Weekly Contest Results 11-3-14

Last time I hosted was the last time one poet took home two wins, and by golly, it's happened again! Senyru was our last "double whammy" winner; this week the title falls to Saerelune. Congratulations, poet! Well deserved! Our very own PnQ godfather snagged the third front page spot, also well deserved. Wonderful writing.

HUGE shoutout to our judges. All 5 submitted votes/comments this week and in a timely manner. One judge was able to do his/her job despite surmountable odds! Thank you so much!

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Point breakdown is as follows:

A Tale bigger than a little girls' hands by Saerelune 20 POINTS

In reaction to the girl with a tale that's bigger than her hands by Saerelune 17 POINTS

Child's cry by Larry Chamberlin the Godfather 14 POINTS

Orange October by Lostlove1 11 POINTS

My Corner, My World by Maple Tree 11 POINTS

Angel in the Sky by Jad 10 POINTS

Numb by Taylor 7 POINTS

Imagination of Caged Rooms by Kristina and Senyru 7 POINTS

Predator's Souvenirs by Baby Rainbow 4 POINTS

Shallow Noise by Kakera 4 POINTS

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COMMENTS FOR WINNERS:

A Tale bigger than a little girls' hands
by Saerelune
Total points: 20

"This poem is chockfull of amazing metaphors and vivid imagery that keeps the readers captivated yearning to read more. It easily invoked a plethora of emotions in me as I read it, and felt myself looking throughout that little girl's eyes throughout the duration of the poem. I was moved by this piece - there was some profound philosophical happiness between the words of sorrow in this poem. The happiness stems from that the author ending the poem with "Mother, I know/because I'm just a little girl too.", there's something eerily satisfying and albeit sad about a child realizing how and what life just might entail, it's a solemn reminder that we were once full of innocence, and some of us lost that naivety much too quickly, and became adults sooner than we should have been. I just wanted to note, I originally read the author's 'reply' poem to this, and absolutely loved it, and later saw that the author posted the original poem (this poem) and fell in love it with as well." (10)

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"This poem is filled with such a touching story that it really reaches out to you from the very start of reading it, even the title which the author has picked, gives an indication that it might be a very moving write! I like the way the poem is narrated, towards the characters mother, this makes the poem very personal. It also leaves gates open for readers to connect to the poem personally too.
The metaphors used are quite unique and gave such a big impact to each point that was being made within the stanzas. I find the relationship between mother and daughter a very special bond, and to write about it in this way really does show how strong and powerful it can be. A really excellent write." (10)

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In reaction to the girl with a tale that's bigger than her hands
by Saerelune
Total points: 17

"I absolutely loved this reply poem as well - if it was possible to vote both poems 10 pts, without a moment's hesitation, I would have done so. In this poem, the author grew up and is much more acquainted with the realities of life. There's also a possible reference to the MH370 and MH17 incidents? Not entirely sure, but that's what I assumed by the author referring to Kuala Lumpur as a funeral town, or perhaps its in reference to another tragedy (national or personal incident), but either way it was a quite chilling read." (7)

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"In reaction to the girl with a tale that's bigger than her hands-
In this poem I think it was better than the original poem in truth this one particular poem struck something in me that I haven't had in quite some time, intrest in a poem now don't get me wrong every poem has inspiration and beauty to a poem but this poem made me curious to see the original and then re-read the "second" poem so I could see what lead to point a to point b and I enjoyed both poems but I think this one should be given more since this one has more descriptions, ethos, and pathos. Gave a story that made it more real in sense since this is a poem about life in general it gives it a nice touch to read!" (10)

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Child's cry
by Larry Chamberlin the Godfather
Total points: 14

"Without saying anything at all you created a scene and shared two hearts with us. You made a beautiful point and wrote something that everyone can relate to whether they are the child or the parent - and in some cases both. With so few words you penned perfection, really making a point to capture the essence of the moment. Definitely yet another beautiful piece from you." (10)

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"Small poetry at its finest. Many times I read comments such as "small but good" or "wish this poem was longer"---- and in my opinion, sometimes, less is BEST!

This poem fits the saying to a tee. A time between a parent and child, there is that heightened point in time when frustrations from both parent and child hit a peaking point.

Larry makes his message quite clear in this powerful little piece here. Says it all quite elegantly as well. What a dazzling poem by Larry this week.

I was touched by this poem in many ways. Just wonderful-" (4)

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COMMENTS FOR HONORABLE MENTIONS:

Orange October
by Lostlove1
Total points: 11

"Oh mercy sakes this poem is a tearjerker and anyone who reads this piece can't help but cry with the message received. Not only the emotional message, but the way Lostlove1 paints this poem with vibrant, visual word display is another reason why it's highlighted!

October - Beauty and sadness= Mixture of emotions and pure art!

Truly a beautiful crafted piece of somber and gut wrenching emotions.

When a child or loved one fades to illness, even the color of leaves in October can't be enough to wipe the tears. LOVED this poem!" (7)

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"This piece has such a wonderful depth to it, even for being so short and using no words that completely jump from the page instantly, except the last one. I think really that's what makes this piece so beautiful even in its heartbreak. You did nothing to capture the attention of your readers, merely kept it to a simple write and made it personal. You described a few images and poured your heart into this piece. Really, I think it is just that which makes this piece so excellent. It is not trying to be anything extraordinary and yet it is nothing less than so." (4)

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My Corner, My World
by Maple Tree
Total points: 11

"Love the realistic approch to this poem. I loved the wedding pictures covered with dust stanza it just made me feel giddy about weddings when personally I hate weddings since I think couples do not last together for a long time and if they do then they are lucky. Great detail, made by a great poet, good job." (7)

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"A true picture was created here by the author about being in this one moment of intense thought. A simple moment, which led to reflecting upon life, upon memories, upon the future. The content of the poem is kept within the vicinity of that one room, which is mentioned in the title, and it really explores that safe place this author has created where perhaps her poetry comes to life. The mention of marriage worked really well since it was described as a happy time, with pleasant memories, yet it was kept vague. Then the end of the poem introduces the husband who is fast asleep. I found this quite interesting and it made me question the relationship between the two characters. Overall, this poem was an enjoyable read and it makes your mind tingle with after thoughts." (4)

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Angel in the Sky
by Jad
Total points: 10

"Jad left me speechless this week!

He crafted a very unique mixture of rhyme and just pure elegance. Love the mixture in the stanzas with this piece! The sadness of losing a love... sighs... When writing a sad poem it is important to display the message, but then you go back and craft it- With elegance and vibrancy of a unique rhyme scheme... that takes heart, talent and just wow!!" (10)

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Numb
by Taylor
Total points: 7

"There is something about this poem which stands out to me this week. The wording is so simple, such an ordinary day being described, and yet it is filled with detail about each action as it comes. I find it quite a talented start for this new author. The content of the poem is one which many can get an understanding of, when perhaps they have felt lethargic about life, or numb through some other fault, and that sudden rush of winter air hits them like a tonne of bricks. It shows just how numb the character felt, and how relieved they were just to feel something, anything, which made them feel alive again." (7)

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Imagination of Caged Rooms
by Kristina and Senyru
Total points: 7

"This piece is wonderful. It does not seem like it would be very coherent or have anywhere to go based on the first line, but it's beautiful even in it's sorrow. It's so creatively penned and definitely gets the point across. Everything about this piece is absolutely amazing. It has a great sense of voice for being written by two authors. The word choice and the flow are spot on, your style is very uniquely manipulated to fit this piece and both of your unique styles. I love that you had such depth with your descriptions and your points, the ties back to science and famous scientist are wonderful, I truly enjoy them. The pain in this piece, the emptiness, the insanity if you will is completely beyond perfect, it draws the reader in at the first line where it is said you pretend to be a coke can and continues from there as the undertone in every line not only adding voice and tone to the piece but keeping the audience interested as it is a rather lengthy piece compared to some. Extraordinarily penned." (7)

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Predator's Souvenirs
by Baby Rainbow
Total points: 4

"Dark, beautiful, and filled with so much pathos it actually made me sad to read it. Everyone who has experienced it will know the true meaning of it and it's a hell no one wants to revisit but it is so beautiful to read since it gives insight to the ones who have had this happen to them great read." (4)

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Shallow Noise
by Kakera
Total points: 4

"This was definitely a memorable poem - I loved the flow that was maintained throughout the poem. I loved the visuals produced by Jean, and as well as the narrative voice of the poem. I also loved the repetition towards the end, it really echoed a voice of apathy. I also absolutely loved this stanza "We, the forsaken, built monuments/ to the archons of self-pity, / and tangled our fates /in labyrinthine denials", the composition is just perfect, the diction used is perfect, and it's perfect in every sense. I honestly think that everyone can relate to this stanza one way or another, and it's quite the powerful image - that we are the architects of ourselves." (4)

Congratulations to all! :) to the HMs to the judges and to of course the winners of this week! :)

Congratulations to Saerelune and Larry :-)

Congratulations to all the other Hm's beautiful poetry
and thank you judges and Mods~

Thank you judges for your lovely comments on my poem, very honored and you both made me smile today <3

Congratulations

Congratulations all!

Way to go Saerelune

Great Pieces

Congrats, Saerelune. I don't remember seeing two poems by one poet following a single theme get the win before.

It is amazing how your perspective changed over the years.

Thanks for the win, thanks judges for the diligence, and for the comments.
Thanks, Jane, for posting & congrats to the HMs.

Thank you for the HM and the Judges with their awesome comments on "Orange October."

Congrats Saerelune and Larry on the wins.

Congrats Saerelune and Larry on the wins, Saerelune you're amazing!!!! back to back wins with two related poems, that's incredible!!!! Congrats to the hms and to the judges, great work you really hit the target :-)

Good job all

Congratulations on the wins! :] And thank you judges for my HM.

Well done all involved :)

Wow, congratulations everyone, great work!

Thanks all (especially judges) and congrats to larry and the hm's! It's good to back again.

Congrats all! :)