Weekly Contest Results 3-3-14

Jane here. This was a strange week. 2 judges got their votes & comments in early (thank you, thank you!), 2 have yet to respond to my "reminder" messages, and 1 received my message and responded to it too late.

When I went to sleep last night, only 2 sets of votes were showing up on the nominations page. I did not find a sub judge because I wasn't sure what was going on :\

Based on the 2 sets of votes, we have 2 winners with 10 points apiece and one tie-break winner with 7 points (chosen by the site's automatic schemings).

Hopefully next week there won't be this mixup. I apologize for those of you who might be upset. Without further ado... Our winners!

WINNERS:

Forever Now
by Real Meaning
"I admire how you are able to write about the concept of time, and inspire the reader to realize what time is in our lives. I love reading the different contradictions, if you could call it that, and realizations that we may say this second lasts forever.. when it is already gone. Does it hold any depth? Does it take any form we can rely on? I think it's part of human nature to want to compete with time, or chase it. To understand how a second passes and we haven't even taken a breath. Clever piece, especially with the pattern of "no...to"; it makes for a provoking contrast."(10)

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Greatly Missed
by Meena Krish
"Meena has taken the true art of small poetry and gripped the hearts of the readers with this poem! Well done!!

I can't express enough about how sometimes "less is more" within a poem..

From start to finish this poem left me teary eyed. Losing someone can be such a devastating trauma, and when writing about that person, sometimes all it takes is a few lines.

This poem left me speechless and one that every reader can relate too. Beautiful and touching as well as powerfully written!!"(10)

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What can't be said
by Karla
"I really like how you brought your voice and conviction in this poem. In the beginning, I am introduced to a woman who may lack self-esteem and is always regretting her decisions. I've never heard this before so it caught my eye: "she now denies the god he brought out in her". That is a strong statement as it makes me believe this man adored her, thinking humanity is sacred. Now, without his presence, there is an emptiness in her life. I do have a few suggestions. After introducing these two characters, you state your wish and how being human unites us. That we have moments of imperfections. However, the next few lines about loneliness don't fit as well or seem too abrupt when read aloud. Another suggestion is to limit the pronouns to "she", "he" and "I". Having the "you" in the last few paragraphs throws me off... I assume you were speaking to either someone specifically or the general reader (like "human being like you and me), but it almost loses the connection because we don't know know enough about who you're referencing (like in the lines: "we all want what you had but just a few deserve". I feel like that fourth stanza isn't as powerful and doesn't have enough of an impact on me. Maybe elaborate more? I like the unique wording of the last stanza though. How you play off of "due" and "do". Then, inspiring this person to feel and see the beauty of love instead of thinking it is an obligatory fee to someone. Thoughtful piece with many emotions that get the reader thinking. I feel this restraint from the girl first introduced then in the theme of loneliness. That we are limiting ourselves by not speaking up and moving ahead."(7)

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HONORABLE MENTIONS

Raw Poetry
by Baby Rainbow
"I adore Baby Rainbow's simplistic angle she has taken here with this piece. It's an inspirational delight.

She focuses on the real and true meaning of writing and how the writing can get twisted within creative and art, in the end..

hiding the true emotions within the message the writer is trying to express.

It is very difficult at times for a writer to map out raw feelings and emotions within a poem or any form of writing and Baby Rainbow explains this from start to finish!

Truly a touching write!"(7)

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Everlasting (sad side)
by Beautiful Soul
"Each line in your poem holds a new meaning and a depth that makes you question your past, and certain concepts, like everlasting love. I like how you pen "anti-serendipity" to describe how your hearts became soulmates. I've heard "serendipity" before but had to sit and ponder what "anti-serendipity" would mean. That instead of your love being brought about by fate, maybe there was someone else planning for you to meet. Almost brings a bit of darkness out. Or maybe that you found something when you were looking for it, and it caused you to believe it was delightful and valuable, when there was a destructive side to it as well. There are quite a few memorable lines such as this: "Every time we two-stepped through landmines, that's when my heart pretended to be alive". This makes me imagine that you and this companion are living life on the edge, dodging arguments yet still surviving. Having such contrasting attitudes that somehow distance you then pull you together. The other memorable line is the last one. "moonlight of my past" is a bit abstract, yet works well with the fact that your love found sunshine without you. Highlights how much you differ, night and day. Keep writing!"(4)

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The Midnight Sky
by Karla
"What a Beautiful nature poem this is here!
Karla has touched base and highlighted the true and breathtaking elegance of the moon and all it's glory!

I admire her writing and her spirit and love for nature is captured within each line of this poem!
The format is creative and unique, giving it that special Karla pizzaz!

Lovely piece!!!"(4)

Congratulations to the winners and hm's this week. Thank you judges and to the judge who commented on mine was very nice to read :)

Thanks judges for the suggestions and for the Hm.I'm honoured.

Congrats Winners & HMs :)

Good Work Judges & Mods :))

Thanks Judges and mods
Ooh I am honored too to come through between this wonderful two (greatest ladies and poets)

Congrats everyone!

Congrats Winners and HM's and thank you judges.

Well done everyone, and thank you to the judges too xxx