Weekly Contest Results, 13 October 2014

ONE POEM grabbed everyone's attention, and deservedly so. As one commentator on the poem described it: "a fist to the heart" [Sibyllene at 07 Oct 2014]. In the face of the death of an innocent, the closing line: "We will sit in our houses and wonder when will watching death trouble us again?" may be the most chilling Noura has yet to write. As much as I want her out of harms way, I have to wonder if she has been placed there by some higher power, with her unique talent, to record - to utter - what the rest of us see only in glimpses, and shudder at what she is suffering, and losing, in the process.

Mark Spencer penned the other clear winning poem, an antiestablishmentarian diatribe. The site broke a four way tie among four poems with seven points each. One judge was recruited too late in the week to do a fair job of evaluating all the poems, but we doubled the input of the past two weeks!

Another Poem About Another Aftermath by nourayasmine 34 points

Churches by Mark Spencer 10 points
What fairytale is this by Leonha s marie 7 points

Hypocrite cloud by Everlasting 7 points
Sleeping With Sirens by JaneDoeWrites - 7 points
Wodahs by JaneDoneWrites 7 points
Deep Dish by Beautiful Soul 4 points
Vioano by Kakera 4 points
Love Stands Alone by Meena Krish 4 points

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Another Poem About Another Aftermath by nourayasmine 10 points
For starters let me say this... The title made me cry and I didn't even read the poem yet.
I have to stay focused while writing this comment because no human alive can't help but be affected by this poem so I'm going to talk about the writing brilliance of the author and technical aspects of the poem only, because the message speaks for itself and in my opinion, the author is speaking for all the "Soher's" of the world. I am in tears writing this comment. - Noura you are a writing voice of the human soul, I applaud you!
Noura crafted a remarkable piece here, using word descriptions in detail, repetition and grace. What an amazingly written piece of brilliance! - What can I say... 10! 10! 10! - Enough said.

Another Poem About Another Aftermath by nourayasmine 10 points
I was immediately drawn to this poem by it's unique title - it's blunt, straight forward but it evokes a sense of helplessness as if it the poem (and the tragic events that inspired the poem) are going to be lost and ignored by the general public, not to mention the use of alliteration (not sure if intentional or unintentional). The use of imagery, and the prose-like narrative just delivers a nail to your heart; it's terrifying and alarming to realize that this is someone's reality and there is no sensible justification as to why they must endure this. It's a tragic poem that really moved me - there's numerous things that I liked about this poem, but I think everything that I liked about this poem, thought because of this poem can be deduced from Noura's concluding verse: "when will watching death trouble us again?". All in all - a breathtaking write.

Another Poem About Another Aftermath by nourayasmine 10 points
I feel this poem is aching with not only the story being told throughout, but also within the message it sends out by the end. What the author has cleverly done is to take the reader through the traumatic event of a young child's passing, taking you into vivid details whilst really describing the child themselves so that you can begin to feel an attachment to them. An image is built up in your mind of a young heart of innocence, and then it is sadly taken away. After doing so, the author then ends the poem with a powerful statement of truth, which leaves the reader in deep thought about the ways of the world today and just how often these tragedies are occurring. A very gripping poem, the reality of the unfairness and often selfish acts in life is evident here and has been very well portrayed.

Another Poem About Another Aftermath by nourayasmine 4 points
It's so sad that tragedies happen but they do and this was an event so beautifully made that it almost made me tear up poor child that was murdered because of this cruel earth! I was so moved I couldn't help but just vote for it for it have a chance to win because I know this poem deserves to win even though I read it and reread it, the effect that I still have with this poem is: sadness, certainty that this world will keep on making such horrible and poor decisions that this will not be the end, and sympathy for the mother who lost her child that is what I keep feeling and I still love this poem great job in penning such a painful beautiful and haunting poem!

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Churches by Mark Spencer 10 points
Truly cynical and yet it totally appealed to my senses! It is true that the true religion isn't found in a church but found in oneself if the person truly loves God a church is a temple that people fit into "society" when in reality you just need to open yourself up to God you don't need a church to talk to God you don't need a church to have God's Spirit help you make it through the day yes it does help you find someone that shares your faith but at the end of the day God whichever God you pray to at night is with you every step of the way and I love how you made this poem shine even though cynical but I love cynical poems that reveal the truth

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What fairytale is this by Leonha s marie 7 points
This poem is mixture of every fairytale, some mythology, and a lot of creativity that amazes me from someone so young that has yet to grow as a poet! This poem would've been my bedtime story if I was told a bedtime story when I was small it's just that beautiful great job!

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Hypocrite cloud by Everlasting 7 points
What a unique and beautiful piece this is!!
Everlasting set the bar high this week! Unique, pretty and just wonderful!
The title is great, tying in message with metaphor- Just brilliant and fun.
The angle I took was of course writing of a hypocrite's ignorance and splashing in the rain clouds wrath! ( This is of course the interpretation I got)
I really adore the format and repetition mixed in... Fun and very descriptively colorful!! Pretty and intensity are 2 words that come to mind when talking about this piece! Just a delight to read by everlasting this week!

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Sleeping With Sirens - JaneDoeWrites - 7 points
A deep poem filled with concerns of love and well-being, of that scary place between being alone and feeling safe, and letting someone else come in, which exposes the danger of pain and betrayal. A scene which is painted quite vividly with descriptions it is like looking at a painting, not reading a poem. The author writes about her heart being tugged in the beginning of this poem, but it also tugs at the reader's heart by the end, leaving that thought of loneliness, and helplessness which stems from depression, and the hopelessness which you imagine will come upon you, and so the author has predicted this outcome, and almost silently awaits the pain. Very deep write.

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Wodahs by JaneDoneWrites 7 points
The title drew me to the poem - I was confused at first but after reading the poem it made sense. It's 'shadow' spelt backwards - a very clever title! I love that the author included the quote that was her inspiration, it's quite fitting. hat being said, I absolutely loved the concept behind the poem - it's rather a very cliche idea that's utilized in poems, but it was executed beautifully and creatively here. I'm absolutely mesmerized by the narration of the poem - the perfect diction mixed with vivid imagery is what made this poem about the 'personification' of a shadow unique. I love the last stanza and the last verse. I do, however think that "A plagiarized existence, an unnoticeable reflection" should be punctuated to something like "A plagiarized existence; an unnoticeable reflection" since it will expand on the concept of the 'plagiarized existence' for more of an effect. The concept of a 'plagiarized existence', itself is unique and I would have never in a hundred years thought of wording a shadow like that! An amazing write!

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Deep Dish by Beautiful Soul 4 points
Small formed poetry is one of my favorite forms to read!
This week, Beautiful Soul pulled this piece off very nicely..
He took the message and makes the reader go in a few angles even which is hard to do with the syllable restrictions. I might suggest a bit more descriptive wording to captivate this piece a touch more, but never the less I had to highlight it because it is well deserving!!!!
Yummy sauces, flavors on tongue- Just wonderful! The title immediately made me think of deep dish pizza, which is one of my favorite foods to eat.
When judging, I try and highlight poems that truly stand out above the rest, poems that cross over into originality.. This one did that! Well done Beautiful Soul

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Vioano by Kakera 4 points
Another poem with another unique title - though I do think "Viano" would sound better, but I understand why the author chose the title. This is a masterpiece - a composition of romantic musings and I love it! The way the poem allures to music is innovative - there's numerous verses in here that left me gushing, and it's quite easy to deduce that the author is in love with someone special! It's a bit lengthier than most love poems but the format that Jean wrote in captivates the reader's attention with ease. I rarely venture into the love section of the site, and I understand why this is placed in the miscellaneous section, I find it rare to come across a love poem that isn't tacky. This is a wonderful exemption - well written!

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Love Stands Alone - Meena Krish 4 points
Stunning imagery of nature, yet sorrowful emotions of loneliness and distance between love and the heart. The contrast in this poem is between the beauty within the nature, the world around, and the darkness of the pain of being alone. It is written in such a powerful, yet short way, that the emotion is felt strongly and lingers within that final stanza. This poem is a must read for anyone who admires the connection between nature and emotions, and nature and ourselves.

Congrats all

Congratulations to all!!

Way to go Noura! Congratulations to everyone

Amazing pieces, congrats!!!!

Really Powerful reads this week!! Congratulations everyone!!!

Thanks for the comments, guys!! And Larry, you're awesome. You're all sooo awesome. <3

Congradulations everyone :) and Noura congrats :)

Congratulations everyone! :]

Good job as usual Noura
and congratulation to Leonha s marie for the first win.
and the rest...

Aaww thanks guys :-)
Thanks ddavidd for the special mention, means a lot coming from you :-)

Congrats all

Noura, Huge congrats, Larry's intro was superb and spot on.

You welcome dear

Congratulations, poets! The new judge team is doing a great job already, yay!

On a slightly different note (I'm not sure where to post this) -- While I appreciate the lengthy explanations some of you turn in for why a comment should be praised, I have to admit the one word comments, like "potato," mean so much more. Haha, you guys are nuts.

Congratulations to all!

Thanks judges and thanks for the comment.

Lmao Jane that's funny to me since I don't praise that long I just put one sentence(it might be a long sentence but just one)

Yay noura!

Noura should've won the 3 spots this week.
Stop killing me with your words :'(

<3

And Abed is alive! He resurrects just so he could read Noura's words again...

such is the cycle

I love how we poets can all join in one conversation and have multiple conversations in that one conversation, with multiple members, yet it all flows and makes sense :-P

Makes sense in what way... dd???

I dunno it's hard to explain, we're all just in sync with each other and can change a topic swiftly, yet still continue talking as though nothing changed and anyone else can just join right in :-)

Hmm

* winks in innocence about praising comments with normal explanations, and NEVER just with the first word that pops into my head!* ;)

Lmao nice Baby Rainbow! lol

Ha ha ha I actually take back my words because I have no idea what saffie means ha ha, maybe cause I like, just woke up bit still, there goes a theory bust ha ha :-P

We're all just in sync

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Really? You have been here all of 5 minutes it would seem and already you get these 'vibes' ..astonishing!!!! Me? well on and off I have been a member of this site since 2007 and can honestly say I'm not in sinc with anyone???

Perhaps you haven't taken the opportunity to have personal chats with people and get to know them on a more personal level, and no it has not been five minutes, its been a couple of weeks, and also I make a great effort to open up to people and let them see the real me, and that leads them to be more real to me, relationships of any kind are a give and take thing.

I'm in agreement with hellon here. You can't really get to know someone in two weeks. Though it's sometimes nice to have a chat with someone, be in sync though? I've been on this site on and off since, 2006-2007 and people come and go all the time, it is about poetry. But clubs are nice to chat in, that is what they are there for.

Edit: and this is why people think there is bias here because of the personal ties to others

We are dead poet society, literally!! and whoever brings fresh blood here, irritate us, for the envy from lacking any blood at all.

We should put scarecrow to scare any cardinal may pass through this farm or any flower that may bring colour to this barren yard.

Or put the sign: we are dead, if you are alive, please do not come here.
Or in this cemetery, walk slow, walking on dead leaves disturbs the zombies beauty sleep.

Ddavidd I already come with a sign and it's called "Warning I do hiss at you if you come near me" lol also James people come and go but just because of that doesn't mean you can't form a bond trust me in one week I bonded with a friend of mine when I was younger we were naughty children by not going to class every once and a while (got over that phase though) and we bonded over that we became good friends in 2 days lol

Bond as much as you want. Our egos are so big here nowadays that any movement, any form of life, exept the one that we already hardly accepted and learned to tolerate, to us would be a violation of some kind.
So go ahead, nock yourself out making sense, making noise, making this site alive again. Just be respectful and nice, but not too respectful and nice, because that would be ass kissing. Because ass kissing causes a void in the other side of our psyche that would only be filled and satisfied by nothing but ass kicking. Those who submit too much to the (supposedly ) 'higher', they create appetite for themselves to search for ' lower' people to submit to them.

Ddavidd you are so cynical hun! Made me laugh though! I know I scare my friends since I'm really nice but if I do go dark (emotional wise) they start to worry since I can be a doll but I can also be a nightmare :) that being said I don't have an ego I have a temper big difference Ddavvidd

Not cynical to you darling, syndical to those who were muttering about fresh air.

Lol I think I was one of them Ddavidd new blood is good for us hun. I mean yes they will be stepping on our toes but that's what life is "dog eat dog" society we have to be better and badder than they are just because we are from the old times (not saying anyone is old just pointing out that we joined and act like the 'nice days of the past') we have to be the leaders and like you said we shouldn't be the followers but I think we should be more open to new blood maybe they will inspire us to be greater? Who knows Ddavidd we might just like them or we might ignore them (like I was) but I have gotten over that small fact and I got my award (I really want a silver commenter's award though lol)

Haha I am arguing the same thing.

I know BUT I would welcome new blood with open arms though Ddavidd and not want to chew their heads off if they suddenly peed on my shoe (being stupid on that last remark but made my point didn't?)

Ddavidd you confuse me at times, is this perhaps one of those comments you made to Mori about being snobs? perhaps I am still a young and over eager little thing trying to got into a wiser poetic society, but I personally believe that it is this attitude of being incapable of forming bonds in a short time that creates unnecessary strife in this world, perhaps I am too open and trusting, perhaps I'm naive, but I believe that people can form a bond in an instant over trivial matters, and perhaps my using the word"sync"is what threw everyone off, but what I really meant to say is that our conversations flow and we all talk freely without awkward pause and change conversations with the ease of old friends.and I do hope we can all be friends or at least, friendly acquaintances :-) I promise I don't bite and I do actually rather dislike conflict but in this case I felt it necessary to clear the air :-)

PS, ddavidd I don't ass kiss,I earn my stripes the good olde fashioned way, through being as genuine and real as I can possibly be, I hope that in time everyone will come to see this, life's too short to be a pretentious ass kisser :-)

Hellon! it's always nice to "see" you.