Quite beautiful and very easy to relate to. The chaos, the wish to stay away from the bad of the world and all that comes with that. Love it. Good idea, good poem. (7)

Jordan's first poem of the year and I was not disappointed!!

With the world as corrupted as it is getting, it is understandable why one would retreat to a "Sanctuary" of peace to avoid the sorrow of falling events. I really enjoy the writers ability to make me vision many angles within the message, because of his massive creativity of word display.. The visual's are brilliant!

Another angle I took with this poem, hits me hard.. because it's also telling me how people are judged just by the outer cover of their being, and not looking into the heart of their soul..

We has a general society tend to only look on the outside and not on the inside.. Where has this person been? How beautiful is the soul? I got this feeling in regards to his stanza about the woman-

"Sense of self or anyone else looks like
a book with empty pages, that woman
looks enraged but nobody ever knows why.
She doesn't look like a picture of health,
her hands...oh god, her hands. It's not safe!"

I couldn't help but feel compassion for this woman, there are many people in this world who are judged to be "unsafe" just by the look.. when in true reality, they are beautiful..

I felt the main message here was to
"not judge a book by it's cover" -

and that is a message I have written on many times...
Amazing message/ messages; Powerfully written!! (7)

I'm not sure if this was a specific event or place you were referencing or not. Immediately, I thought of a dystopian society (or honestly something from Orwell's 1984). I feel like the people are a whole that can relate to human suffering, that they bond in this fear, desolation. That there is society put against this governing head. Also, with the last stanza, I thought of Nazi Germany. Of possibly a mother or even child realizing to themselves that not only is their area not safe anymore, but the world. That another smile or another day isn't guaranteed. What intrigued me was this line: "Sense of self or anyone else looks like a book with empty pages, that woman looks enraged but nobody ever knows why". I'm sure the real meaning eludes me, because this is such a simple description that talks about an intricate time or perhaps idea. I interpreted it as a woman of society that isn't well known, but has physical signs of abuse, fear in her eyes, hands tied or up or silenced. People may not be used to living with fear of saying too much, or doing too much. I really like how you affect the reader here, by letting them imagine these cold streets, but not point out this is where and that is why. You state what is. That's what makes it so tragic. Well done. (4)

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The Poem of Night
by RealMeaning

Real Meaning has taken the message of poetry and birthed new light to the beauty of poetry in this piece. I can't express enough how beautiful this poem is.. It's very passionate and eye opening to the reader.

Real Meaning has written this poem in a such a unique way that I was mesmerized. I truly adore his play on words such as "waltz and waft".. within this poem you truly sway and get swept away as you are reading and that is what I truly admire most about this poem.

True dedication, and emotional passion are intertwined in the message, the reader is caught in each line..

It was so captivating I read it over many times, getting lost in it's beauty.

Writing a poem in the dark of night is a powerful thing, the poem itself is created with a touch of magical depths that the reader can feel the emotions of the writer..
that is why this poem is my 10 choice of the week. Truly a Beautiful poem! (10)

'I admire this write because I know you must take time with words. I feel your passion, your rhythm, your song. I had to read this aloud once because there is a certain beat to it, and it makes the poem hold this voice of elegance as well as truth. That this poem can convey softness and healing and peace. That this poem may be leftovers of every hope and dream. Wonderful wording and patterns of "the poem of" and "empty of". You give the reader this openness to reflect on what a poem is, stripped down, bare, as well as the process of how we may use poems. To heal, to chase dreams, to transfer our pain over to. Great job.' (7)

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A Gift Horse by: Daedalus

I have to say I hadn't heard this proverb before, so I did look it up. How not to question when someone gives you a gift, not to ask this or that but be grateful and receive it. To have humility that way. What makes this poem stand out is how you interpreted that proverb and personalized it. It's clever, especially with the actual words of "horseshoes" and "reigns". I liked how "reigns" read to me as "reins" (reins of a horse) yet meant the time period in which this person has ruled. You show how much depth this proverb has. The opening lines are inspiring and fill me with this yearning that someone will be able to strengthen me, even though far away. To have a monumental influence, a positive one too. I love the idea of "horseshoes of your absence"; I took it as 1). physical remnants of this person you carry with you to cherish (or even for luck) and 2). memories that taught you the way of life, so you can overcome the hardship and have a tougher will, one that won't back down. Then, there's the connection between "horseshoe" and "prosthetic". That this person enhanced your ability to live, or even showed you what it means to live without regrets, doing what you can do be the best. I like how you then transition to this realization you are stuck. That this person didn't help you move on. That you can't fathom moving anywhere else, what memories will follow you? Your character in this is a bit abstract, but one I want to look deeper into. I can easily picture the "don't know how long your reigns will remain between my teeth"- it gives such a blunt, raw image of a person still being rooted in your life. Instead of wanting to someone to not question and just accept, you want someone to notice, or someone to say, what is the root of your feelings perhaps? Very thoughtful write and twist filled with many puns.... enjoyed very much. Welcome to the site by the way! (10)

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HM's
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"Gypsy Memoirs" by Maple Tree

I'm in love with this poem. I love the imagery that is in every line of this poem and each one of them stands out beautifully. I love the nature elements to it as well. Definitely a good add to it, really builds upon the whole meaning. A gypsy travels, as I have been told, and I think that it works rather well here.
Not only do you add places or elements similar to that, you use details that paint a very vivid picture that is quite addicting and is beautiful. I also love the feel of the poem. Everything seems so beautiful and majestic about the whole experience, all of them and it really captivates the reader and wants them to know more about you and all of the stories. (10)

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This poem. Ugh. This poem literally hits every single feeling that I am feeling right now and that definitely makes the feelings more prominent. The way things are worded, the imagery, everything. But in the last section, the "..."s aren't really needed. Just a tip. (4)

'Sighs..... Meena, Meena, Meena!!
This is a teary eyed poem, leaving me in a puddle of emotions.
I adore this poem, it touches every reader in some way. We have all felt this moment of sorrow, when we truly yearn for the one we love, or have lost or crave to have in our life.
It's simplistic elegance and topped with a very creative and elegant ending left me speechless! Very touching poem here by Meena!!' (4)

Beautiful poems and hms this week. Well done all and judges and colm!

Thanks guys. You're all too awesome. :)

Congrats all! :)

Congrats winners & HM's!

Congrats winners & HM's

Congratulations to the The winners, well deserved :-)

and thank you judge for the very nice comment on my poem, makes me smile ~

Awesome poems!

Congrats winners & HM's.

Congrats Winners & HMs! Amazing poems. And thanks judges & the mods for your efforts!

:)

Only tree judges!!?? and only one of my poems.!!?? and Am I suppose to thank you?? the GRADS should be like this:
RM: 30
RM: 21
RM: 12
anything off that, is a deviation from me me center of the world.
GUSH WHEN ARE YOU GUYS GOING TO LEARN??

Okay okay thank you regardless
specially to those sweethearts who keep on nominating me.
akh too many thanks; I feel noziated already. `

Congrats to another set of three fabulous pieces :)

Congrats all.