Weekly Contest Winners - 5/11/15

Hope everyone had a wonderful weekend! Congrats to Sincuna, Meme, and Saerelune this week! The judges sure were in agreement about their poems but also highlighted other amazing work. Thank you judges for your dedication. Great work everyone :)

WINNERS:

"Genesis" by: Sincuna 10+10+10+7 = 37 points
"Black Ribbons (senryu)" by: Meme 7+7+7+4 = 25 points
"Hypnophobia" by: Saerelune 10+ 4 = 14 points

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COMMENTS:

"Genesis" by: Sincuna

"I found this poem very well written, and it was touching to read from the first beginning line to the last sentence. It was elegant and yet simple. The story being told was visual and emotional giving a scene that people could relate to. It was nice to read a poem like this on a semi-cold day!" (10)

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"There is so much that bursts through the page in this piece. It's unique, bold, romantic, honest. The conversation and thoughtful tone in this draws me in as it reads almost like a prose piece? Love how you disprove what romantics may assume, that time stops in that you see this other person in some glorious spotlight while the angels sing. The personal touches here intrigue me. Your professor on Descartes, comparing her hiding to a shy animal, your eyes on here like a mountaineer with a choice to leap or revere the view. These lines take my breath away: "I was never the audacious hero, to pluck the thorny roses off of your feet. To be honest, I never intended to survive you."

- I think it's so human and natural of us to romanticize or idolize others. And that can get to a dangerous point. If we rely on each other to "save" one another. The neat part is how you talk about entering this person's life and altering their world, shifting their perspective, throwing them out of orbit.

"And this is my greatest sin: to ignore your broken little pieces, scattered as if they wouldn't fit parts of me."

- This is worded in such a profound way. Instead of looking at the person in one way, we should see what makes a person up, the little, imperfect parts. We can't try to "fit" our own image of what someone should be. That ending line is incredible and shows the continuation of your admiration for this person. How it lasts, that first impression, still.
Genesis - the beginning. How it continues. How there are more beginnings. So fitting." (10)

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"This was the perfect embodiment of verse meeting poetry - it was laden with metaphors and imagery that worked to make this piece extremely exquisite. The narrative of this piece bounces back apathy for oneself, and being captivated, this piece seemed to flow naturally and loved every aspect about it." (10)

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"It's the genesis of love in a romantic, purely metaphoric language. From a state of denying emotions the poet slowly shifted to describing a state of growing love. I think the structure could have been better for the random length of the lines was a bit interrupting at some points. Beautiful employment of similes and metaphors despite the excessive use." (7)

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"Black Ribbons (senryu)" by: Meme

"I'm really intrigued why this is in the dark category. I think it could be read in many ways, in many tones, and in a way it makes me want to analyze what qualifies as a person's "shades of grey". I take it as you realizing the darkness and depth of the flaws in this person you are close to, but you give them a part of you anyway, promising not that you'll indulge in that but that you will be present, open to this person and their heart. Love the depth in this senryu, very thought-provoking." (7)

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"Although this poem is short due to the poetry style that it belongs to it was very nice to read a simple story plot in very few lines it's a wonderful read, held a lot of emotions and visuals. It was a great read." (7)

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"Opening your heart and soul and letting someone love you completely is something that is very difficult to do.

Within this very short format, it is very difficult to pack a powerful message and Meme did that and much more here... its a touching poem about loving someone through the darkness and giving them hope... just beautiful!!!" (7)

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"An elegant well written Senryu, it's that dark passion which insists to last, resonant word choice and internal rhythm. Very enjoyable." (4)

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"Hypnophobia" by: Saerelune

"Such a remarkable topic to write about, the poet captured the essence of fear of sleep very well. Starting from the neat, well arranged structure and the referral to loch Ness from the start, she could direct the thoughts of the reader to follow the ascending rhythm of fears with full suspense. Time passes, and at a certain point we lose contact with time for that frightening feeling is much overwhelming. More than excellent writing." (10)

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"This poem hits me hard. The fear of sleep? It makes me wonder why. I stay up late far too often and it isn't because I'm not tired but it's hard for me to relax and stop the racing thoughts. The fear, tension, anxiety, in this poem is so tangible to me. I like how you repeat "Four AM" at the end too, like no time has passed. Like you are still fighting the night. "He" is symbolic to me as a savior of sorts, keeping you from the demons of your past and touching you with gentleness of reality. Not the hands of the past monsters that are far more real than the "Loch Ness" or other legends people dismiss. These monsters may not have names but may be feeding off your memory, trying to consume you and make you doubt your future. The next day even. Powerful piece." (4)

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HM's:

"Where Flowers Bloom And So Does Hope" by: Mahal Ko Kuya Ko = 10 points
"Have we ever lived" by: Yannick = 7 points
"Consumed In Chains" by: Tara Kay = 4 points
"Tell Me About Us" by: Meme = 4 points
"The Fence" by: Vartan = 4 points

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COMMENTS:

"Tell Me About Us" by: Meme

"I loved the form it was posted in, it's nice to see when poets take advantage of the alignment and it can be done to their benefit. One stanza flowed into the next and it was truly beautiful to read." (4)

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"Have we ever lived" by Yannick (7 pts)

"I love the diction used by the author, it was meaningful and added weight to this piece, though concise, I found myself reading this piece over and over again. I cannot wait to see what else this author produces in the near future. Well done."

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"The Fence" by: Vartan

"Really refreshing write - despite it being sad, the style employed in this poem is extremely unique, and I must admit that I'm really taken by this piece. I'm definitely reading more of this author's poems in the future." (4)

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"Consumed In Chains" by: Tara Kay

"This poem is truly from the heart and soul, which is one of Tara Kay's specialties, letting you that window to her heart. I was taken away.

Here you have such a powerful display of feelings and emotions and it was perfectly detailed. To love a new, its such an emotional roller coaster, I was taken away by its elegance, very pretty piece!" (4)

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"Where Flowers Bloom And So Does Hope"
by: Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

"This piece is purely magical within the wording and formatted style. I was mesmerized by its elegance and beauty...

Its nature tones are breathtaking but then adding the message of a broken city perhaps is just something that left me speechless at the end. I do love thought provoking pieces such as this.. it's truly elegant, well done!" (10)

Conratulations to the Winners and HM's (: Thank you, Judges and POTP (:

Genesis <3

Congratulations to all! :)

Great week everyone, wonderful writes!

Very pretty highlights this week, congratulations everyone!

Congrats all!