Weekly contest winners 24/11/2014

Forget Christmas! Seems like 'tis the season of double winners! Congrats to Narph for her two excellently-penned pieces which will represent the front page for the coming week along with the prolific Saerlune. Congrats ladies and keep writing! Congrats to the HM's also: there was a good spread this week. Thanks to the judges for being on punctual with votes and comments, much appreciated!

(Colm here btw!)

Winners:
Cracks By Narph - 10 + 7 = 17
Firebirds in the Void By Narph - 10 + 7 = 17
Of Longing By Saerelune - 10 + 7 = 17

HM's
Notebooks By Everlasting - 10 + 4 = 14
"Untitled nearly-sonnet" by Colm - 10
"In Transit" by Sincuna - 7
Human Mistakes - Tara Kay - 7
Sacredness by Karla - 4
Pallete of Paris By Senyru - 4
Lives of Others (Sonnet) By Larry Chamberlin the Godfather - 4
A poem after 50 - Karla - 4

***** COMMENTS *****

Cracks By Narph -

'Creativity oozes within this poem.

Emotions are expressed within this poem, such as blushing or the onset of crying. The moment before emotions explode.

I haven't read a piece on this subject ever, so I was pleasantly surprised. I may be off on my analysis of this piece but either way I am in awe!

I've felt that pressure behind my eyes and I've tried to fight the urge to explode. The first two lines had me talking out loud- Finally someone talks about that moment!!

Fighting the urge to cry, to blush... Holding that very expressive moment to a halt! Powerful, expressive poem here!

The visual display is impeccable. I can see each and every outline of this moment. The moment of explosive emotions being compressed.

Well written poem that takes us on a journey in the mind, behind the veins in the "Cracks" of the physical displays of emotion.' (10)

'A beautifully short write with amazing word choice and a fantastic display of Narph's usual and stunning use of imagery. There is a wonderful voice in this piece and a truly universal message that anyone can understand at nearly any point of their life simply because it is penned so perfectly without being exact. There is a lot of personality in this piece that most in today's day and age seem to be lacking or rather is a skill that most seem to keep on the back burner until they are bored of the other techniques they long to perfect. This piece stands wonderfully on its own, yet it also continues the story that all of Narph's pieces seem to tell so seamlessly as a collection. A beautifully penned piece that could only have been written by this unique author. (7) '

*****

Firebirds in the Void By Narph

'Another wonderfully unique and stunningly beautiful piece written by Narph this week. As always the imagery here is simple yet powerful. It has a unique twist to it and a personality so unlike anything else that this site sees. As effortless as this piece seems it is clear there is so much more to it than just pulp and ink. It's honest and so completely out there without being so strange that it loses the audience. I had to read this piece quite a few times before I could even begin to dream of what to write in a decent comment, but this truly is remarkable. (10)'

'I think of the Phoenix when I read this colorful piece.

I love the misc. genre, because you get an endless amount of everything all packed in one poem. Perfect genre category. You have fantasy, nature, science/life and even romance all in one with this poem.

It's breathtaking visuals are captivating. It made me think of a super nova, and Phoenix soaring.

Again, creative and unique. Pure and vibrant lines of description.

Details are mixed in each and every line. It's so thought provoking that I go back and read each line, taking something different. It's a pretty piece, just beautiful!' (7)

*****

Of Longing By Saerelune

'The title of this powerful poem really does fit perfectly to the tone and content inside. This poem screams of longing for that lover back, to feel his touch again, to feel connected to him - even if it is by a trace of his fingertips. Such a sad write, an emotional story, yet I feel it is well portrayed through the authors wording. Longing is felt from the start of the poem, and long after the reader has finished reading. Touching poem.' (10)

'Unrequited love is one of those things that always gets to me. Maybe because thats how it
always is for me, I love how this poem makes you feel his fingers on your chest... And how
hes always through your head, how he makes you slam into your own walls!
Ive been through these feelings before and this poem is a perfect example.' (7)

*****

Notebooks By Everlasting

'Wow. At the start of this poem i didnt know exactly where it was going to go, i thought it might
be of an old lover but as I read it I see someone passing away and you going through their stuff...
Wishing they were here (though it could be related either way) THe ending of this poem is what hits
this poem home though. You can just feel your emotions, your emptiness, your sadness from those last
few lines' (10)

'This piece is amazing. It blows the reader away with it's simplicity yet it is not so simple that it bores the reader. There is a sense of imagery in this piece that so many people seem to forget. There is a voice to this write that just jumps off the page and creates a wonderful sense of character. So much can be said about something so fantastically unique while still being so completely universal (each reader can take it in a way that is personal to them without losing the authors "true" or intended meaning.) (4)'

*****

"Untitled nearly-sonnet" by Colm

'The imagery in this poem was absolutely amazing - each verse contributes uniquely to the poem. Though I wonder why it's a near-sonnet, I haven't checked the meter or syllable count, it seemed right.
I just wanted to highlight a certain part from this poem:

"echoing in the fallopian air,
like London Blitz sirens or twin tower
smoke-screen shadows of what used to be there. "

The diction in this part was perfect - I loved the choice of 'fallopian air' since it stems from fallopian tubes and indicated that the air was brewing something and made two historical references to both the sirens of London Blitz during WWII and the 9/11 attacks, which was an incredible way to articulate a thought.

All in all, it was an amazing write.' (10)

*****

"In Transit" by Sincuna

'The title was perfect for this piece - it summarized the thoughts of the poem. I just wanted to make note of that. This piece was unique from all the other nominations because it seemed to be an objective self-view of the author in which they detail their 'becoming' or rather 'transition' into something new. There were numerous verses in here that had exquisite imagery such as

"I ride forth in the wind
with my voice taking me
to distant parts of the unknown."

and

"A new person becoming;
cold as ice,
yet burning.".

It was a wonderful read!' (7)

*****

Human Mistakes - Tara Kay

'Tara has been very honest within this poem this week, her words create a poem which shows the mistakes that we make in life, and how we continue to repeat these mistakes. I like the connection between being human and making these mistakes, to wishing we were not human at all. It is so true that we regret so much in life because of mistakes we have made, and yet at the same time it is what we learn from. An interesting read which will cause the reader to think about their own life, past or present, and the choices they have made.' (7)

*****

Sacredness by Karla

This was definitely one of the most visual pieces I've read in quite a long time. I love that Karla made references to Yemanja and Orishas, it was quite welcomed. I've come to learn quite a bit of them after reading this piece because Karla got me interested in them.

I was absolutely astonished by this:

"and she is more beautiful
because her body is not hers anymore
because she belongs to something
you have to see if you want to understand."

The imagery in this is vibrant and I loved how it was worded. Karla saying she was more beautiful because she belonged to something else, something one needs to witness to understand, made me think of a bonfire of some sort for some odd reason, but I liked the image it portrayed. Well done Karla!' (4)

*****

Pallete of Paris By Senyru

'A Picasso painting of beauty!

Mark penned a small and unique poem this week. He captured the beauty of a loving moment here.

Painted visuals of romance.

Nature tones written to a tee! Colors, vibrant colors are captured here. In a few lines I am whisked away as the reader. Sharing this powerful moment of the author. Its romance, nature and life all in one.

It takes a unique and creative writer to pull this off. Mark has done that and more. Well done!' (4)

*****

Lives of Others (Sonnet) By Larry Chamberlin the Godfather

'This poem does has a very sad undertone when read which I do enjoy.
I wonder, since you are older then I, if this is what my reality will be when i age.
In this poem you can tell how you are spilling your life away for others.' (4)

*****

A poem after 50 - Karla

'The contemplation of life is very strong in this poem. The realisation that one has aged, time has passed, yet regrets seem to surface in this author's mind. Have they truly lived their life like they wanted? If they have been alive so long, then how come they have struggled to find themselves, and truly get to know themselves. This poem is a very deep poem, holding a lot of meaning inside the words, how we treat ourselves, and how we treat life. Knowing oneself would bring such wisdom and peace. Powerful write.' (4)

Congrats to Narph & Saerelune & the HMs.
Thanks, Colm for posting.

Thanks, judge for the comment. The poem is really more of a vent than how I really see my life. Everyone has weeks like that, especially litigation attorneys. To me the important thing is to know where the medicine is (not in a bottle, but in your children).

Thanks, James, for nominating it.

Thank you judges. love your comments. specially the one on a Poem after 50. i have just one question, dear judge:

how can we "truly" know ourselves if as Eckhart said we have so many skins inside, covering the depths of our hearts?

thanks again. i'm honored.

Karla, I'm still in love with that poem. Great job, lady!

Thanks judges for the wins! I didn't expect that-- there were so so many gorgeous poems this week.
I'm really honored that you think my voice is unique. Thank you.

Congrats HMs and Saerelune of course, too! Also thank you to those who nominated me. You are crazy, wonderful people.

Thank you judges for your wonderful comments.

Congrats Narph and Saerelune!

You're welcome Larry, congrats all

Cogratulations to all.

Way to go, Narph! And congrats to Saerelune and all the HM's!

Congrats

Congrats all!

Congrats Winners and HM's!

Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful!