Weekly Contest Winners - 4/13/15

Happy Monday, everyone! Awesome poems highlighted this week. Congrats to Andrea, Hellon, Sam and all the HM's! Thank you to the new panel of judges for giving your comments in a timely manner.

WINNERS:

"Two Strangers in a Hospital" by: Maple Tree 7 + 10 = 17 points
"The Circus" by: Hellon 10 + 4 = 14 points
"The Truth" by: Sam 7 + 7 = 14 points

COMMENTS:

"Two Strangers in a Hospital"
by: Maple Tree

"This adorable writing represents a face of human nature that we see and feel, still very hard to capture its essence. The title is very tricky leaving the reader unable to imagine what kind of dialogue or story the poem might tell, her opening as well, only one line and it was pretty enough for a very detailed enjoyable description.

In the third stanza I liked how she referred to her writing as a secret, it's what we unintentionally do, transforming situations of our daily lives into poetry, and in most of the cases secretly, where the main characters would never know how inspiring they were.
Her closure was very successful conjoining the purpose of each, framing in specific terms how both characters were very familiar despite being strangers.
Neat layout and excellent word choice." (10)

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"This was a very nice poem since it was like meeting a person that shares your passion yet they are hidden of it because of their profession, but you still notice certain characteristics that they both share. I was deeply in love with how this poet involved her personal life and made this poem spectacular because it holds that magic that life just seems to have. It was filled with love, and a kind of understanding, yet it held something platonic that affects us in every day which is life and love." (7)

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"The Circus"
by: Hellon

"Hellon created a beautiful Senryu this week. She captivated me with visuals of the circus and smells of cotton candy, all in a tiny little formed poem, just beautiful!" (10)

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"After a short hiatus of three or so months, Hellon comes back with a superb piece, (which I consider a Senryu since haiku's are exclusively about nature). She captures the essence of being at a circus. Great write!" (4)

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"The Truth"
by: Sam

"There's a sense of sheer desolation in this piece; the author pens her feelings of 'abandonment' (in the sense that she has abandoned her former self or feels abandoned in a way) beautifully with a chilling narrative that just shakes you. The author paints 'beauty' in her suffering, through her use of imagery and diction, and you cannot help but just resonate with this piece. Well-written." (7)

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"Sam, truth is- this is a gorgeous, emotionally moving poem by you this week. I was drawn in by the simplistic and heartfelt writing. It showcased her sweet rhythmic style, which I'm growing very fond of.. Powerful piece!" (7)

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HM'S:

"Caliraya" by: Mahal Ko Kuya Ko = 10 points
"Consecrated" by: Poet on the Piano = 10 points
"Queen of Ruins" by: Window Washer = 10 points
"I'm living, come back later" by: Karla = 7 points
"Prelude" by: Senyru = 7 points
"Gasoline Heart" by: Sam and Senyru = 4 points
"Rest In Pieces" by: DirgeVenustas193 = 4 points
"The Grim Reaper Has Scars Too" by: Beautiful Soul = 4 points
"The smell before rain (Naani)" by: Beautiful Soul = 4 points

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COMMENTS:

"Caliraya" by: Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

"Something about this piece just captured my interest like no other poem this week: It drew me in and was a pleasure to read. The words and thoughts both flowed effortlessly and I feel there are many layers to this poem. It feels very personal: with some subtle references that perhaps the poet only knows - In a way that enhances the experience as the reader feels they are getting a sneak glimpse into the mind of the poet when he/she doesn't know they are there. What I liked is how, in between lovely imagery, the poet brought it back to a dandelion. I felt that this may have represented how the poet wants their partner to be real: Not manufactured, or pretty on the outside like some other flowers. The poet is attracted to something that isn't usually noticed: something that is usually considered a weed. The metaphor worked well in my opinion and gave an insight into a relationship that existed in a real dimension, in a well-painted, almost secret corner of the world. Well done, lovely read." (10)

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"Consecrated" by: Poet on the Piano

"This poem is another way of expressing someone's sorrow and doubts that just push the mind to its limits, truly awe inspiring! Beautiful visual imagery is just drenched in this poem, sown in is the emotional essence that begs to keep the reader to keep reading more and it's relatable to the poet who wrote it. My heart aches for the person who has gone through this. Really relatable and inspirational, a voice that speaks to all and is heard by all." (10)

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"Queen of Ruins" by: Window Washer

"This piece is phenomenal - the sheer bluntness of the imagery utilized in this piece, coupled with an extremely interesting depiction of a car crash due to drunken driving. This piece is absolutely breathtaking in every sense - the persona depicted has a refreshing take on it, and narrates this piece in an extremely unique way. It's an exceptional second-person narrative that takes a twist at the ending. Excellently penned." (10)

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"I'm living, come back later" by: Karla

"The title set the tone for this piece which I thought was refreshingly honest and colloquial. The poet gives us a brief glimpse into themselves through a conversation or stream of thoughts. Not sure if it was co-incidence or not but the closing line in each stanza was very effective. I think the ending with the use of 'die me' in that way is interesting and thought-provoking: it is nice to see experimentation and I think most phrasing and word use throughout the poem works (despite one or two brushes with cliche e.g. 'tip of my hearts tongue'). It is a very meta poem and I like it, well done!" (7)

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"Prelude" by: Senyru

"What a great dark writing, the bright title in of itself was more than attractive to grasp every scene beautifully narrated in this piece. The structure of the poem excellently suited the theme and uniquely formed, the poetic use of repetition for words in the introduction and the closure as well, created an atmosphere of suspense that made this read very vague and spicy. A smart use of the assonance we also recognized in some beautiful lines, for example: ~ mornings/mournings... which smoothen the flow of the poem very much.
All in all a very remarkable piece." (7)

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"Gasoline heart" by: Sam and Senryu

"This is an excellent collaboration by Sam and Senryu this week. The Lines are flowing with rich words and priceless emotions, these two should be applauded!" (4)

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"Rest In Pieces" by: DirgeVenustas193

"This was a very nice tribute to a fallen love. Shows how pure and true that this love was, and how it will always be, besides the emotions sucker-punching you with the raw emotions screaming of mourning. The imagery was very nicely done, emphasizing the emotions but mostly empowering the visuals so that both could make your eyes and mind cry. Very beautiful." (4)

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"The Grim Reaper Has Scars Too" by: Beautiful Soul

"I personally felt that this poem was a level below my other 2 picks this week and I had a harder time picking a poem to give my 4pts to, but this had enough to earn the vote. I felt it certainly had a dark, eerie, supernatural feel to it which helped make the poem more effective. The word use was apt to create this menacing tone. The premise that the Grim Reaper is to be personified is interesting and it was an interesting perspective to write a poem from. Again, I think it was somewhat experimental and thinking outside the box is to be commended, even if it may not be the complete article just yet. The ending was strong and well put together. Keep it up" (4)

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"The smell before rain (Naani)" by: Beautiful Soul

"This fantastic piece is a typical example for "Naani", using unusual vocabularies and avery interesting theme, the writer knew how to use the language professionally coming up with great descriptive and expressive verse, which is the main principal for writing a good naani.Very enjoyable short piece." (4)

Awesome poetry! :) Congratulations to everyone mentioned and those who won! :0

Thank you judges for the hms and thanks MA for posting :)

Congrats to all, thanks judges & thanks MA.

Thank you for your beautiful comments.

I am honored.

Thank you so much.

:)

Congratulations to Hellon and Sam... Thank you very much judges, made me smile today..

Congratulations hms and thank you to everyone who helps make this contest come alive each week!

Congratulations to the winners and HM's (:

Congrats Winners and HM's!