Weekly Contest Results- Winners for the week 9/21/2015

Hello everyone sorry for the delay! Am still waiting on
one more set of comments and as soon as I get them
will update the thread. We have had a variety of poems
chosen by the judges and I must say they all are unique
in their own way. Thank you judges for your time and
effort.

WINNERS:

A Mate for life by Mr Darcy

The seed of hope by Jenny

This boat is drowning by Abed

A Mate for Life (Sonnet) by Mr Darcy

I've always found sonnets one of the more difficult forms
to pull off without it seeming forced but Michael does a
wonderful job here. The imagery painted throughout is
vivid enough that it allows the reader to visualize it in
their mind while the poem itself is beautifully detailed
and elegantly written, whilst the rhyming flows perfectly
and the emotion is present from start to finish.
"But, if the world delivered only doom, My love would
shine a light on ev'ry step'-I adore this, the positivity
that love will overcome anything, even the entire world
if needed. The closing two lines I found to be seductive
and excellently wraps up the poem. Truly beautiful work here. (10 points)

A Mate for Life (Sonnet) by Mr Darcy

This is everything a sonnet should be and then some
with a great romantic Theme. (7 points)

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The Seed of Hope by Jenny

This poem really made me reflect on the way we often
lose hope even when we have all we need to feel loved
and content with what we have. (10 points)

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This Boat Is Drowning by Abed

This poem contemporary theme reminded me of
Gibran's style and how he would right about such a
tragedy. (4points)

HM's:

Addiction by Ingrid de Klerck

Shrieks of my fading past by John Doe

A scent of belonging by Meme

You are, I am...by Koan

Little comfort by Ben

Bereft by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

Heavy mornings by Yakari Gabriel

Climax by Alexis

Addiction (Acrostic) by Ingrid de Klerck

This poem is remarkably sad, albeit written well and with
so much emotion. Despite being relatively short Ingrid
manages to include the majority of what addiction can do
to a person along with a mention of how it can affect
those closest to the sufferer when trust is all but lost due
to the actions committed and words said by the addicted.
"Only to be stopped by the final breath" This line is what
hit me the hardest. So often those affected don't care
about the danger they are putting themselves in, and rarely
if ever think about the pain they are causing to those
around them. Really thought provoking write on a
difficult topic. (7 points)

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Shrieks of My Fading Past by John Doe

I found this to be something many can relate to from
the opening lines. So often we hide our pain behind a
smile that others never really notice what's really going
on behind it. This if further enforced when she then
asks "why, " as it's something very commonly asked
when suffering through pain and grief and when life
becomes too much for us. The closing lines are
somewhat haunting, when mentioning she is now fading.
It's as if she's finally had enough and no longer wishes
to fight back; she's giving up hope. The only minor issue
I had was that the flow in the last line seemed a little bit
off compared to the rest. Lovely work. (4 points)
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A scent of belonging by Meme

The beginning of the poem was a bit slow for me,
however mid way through it picked up and the ending
killed it for me. I love how you talked about finding
this person between lines of your pages, as authors
sometimes that is the only place we find old friends
or lovers, on pages as they are simply memories there.
I really enjoyed your punctuation at the "...of you!"
Really gave extra emphasis on showing this person
how serious you take the situation. I loved the idea
of handing back the pen and paper to them too. Really
crafty write towards the end. Well done! (10 points)
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You are, I am..by Koan

This poem was breath taking to me, I liked the word
use here. I found it to be serene and classy. The
descriptions were beautiful here, by only suggestion
would be try using punctuation to break up the
wordiness. Other than that, I got lost in this piece.
The ending had a sadness that I couldn't really place, but
it was almost like letting go, and I didn't expect that.
Really thought out poem and nicely penned. (7 points)
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Little comfort by Ben

Ben I loved the wording here. The rhyme scheme is
so crafty. I think many people can't agree you are
pnq's latest king of rhyming poetry, and this little diddy
here was catchy. However, the topic, wow. Things that
are nice are replaced by things that are horrid, now that
is something worth thinking about. Any poem that gets
me to think is worth a vote. (4 points)
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Bereft by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

Sooo beautiful. This poem is just very beautiful. The
wording is so deep and lyrical. This is more like a 3D
poem. Your closing words leave an impact especially
with their opposition to the lines before them. Loved
the feeling it gave me. The opening was very, very
catchy and shocking in some sense. As in very direct
and gets you very curious. The rest of the stanzas were
very creative. I loved this poem to death. Hope it gets to
the front page. Also nice title. Love the word. (10 points)

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Heavy mornings by Yakari Gabriel

The title is saddening by itself. It catches you
immediately. Heavy mornings..how beautiful and sad. It's
a poem to relate to, a poem to gets you all wrapped
up with its lines. Very personal yet very outreaching to
the reader.

but oh,
it surely comes..

^ the timing of these lines and setting is just perfect.
May the path from these words be lightened. Well
done expressing yourself in such a raw way. (7 points)
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Climax by Alexis

Freaking awesome poem. The 1st three lines are
breath taking and the last three lines are mind blowing.
I just love, love this piece. I wish I can put it in a frame
and read it every day. Awesome wording. The climax...
in these few seconds..this is going to be my favorite
poem for a long time now.Thank you for writing it. (4 points)

Wonderful work everyone and congratulations to the three very worthy winners - wonderful poems, all. Thanks to the judges for their time as ever and the hm which I'm rather smug about!
All the very best everyone,
Ben

Thanks for stepping up to post it, Meena.
Thanks to the judges, especially those timely getting their comments in.

Congrats to the winners & HMs.

Thanks for the HM and congrats everyone! :)

Hi all,

thanks to the judges for their time. Well done to the other winners and HM. The calibre seems to improve week on week, so I am shocked and thrilled to be on the front page.
This poem was a birthday gift to my better half. Im glad Claire was happy for me to share it here.

Finally, thank you to all those who support me.

Meena, you rock! Thanks to all judges and congrats to winners & HM's!

Congratulations

Congrats all

Congrats!!!

Thanks for the HM and congrats everyone!