Weekly Contest Winners 9.14.15

Apologies everyone - my laptop was at work and I was home sick yesterday. We're still waiting on a judge to send in their comments, and I will update as soon as I get those in! :)

Let's congratulate our winners and HMs!! Our winners are...

To have cared or loved it all by Nadia
How a Puppy Chases Snowflakes by Naughtymouse
For the Love of a Daughter by POTP

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To have cared or loved it all by Nadia:

Oh the title and the poem bond.

Such persistence, strength, determination, hope and Will.

Fond of the repetition of I will, in some cases it might through the reader off, but I really felt the will in your repetition.
The determination is crystal clear.

This poem is inspiring and easy for general readers to relate, and for target readers to be touched.

Well done and thanks for sharing. (7)

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This poem has a positive tone and while reading it I also got a
sense of enlightenment on behalf of the poet. A feeling that this
has been experienced and life's lesson has been tasted. This ending:
without the need, to crave for more
to have cared, and loved it all
^^I simply like this closing. This is what living life to its maximum
and taking the step of going through it rather then stepping back means.
A sense of fulfillment arises when we don't have to crave and yearn for
things. A sigh filled with peace allows us to depart this world with a smile.
An inspirational write to grab life by its reins and ride it! Well done and
welcome to the site! (10 points)

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How a Puppy Chases Snowflakes by Naughtymouse

I adore the opening verses that Mouse paints here. Too often we want to say something but the enormity of our feelings make anything we do say seem so insignificant in the grand scheme of things.

The mention of pointing fingers and laughing at others made me smile as I think many can relate and believe themselves to be in control and suddenly find themselves out of control with little to no warning.

I enjoyed the questions and had to mull them over. So often showing our feelings is seen as a sign of weakness even though we can't help them and the more we try to ignore them the harder it becomes.

The last verse had me nodding in agreement; if only others could read our mind and be in our brain, everything would be much less confusing and complicated.

The last line was beautiful, so simple and yet filled with emotion and meaning.

Beautiful work as always. (4)

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How a puppy chases snowflakes-10

Ben, I loved the transparency this poem shed forth! Writers are very good at hiding what they really want to say with metaphors, this here ended up being a poetically written, yet straight forward piece of writing and I adored it.

I always thought myself to be in
control of my emotions,
stupidly pointing the finger
at less composed people and
laugh at how they get so
messed up when
everything is so clear.

Well, hand on heart,
I'm messed up,

^^ I loved the admitting here. Humans do this often in life, laughing at people we think we don't understand then later find ourselves to be in a similar situation. The last stanza and that last stanza is what I loved. I actually thought this poem was just about a single emotion or feeling to someone, but when you posed the question at the end to me this poem became brilliant. All these jumbled emotions led to you trying to make sense of one thing. This captivated me and stole me with the ending. Well done!

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For the Love of a Daughter by Poet on the Piano

This tugs at my heartstrings. The pain is so raw and real and drips from every word that Mary Anne writes. I thought the opening was quite intriguing, we often forget the specific times and dates as pain blurs them all together.

The question asked at the end of the second verse is so heartbreaking. Our childhood often defines us if we let it and no matter how hard we try to let go of it, we never fully can. Even when rationally we know something isn't our fault we can't help but blame ourselves and that's beautifully highlighted here.

"Because words poison and I haven't been able to locate the antidote, yet." This is what hit me the hardest. There's a reason we say bruises fade but words don't. They embed themselves into our soul and are the most difficult to let go of.

The last few verses really bring home how the actions have damaged and hurt the author and how they can't find it to forget what happened. And that's so often too true, no mater how hard we try.

Despite being filled with such sadness and hurt from start to finish, this is a beautiful write. (10)

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Again one of my great dreams is that a poet uses their writing skill to highlight abuse from a victims point of view . So the witch hunters will open their eyes look more closely rather that voodoo straw man production that hypocrites use to deflect from the guilty (7)

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HMs:

Needle drop-7 -
By Maple Tree

Andrea is such a creative writer, amazing person in general, and this poem really really stood out to me compared to her other poems. Her love for nature is evident in all her work and life style, but what I particularly loved about this piece was that there was a hidden topic she never blatantly mentioned, just hinted toward. What I also loved with this poem came across so humble! Expressing your opinion about a topic like this can go really wrong as people tend to judge others decisions or even force their opinion on the opposing view. She always demonstrates compassion to nature and is humble in her opionions and thats what I thought made this poem beautiful.

My nature has no need to be decorated and neither does my soul, we are beautiful just the way we were meant to be....

^^ This killed me. I'm officially a fake tree buyer.

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Heavy mornings-4 -
By Yakari Gabriel

This poem!! Oh my, Yaki has always demonstrated a strong opinion in her work in such a poetic way. I absolutely love how this poem starts out with a stanza where we usually see poets decsribing what their pain looks like, instead she uses it to say what its not. I enjoyed that. The last stanza was gut wrenching, mostly because as we all know music speaks to us in so many ways. But its a really good description of how things mean something different to each person. How that song may just be a good beat to one person, describes the pain and life to another.

I thought this was a really great piece. Awesome job.

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This is beautiful. Britt always manages to write so flawlessly and really allow the reader to feel what she is feeling and this piece is no exception.

The second stanza is stunning. So often we want someone or something even though we know it's not ours and we have no right to want or take it, but do so anyway, not caring about the consequences.

"but to encourage what we had was wrong. " I adore the tie in with the prior lines here, it emphasizes everything in such a pretty way.

Although the majority of the poem is heavy hearted, I find hope in the closing lines and selflessness. Wanting someone but being mature enough to let them go and do the right thing even though it hurts.

Beautiful. (7)

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by nourayasmine

To any member who spreads the myth that this site is not active should be given a choice between a suspension or serving a term as the weekly. I had an easy childhood . the only stress was wanting to play before I did my homework , I heard a myth that the refugees are seeking riches , and I am so humbled by journalist poets

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Albert Ascends a Bus

by Larry Chamberlin the Godfather (4 points)

If the depth of this poem does not speak for itself ,ask a mod to draft a new judge
One understands limited points and the fear of looking bias

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Boxes
by Window Washer 10 points

Superb imagery. Loved this poem to the bones. Rich with details and, poetry!

Loved the fact that, from the opening line to the closing verse, it wasn't and still isn't possible to be accurate how to define your "you" and "your" couldn't tell the target person in this poem.

Loved how personal it got, and how emotional and sad.

It's a very unique poem. Well done

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Mortal Melody
by Cassie hughes 4 points

This is brilliantly written. It wraps up a whole self-story. I enjoyed reading this over and over again because it leaves such an impact on the reader. Wanting them to search between the lines for more emotions, more info, some slipping words.

I believe its one of the best poems for this weeek.

Hats off for the flow and imagination skills. Very creative.

Keep the great work!

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Removal of the self by Everlasting

A unique poem about poetry and the way it has taken form or
been birthed by the writer. There is so much put into a poem when
we write it, the emotions and at times the heaviness of it all been laid
onto a pure white sheet. I like the descriptions accompanied by the
images as well as the wisdom which has been portrayed. I especially
liked this line: "sprouting out in the mouth of mother earth". All in all
a write of wisdom, truth and maturity...well penned. (7 points)

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He found a home in my veins by Adreamer

The title got me and made me want to read it. I guess when we miss
someone real deep and with whom we have spent a lot of time with- we
feel that they are close by; they may not be there in person but their
memories, the moments, scent, thoughts coupled with feelings all come
alive when you awake to see the other half of an empty bed. The second
and third stanza takes the reader through those moments with vivid
imagery and I also liked how you have repeated the opening stanza before
ending the poem, with the hopes of seeing this person again...the yearning
always remains...nice write. (4 points)

Thank you, judges, for your hard work!

Thank you, also, for my HM! Appreciate the comment! :)

Congratulations, Winners and HM's (:

Amazing poems, well done everyone, winners and HM's. Beautiful poetry.

Thank you for posting!

Well done wins and hm's there was so much beautiful poetry this week! thank you judges and folk for taking so much of your time you guys rock \m/

Thank you greatly judges, for your comments, and Britt, for posting! Congrats to all winners & HMS!

Well done all - some great work, as usual.

Excellent poems! Congratulations to the winners and the HMs. Thanks, Judges & Britt for posting.

Much appreciation to the judge for the comment on Albert!

Congrats peeps!

Congrats all and thanks to the judges

Congrats

Congrats all!

Congratulation...

Well done. *opens a bag of Jelly Babies and passes them around*

Missing comments added.