Weekly Contest Results 24/08/2015

Good Morning Everybody! We have had a variety of poems
this week and each one of them was penned so elegantly.
Thank you so much judges for your time and effort you put
in each week.

Congratulations to the front page holders: Scott Dale,
Saerelune & Mr Darcy; and congratulations to all the
HM's, especially Z on both his writes and welcome to P&Q.

WINNERS:

A Sad Farewell by Scott Cole

Siren's Song by Saerelune

Lady in Red by Mr Darcy

COMMENTS:

Sirens song by Saerelune

I am so in love with this piece. The metaphoric touch
given to this poem did it for me.

"but my voice is nothing but
the dying sizzle of static
through tangled earplugs" <<--- this is absolutely amazing,
what a perfect description of a broken voice that wouldn't
make sense to ears incapable or unwilling to hear. Wow.

I'm just a siren without wings
to shelter you from storms;
but fear not, my love,
for it also means your cheeks
won't be clawed by me...<<---- again?? With the hands
down best up to date metaphors I've read in poetry
lately?? My my, my this is a beautiful depiction of
becoming that warning for someone verbally without
enabling them or physically trying to save them ....I can
relate to this so much which is why I'm in love with it.

that the coin I flipped was a fate
I denied, and upon a thousand
wishing wells, I wished you well,
with or without my plea for you
to hold me during winter nights,
for I, I cannot blanket you
when my sun has long died.

^^ I am ridiculously out of any words to describe this.
I mean, what? That play on words was fantastic with
wishing well and wish you well, and the coin flipping with
a date already denied. ....I mean this is award winning
poetry and if it's not on the front page the other judges
need a lesson one what talent to look for when judging.
This work here is stunning, regardless of the sad
undertone that I actually couldn't notice until now
because the words were so captivating. (10 points)

Siren's song by Saerelune

To be honest, the flow and structure weren't that perfect,
especially concerning the opening lines, that wasn't very
exciting to read however having to be fair, I reread this
a couple of times and found something missing in some
other poem for this week, it had a very beautiful
selflessness and lots of real raw emotions.

The content of this poem is very precious and sad.
Just tightening up the structure and flow would make
this piece outstanding. But it is a poem to be highlighted-
that for sure! Thank you for sharing. (4 points)

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A sad farewell by Scott Cole

Scott, a very well done kudos to you friend. This poem
here is the best rhyming poem on this site, for its flow
being spot on, and for the topic being a popular
controversy but not one typically wrote on, and definitely
not like this. Your imagery here was so well written and
how you intertwined the sadness and the discouragement
really jumped off the page. I find this to be an inspiring
write, one that makes me want to change lifestyle habits
and pay better attention to my environment ...loved this .
(7 points)

A Sad Farewell by Scott Cole

To me, this a such a well written personification of the
world as we knew it, but more sadly as we are getting
to know it. (4 points)

A Sad Farewell by Scott Cole

I had absolutely no idea that this poem was going to end
the way that it did and that is always something that I
love: A twist at the end of poem/it turning out entirely
different than what I was expecting. Once I finished
and knew what it was about I went back and re read
it again, more slowly this time and savoring it more.

I enjoyed the personification of the trees and thought
that made it seem much more real, and this is
something few of us ever think about when we should
really be thinking about things like this more often and
doing what we can to help prevent it. I found the entire
piece to flow easily from one line to the next and
though some of the rhymes were simple I thought it
worked really well. Easily my favorite part of this is the imagery painted along with the fact it is a poem that
makes me think about things.

Lovely write. (7 points)

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Lady in Red by Mr Darcy

This one is written flawlessly as are all the nominations
are, but the bonus is in the inspiration explanation.
(10 points)
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HM's:

Back to the future by Z

Pine Tree Graveyard by Z

Newborn by Cassie hughes

Skeletons rattle by Ssenevol

Pixle Perfect? by Mr Darcy

Teddy Bears And Nightmares by Ben Pickard

Collecting Maps by Baby Rainbow

Shameful Secrets by Baby Rainbow

COMMENTS:

Back to the future by Z

What a well thought out, creative piece this was.
Simply beautiful art in word form is what I'd call this.
You see the word essence used in poetry to describe all
of what you broke down, but you took that word and
defined what it meant to you when looking at this person,
but you did it with such a soft, unique way.

I can't even discuss the rest of this piece because it is
absolutely heart breaking, that last line is a killer. Still
very elegantly stated considering the circumstance in
this piece, I am impressed. (4 points)

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Pine Tree Graveyard by Z

I love this. This was absolutely beautiful. The use
of alliteration right from the starting line instantly makes
me drawn to poem and I liked the idea of tempting
temperance; it isn't something that I have seen used
before.

"drunken apologies hurt more than sober words. " One
of my favorite lines. I was going to say it was the
favorite but there's so many in this poem that I love that
I simply can't choose a single favorite. Here, I feel like
something is trying to be fixed but no matter how hard
you try it just never happens and continues to become
worse.

I thought that 'eating imperfections/bloody teeth'
was referring to another persons flaws and basically
gritting your teeth and baring with them despite the
struggle and anger/pain it causes you; and the way it
is phrased creates such vivid visuals.

"You only like to sing to me in ambulance sirens, and
trust me prayers won't help you now because I am
your heart attack." Another favorite part. This is so
wonderfully done and the break between these lines
really helps drive the point home and has such power
in that last line.

The closing lines, following on immediately from the
mention of being their heart attack work very well. I feel
like you're the one that destroyed this person and
you're glad no one knows so that this stays secret. Again,
I love this. This is a beautiful write. And welcome to P&Q! (10 points)

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Newborn by Cassie hughes

What an amazing tribute. A very heart touching and
overwhelming poem. The word choice is so delicate and perfectly chosen.

For instance;

Tiny dreams wrapped
in pure white cotton.
^
This in particular holds an impact and leaves one on
the reader. The image and its reflection is pitch-perfect.
Well done, praise-worthy. (10 points)

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Skeletons rattle by Ssenevol

The strongest part of this complete poem is its closing
stanza. It was a brilliant way to end the poem, leaving the
reader in one way or another speechless. It was not easy
to forget these words and thus, came my vote to this
poem. The flow and word choice are in harmony although
its a dark poem. There is so much emotion in this piece.
There is SOUL and a shape of fear in this poem.

The Lucid Dream inspiration can be perfectly senses
when reading carefully into the skeleton/soul lines. Well done! (7 points)

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Pixle Perfect? by Mr Darcy

This poem made me giggle. So many people are so
obsessed with how their photos look nowadays that they'll
do absolutely everything they can to alter it and use filters
on them, and by the time they've finished doing so the
picture looks absolutely nothing like the original version
and you'd never be able to tell it's the same thing.

This poem reminds me we need to focus more on the
inner parts of ourselves and stop making such a fuss
about the outer parts and caring what others think about
it or trying to live up to what is now considered 'normal'
by society. I found the poem to be creative and unique
and written in a way that had me smiling at the end,
lovely work. (4 points)

Pixle Perfect? by Mr Darcy

Love the message in this poem. Although it is short, but it is packed with depth and meanings. Many things in life are PHOTOSHOPed into something far away from what they originally are. And I found it refreshing that the writer painted that picture in those little words. How can an orange
ever become a banana? Some just fail to see the depth of meaning in that! (4 points)

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Teddy Bears and Nightmares by Ben Pickard

Oh how I love this poem! I never related to a poem as
much as I relate to this one. The way the poem is written
is perfect, a perfect dialog between a mother and her
child (or so I thought) until the ending line when I
realized that it is her husband in fact. The calming down,
her words, his fears, her assurances, his doubts, it all
made sense. It all painted a picture of his weakness and
her strength, and it is so relate-able in the sense that a lot
fear the darkness as children, and a lot find safety in one
or more of their belonging. At the same time, it shows
that even adults go through moments like that, given
some circumstances. Excellent write as always. (10 points)

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Collecting Maps by Baby Rainbow

It breaks my heart to read those lines that speak volumes
and volumes of many heartbreaks and heartaches. Using
maps in a metaphoric way to deliver the message of being
abandoned midway, or of being left and let go I found to
be very meaningful. Maps were meant to guide us when
we are lost, and in this poem, they painted the picture of
her loss. Heartfelt and beautiful written. (7 points)

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Shameful Secrets by Baby Rainbow

I love the flow, style and even the shape of this poem
that delivered strong emotion (7 points)

Well done all, excellent pieces this week and thanks to the judges for their time and words as usual.

Thanks, Min, for posting and thanks judges! You have been fabulous with your diligent and timely work.

Congrats to the winners and hms. Great poems.

Hello everyone,

I have been smiling all day, despite the rain! :O)

Thank you to the judges for your time, effort and kind words. Also to the other excellent writers and their poems on this page.

*wanders off whilst singing in the rain*

Congrats everyone.

Congrats!!!

Awesome job, congrats to all! Thanks judges and Meena of course!

Congrats! :0)

Congrats all