Weekly Contest Results for July 27th

Hello Everyone. This week's winners have captured the
judges' heart with their heart rendering and captivating
poems. Congrats to our winners Cassie Hughes, Camellia
and Mr Darcy. Congrats to our HM's too who have
penned lovely and eye catching poems. Thank you judges
for your timely votes and comments and for the work you
put in!

WINNERS:

Where once was love by Cassie Hughes (10+10+7=27)

A poet's world by Camellia the laidback potato (10+7+7=24)

Little Missy by Mr Darcy (10+4=14)

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Where once was love by Cassie Hughes

Cassie the hint of rhyming in this piece was very pleasant.
I have not been a fan of rhyming since my beginning
stages of writing poetry, however this piece her seemed
to be almost old fashioned, in a form, with wording that
we would read in old literature books in school. That opening
line of this poem was absolutely beautiful, and the way
you ended that first stanza , wow... Did fly to taste
another muse? How elegantly and sadly written about a
lost love. Cass, the final two stanzas are so perfectly
written, so beautifully detailed, so full of beautiful analogies
and descriptions yet still maintaining so much sorrow, that
is not usually done well in sad poems often. I would be
very upset if this wasn't a front page winner. This is brilliantly penned. (10 points)

Where Once Was Love by Cassie hughes

What a beautifully sad write. The flow is smooth with a
hint of rhyme. Nothing seemed forced and yet everything
fell in place and made it all tender. I like the images
each stanza brought out and for me the first and last
stanza stood out. This poem reaches out to the reader
and touches the heart...lovely! (10 points)

Where Once Was Love by Cassie hughes

I love this poem. The opening verse manages to
convey both love and loss within the first few lines without
it seeming to rush to fit everything in. "In vain I looked
for its return" I really liked this line as I believe we can
all say we've done the same at one point: We've all tried
to hold onto someone that has already let go of us. "all that
I was turned into hate." It's funny what love can do to us.
One moment it makes us the best person we can be
whilst the next we no longer recognize ourselves. The
only thing I'm unsure of here is the sudden loss of the
rhyme scheme with this line as it threw my flow a little.
The final verse wraps everything up so nicely and with
a lovely flow and follows on effortlessly from the last
line of the prior verse of how love can turn us into
someone completely different than what we were.
Beautifully written. (7points)

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A poet's world by Camellia

I am very impressed with this piece of writing that I'm
really shock your authors note says your poetry gets
better by the minute.....I'm not seeing how. First of all
your punctuation here was great, I love the choppiness
on certain stanzas, the pauses, some repeated words,
some simple words with detailed lines after. I think
this poem almost gave a "hectic" vibe , but poets live in
hectic worlds where we find and see poetry in everything
and we live in a world of infinite emotions, this was a
unique write, your style is unique and I love when I
come across a new style of writing, very refreshing!
(7 points)

A poet's world by Camellia the laidback potato

This writer is still young but her poetry is beyond her
years. She captured an idea of what a poet's world is
like, and it is true. Some people and some events are
only alive and remembered through a poet's world, and
by the poet's eyes.
"Where else, do these find a home,
than a poet's mind?"
^^
In every poets mind there is a different world, everyone
has his unique universe, with his unique characters.
However, in all of them, there resides a voice and an idea
to a lot that is voiceless or forgotten in this world. Hope
to see more pieces that are amazing from this poet in the
future. Well done! (7 points)

A poet's world by Camellia the laidback potato

What a beautiful, almost perfect frame. Such an amazing
poem, I am totally in love with this piece. The word choice,
the flow, the imagery, the little details, the emotion and
that inevitable magnet effect. I found this poem to be one
of my recent favorites for real, very charming and there
is not doubt that it has a very apparent emotional effect!

Well done, want more like this! (10 points)

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Little Missy by Mr Darcy

This was such a sad, sad poem. I have to say it's not
often narrative stories in a poetry form draw my attention
but this here did. I loved the click click of the shoes, that
is such an added bonus to poetry to me, to not only give
a visual, but give a sound. I love the in between
moments of he loves me, he loves me not. ...really
demonstrating the evil and bi polar ways of how men's
behavior can truly torture a woman's emotions. It's a
rare find I say again, to find a narrative poem this intriguing,
but the story was so detailed and penned so intriguingly
well that I definitely think it deserves some attention,
well done!(4 points)

Little Missy by Mr Darcy

This has to be one of the best storytelling poems I read.
The pauses and continuation of the lines made the
scenery in the poem so vividly seen. I saw the place
she was in, and I heard the different voices and sounds.
God, I think I even felt her pain. The writer took a real
story, gave a voice to a voiceless woman, and made
the reader feel and sympathize with her. We saw her
agony, her torture and her pain through her eyes. We
lived every moment of that night with her. The lines
where she realizes he loved her, only to realize again that
he did not were so powerful. We fight to see the good in
those we love, so by default even if we were hurt by them
in one time, the moment they do a good deed in the
moment we come to think that's it is alright again. We
deceive ourselves just to cover the fact that we are
so scared to be alone. This is such a heartfelt poem that
I think others should read. Just to know that some
people should be remembered... (10 points)

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HM'S:

How Ironic (Haiku) by Hellon (4)

Sorry, Love Daddy by Ben Pickard (7)

Stop The Clocks (Take Them Down) by Ben Pickard (4)

Not A Happy Man by Ben Pickard (7)

Remembrance by Beautiful Soul (4)

Cancer by Beautiful Soul (4)

Two Weeks After Your Death by Kakera (10)

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How Ironic (Haiku) by Hellon

How well penned and so true!! It really gets me mad to
see some people even kids just write a few lines, a bit
of scribbling and then throw!! I always tell my kids don't
waste paper don't waste a tree's life. It just goes to
show how people take advantage and take lots of things
on earth for granted...sad that this happens. This Haiku
sends out a strong message loud and clear. (4 points)
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Sorry, Love Daddy by Ben Pickard

Here is a father swelled with sadness and inadequacy,
wishing that he could be more for his child. In this case I
can see a father talking or unable to face her he writes to
his daughter. He wishes that his daughter deserves
more/better. But sometimes for a daughter a father been
there whether perfect or not is all that matters. This
touched me a lot and brought me close to home...touching
write. (7 points)
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Stop The Clocks (Take Them Down) by Ben Pickard

I adore the idea behind this poem. So often we're told
make the most of your time you wont get it back- but
we don't really stop and think that each second is taking
us closer to death. I thought this was a unique perspective
and fresh idea on the subject of time.
"Our tragically short and hapless lives -" Reminds me of
this quote: Your life is so short you may as well not live
at all. And I love the contradiction; our lives are short in
the grand scheme of things but it's also the longest thing
we do. The use of fools and walls threw the flow a little as
it isn't a perfect rhyme, but the rest of the rhyming I
really liked. I enjoyed this poem very much and thought
it was very unique. Lovely work. (4 points)
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Not A Happy Man by Ben Pickard

When I read the first line, I was not very positive,
however reaching the 3rd/4rth I started to feel that heat
and connection with the poem. The inner melody and
the very raw word choice, just made this even better
and better. It's one of those sad poems that do depress
you and one of those that feels so honest that you can't
fight your emotions while reading. I somewhat loved
the random rhyming scheme, and that you haven't
really forced a lot of cakery metaphors to serve you. I
really love this poem, well done! (7 points)

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Remembrance by Beautiful Soul

I couldn't not come back and choose this one. The
darkness and sadness within its lines haunted me. The
way the poet was gathering the pieces of his lost one,
and how he remembered them, made me reflect back
on some of my own experiences. Very powerful write, with
a deep emotional ending line! (4 points)
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Cancer by Beautiful Soul

I guess this poem is a fighter :) felt the need and urge
to choose it after reading well through the rest of the
poems, I thought that this one had something different,
and deserves to be pointed out. Especially the way
you opened this poem, it was not typical at all. I loved
the view and thoughts your opening lines have given
me. The creative wording is really praise worthy and
very gentle in its image creation. I love most your "golden
streaks" till "winter" that part blew me away. And I love
most your title and poem-content combo, and how you
chose to refer to all of this state you're living. Well done.
Keep the beautiful work. (4 points)
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Two Weeks After Your Death by Kakera

Kakera paints such vivid loss and mourning in this piece
all the while managing to create something elegant
and pretty from something so tragic and heartbreaking.
I always enjoy the use of the serpent in poems and this
was no exception here. Sometimes life hands us such a
raw deal and it feels like there is nothing but pain. The
mention of there being no hope left and suffocating in
silence enforces that sometimes we're given more pain
to deal with than we can bare. "that I could spread magic
in the heart of everything mundane, and reach past the
stars to where the angels sing" Easily my favorite lines
of the poem; as it generates such delicate and bittersweet
imagery in so few words. I lost someone very close to
me last year and whilst I can't say the pain stops, I can
tell you that it does begin to get easier with time.
Remember your friend and stay strong. (10 points)

Thank you for the kind comment and the honorable mention. I know the pain will never stop, nor do I really want it to. But I do know that I will never forget my best friend, though he left this world earlier than me, and I find strength in the people around me that keep me on my feet and push me forward even though my legs don't want to move.

Congrats winners and HMs!
Nice to see you back on the site, Michael, and being on the front page as well!
Thanks to the judges & to Meena for hosting.

Can I just say special congratulations to Cassie for her first win with a stunning write which is flawless in my opinion. Michael already knows what I think of his - a masterful, gutsy write. And Camellia - for one so young, your poetry is amazing. Well done all.

Thank you to Meena and the judges. Congrats to all this week!

Congratulations to you all. very much deserved wins, and to the HM,congrats to you too :)

Many thanks to you all and to the judges for their lovely comments and votes.

Congratulations to the winners! Thank you judges & Meena! :)

Hello all,

Congratulations to all winners and HM's too. The HM's mean a lot and being able to read comments encourage writers such as myself.

I have been away for a few years and returning is like coming home again. Thank you all for welcoming be back.

Thank you for your kind words, after all, there is nothing quite like a pat on the back from people you respect. I respect you all!

Congratulations to the winners and HM,s Thank you judge for your comment and vote...much appreciated.

Congrats to all!

Thank you for your comments,appraisals and everything. Thanks a lot.

-CEdSC