Weekly contest winners 9/3/2015

Hello everyone! Three clear winners this week, well done to all and thanks as always to our judges, reliable as ever!

Winners:
False Spring - by Larry - 10 + 7 + 4 + 4
Weary - by Britt - 10 + 10
Tonight and every night - by Meena Krish - 4 + 7

HM's:
Alchemy - by Jordan - 7 + 4
Workshop - by Sincuna - 10
A Musing - by Senyru - 10
Should I? - by Everlasting - 7
Hell Awaits - A Beautiful Soul - 7
Alchemy - by Jordan - 7 + 4
Somewhere in Oceana - by Window Washer - 4

***Comments***

Winners:
False Spring - by Larry - 10 + 7 + 4 + 4

'I truly admire when a writer can express a general message and then tie in a mixture of other messages into a poem.
With a Senryu however, its such a small format and tied in with syllable restriction that it becomes even harder to accomplish a group of meanings and that is what Larry did here and more.
This is also my interpretation as well.
The eagerness of spring is a powerful thing when winter has a hold on a person and then to be disappointing with hopes of freshness, following another fallen snow or coldness, it tends to be a huge disappointment...
Where the mixture of messages ties in with this piece is the word "disappointment" which I have mentioned above, stating that there can and always will be disappointment and that strength within can be drawn from that, which brings in hope that things can and will be better.
This 3 lined Senryu, and perfect syllable count leaves me speechless all in all and I applaud Larry this week!' - 10pts

'I feel this form does not get much attention on this site, or certainly not on the front page, however, Larry has greatly shown how much impact you can put into a small form like this. It is very relevant to the timing of year at the moment, which is what most of these forms lack, they are not written in the precise moment of time to capture that particular moment, but I feel this one does just that, and does it very well. Impressive job Sir Larry. ' - 4pts

'All of the nominations gave me plenty to ponder and this haiku at first was not all that inspiring . Reflecting upon all of my hopes that seemed to perish because of natural causes . Fruition is a program that depends on external factors . In many cases the quantity of potentials is as important as quality such as was delivered by the author.' - 4pts

'This poem with it's nature genre, is actually heart touching.

False Spring, what an amazing title! Loved the short length of he poem and how it actually helped you draw this scene in few words and leave, yet, an impact on the reader.

"blooms perish in frost"

seriously this poem is just amazing! It's a poem that one can't get over easily.' - 7pts

*****

Weary - by Britt - 10 + 10

I liked this poem because I found it had a simple meaning, yet it was so creatively constructed. The title of the poem is one word, and then the poem contains a message which explains what this one word feels like, how it affects a person and their daily life, and how exhausting it is feeling exhausted. Nicely put together.' 10pts

'"Much of your pain is self-chosen".
I said it before and I'll say it again . There are so many great poems nominated every weak that judging is always hard. This poem should be an inspiration to all that give their all. Being weary is a pain that anyone passed the age of reason should have no trouble relating to . This poem restates a very important truth written by a master poet in the book titled The Prophet
It is the bitter potion by which the physician within you heals your sick self.
Therefore trust the physician, and drink his remedy in silence and tranquility:
For his hand, though heavy and hard, is guided by the tender hand of the Unseen,
And the cup he brings, though it burn your lips, has been fashioned of the clay which the Potter has moistened with His own sacred tears." - 10pts

*****

Tonight and every night - by Meena Krish - 4 + 7

'I admire Meena for combining these two forms together this week, and old form which is known to most of us, with a new form which is less common and perhaps unknown to many. Not only are the forms combined, which is talented, but the words in the poem are quite touching. There was a good contrast used also, with ice and burns, which really portrayed the message of longing for someone lost and how their absence has an affect on this person. Great write.' - 7pts

'Fabulous formed poem by Meena this week! I absolutely LOVE THIS!!

Fibonnaci & Acrostic -
Very touching and heart gripping

A different mixture of forms and it works beautifully together.. This poem stands out above the rest in so many ways, I had to highlight it!!

Missing a loved one- to ease the pain of loss-- its a powerful emotion and then to display it within a creative mixture of forms is even better.

Usually the message down the side becomes the title... but since it is a mixture of forms and think it was a great move on Meena's part to make the title a statement, leading into the message down the side of the poem.. very creative and eye catching!!!!' - 4pts

*****

HM's:
Alchemy - by Jordan - 7 + 4

'There is a voice here that definitely puts this piece into the dark category, but in such a perfect manner that it's almost beautiful. A fan of dark pieces with most certainly applaud this piece, the word choice helps set up a very vivid scene. Nothing but wonderful remarks about this piece.' - 4pts

'Jordan has a true gift of metaphoric elegance.
Within this piece and heart grabbing dedication to his friend, he maps out the darkness that has plagued this individual with tasteful lines and gripping emotion.
His unique and out of this world word usage is brilliant and very creative... Its a dark piece, but it screams strength for the person it was dedicated to and I was blown away... well written and well deserved highlight this week in my opinion' - 7pts

*****

Workshop - by Sincuna - 10

'This is a masterpiece. I don't see this not going to the front page.

Brilliant use of metaphors, thought provoking and eye catchy.

The word choice along with your title choice and tone, created this unique and exceptional environment in this poem.

Thank you for sharing! and Hope to see this piece as a winner for this week.' - 10pts

*****

A Musing - by Senyru - 10

'A long write well worth the time. beautifully penned. captures the person's personality and uses word choice to the fullest potential. I am at a loss for words otherwise. Greatly penned piece ' - 10pts

*****

Should I? - by Everlasting - 7

'There is a voice here that definitely puts this piece into the dark category, but in such a perfect manner that it's almost beautiful. A fan of dark pieces with most certainly applaud this piece, the word choice helps set up a very vivid scene. Nothing but wonderful remarks about this piece.' - 7pts

*****

Hell Awaits - A Beautiful Soul - 7

'With my religious indoctrination I am more comfortable looking at the hell in this title as a metaphor for purgatory as a beautiful soul would see the difference of useless suffering and useful suffering brought by a chosen passion that hopefully is more temporal when it is on need of redemption . I felt this poem was very skillfully delivered saying a lot with relatively few words eloquently. ' - 7pts

Alchemy - by Jordan - 7 + 4
Somewhere in Oceana - by Window Washer - 4

'This is something else! I had my eyes pierced to the screen all throughtout the poem, from the 1st word till the very last one.

The writer's tone and mood, reflects in his style and in his imagery, it was very personal yet very out of frame.

The opening stanza got me thinking of different things, and then the more I read the narrower or deeper my thoughts were going. It starts crawling to the readers head and gets them involved. Especially when the writer went out of the comfort zone of 1st person and spoke of everyone else in the scenario "Hope is so rare it makes us all salivate despite
rampent dehydration"
In all this poem got my heart and my vote. Well done.' - 4pts

Congrats all, thanks judge

Congratulations to everyone involved!

Congrats to all, thanks judges as always!

Congratulations to everyone!

Congratulations to everyone involved!

Awesome job this week! :)

Thanks, judges, for the comments & votes.
Congrats to Britt & Min for your wins.

Thanks to the judges for your diligence and to Colm for posting.

Wow....three mods on the front page in the same week! What's the chances of the happening and, has it every happened before? Larry...Mr. Stats man...what do you say?

That's a good question.
I'll take a look at it tomorrow.

Notice, though, that two form poems were selected in the same week?

That may not have happened before either.

I think, if it has every happened before, there's a good chance it was when we ran that formed poetry contest. I remember we got heaps more entries than we thought we would. Can't remember when it was though?

Do you mean this one?
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/discussion/topic.html?topic_id=142916

No....it was a contest both Larry and I ran....all entries were different forms of poetry.

Edit....sorry just saw that this was also a formed poetry contest but...not the one I was thinking of.

Congratulations Sir and Britt! Congrats to the HM's too :)

Thank you judges for the comments and votes...appreciate your efforts :)

I think around the spring of 2013 we did the contest.
I know we set a record: 25 entries!
More than any individual contest.

Michael was a judge, along with Andrea & Lonely Rider

You people write beautiful poetry! I love the diversity each week, well done everyone!

thanks for posting :)

Only a year or so out Larry. depending on which hemisphere you live in :)

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/discussion/topic.html?topic_id=133717

Right!

My spring - your fall

I guess you could call that a false spring

Edit: 3 years!
I read that entire thread while waiting in court. Even the judge looked up when I began laughing - I could not help it.
"but wait there's more!"
Tile cleaners, mops and buckets: hilarious.
I want to print out that entire thread and laminate it.

Thank you judges!! I so appreciate your comments! Thanks Colm for posting :)

Congrats other winners & HMs!! :)

Yes Larry, I was also surprised at how the time has flown by. I had a quick read at the thread also and have only now realised that people outside of Australia may not have even realised what 'but wait, there's more' was about. There was a really annoying guy called Tim Shaw from Demtel on TV here selling you every daft product under the sun...you could even get two if you phoned right away! (that was in case the first crappy one broke I think haha)

Uncle larry

:o

waiting in court *gasp*

are you on trial for some crime???

Jk :P

so uncle are you a lawyer??? o.O

I'm tempted to say I'm a criminal lawyer & let the rest slide
but no, sorry, no crimes.
I'm a boring family lawyer