Weekly Contest: 11/04/2016
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8 years agoHey PnQers, apologies about the very late posting, something came up quite unexpectedly with regards to a family member. You know how it goes, family first.
Lots of variety this week! The site broke a three way tie this week between Watch and See by Dagmar Wilson, A lover's test by Mr Darcy, and On Mourning by Narph. All three poets deserve a very big congratulations. Also, congratulations are in order for Mayday and Hellon, I was very pleased to see your poems on the front page. Mel
WINNERS:
Life of the party by Mayday: 4 + 7 + 7 = 18
The Garden Swing by Hellon: 10 + 10 + 7 = 27
Watch and See by Dagmar Wilson: 10
A Lover's test (Shakespearean Sonnet) by Mr Darcy: 10
On Mourning by Narph: 10
HM's:
Tomb of Bluebells by Ben Pickard: 4 + 4 = 8
A loving thirst by Ben Pickard: 7
Book of Flowers by Maple Tree: 7
The Dust Settles by Michael D Nalley: 4
Rosie Contradictions by Adreamer: 4
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A Lover's test (Shakespearean sonnet) by Mr Darcy
"Lots of rhyming/formed poetry this week, but I must say this one stood out to me due to its smoothness and humorous yet also romantic content. When I read the first few lines I was drawn in by all these questions, lamenting the persona's lover. I was truly confused when I came upon the line: "I ought to slice her head with razor sword", since I didn't realise that the death that came upon this lover was because of a zombie curse. Everything else was so romantic until I read that line, but it was a pleasant twist. " (10)
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Life of the Party by MayDay
"Another poem that took me by surprise due to its plottwist. I liked the language in particular, the poetic descriptions such as "molasses in the atmosphere" and how something that is quite unconventional behaviour was expressed so poetically. Loved the playful tone that came afterwards, and the ending line that finally revealed the true intention of the poem." (7)
Mayday brought it home for me this week!
This poem is one that stood out among-est the rest this week!
It was sultry and packed with so much fun wording that I had to re read it several times because it was so much fun to read! Definitely a top poem this week! (7)
enjoyed this epic tale, would have like to seen in formatted differently, but the story was great and the ending superb....nice (4)
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The Dust Settles
by Michael D Nalley
"I think what drew me into this poem was its flow and roundness of the story. Using fairytales in love poems is not new but the melody of this poem breathed new life in it, also the repeating question of whether it would truly be considered a sin, just added more personality to the ever-old comparisons with fairytales. " (4)
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The Garden Swing
by Hellon
This is so elegant and beautiful, I am just in awe with this piece.
Hellon has such elegance within her poetry.. the format, visual display and wording are out of this world!
I sighed at the end of this poem... to regret nothing, just to live in the moment of this elegant memory....
Je regrette I believe is French... and to end it with this word is very touching!
Powerful little gem this week by Hellon! (10)
Hellon, this is beautiful. You paint a wonderful image with your words.
"Hair...slightly tousled,
the sea breeze teasing it to disarray.
Eyes of misty mornings past
caught and held my gaze,
just for a moment."
^And this. I don't know if I've ever read a poem with a more picturesque stanza. It brings an image to mind and also a very deep feeling to go along with the image.
The story is very sweet and delicate. (10)
I fell in love with this piece and have read it several times since it was posted to the site. Between the beautiful scene Hellon created and emotional impact I was presented with, I was mesmirised. I couldn't ask for a better poem to read while having a cuppa, thanks for providing me with the feeling of nostalgia and warmth at night. (7).
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Tomb Of Bluebells by Ben Pickard
Tomb of flowers.....
stinging to the end of a sorrowful love... that is how I felt when reading this lovely poem by Ben... the use of flowers within a sorrowful message was just the right touch for me to choose this as one of my top three! well done!! (4)
I liked the symbolism that was used throughout this poem, simple yes, but simple is what makes a great poem. I loved the alliteration of 'nefarious nettles', and 'bed or bluebells', and the tone was interesting to me, it's almost as if the poet was pondering what came of the his loved bluebells. A very beautiful poem. (4)
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Book of Flowers
by Maple Tree
I love the concept of this poem, the similes intertwined, and the strength within it. The person in the poem seems confident and firm on who they are and what they have to offer as a person. They also seem to not care about other peoples opinions aside from not wanting to be misunderstood. You have taken the "everyone has their own story" idea and ran with it quite wonderfully.
Just a small grammar error in the second sentence in the second to last stanza: the word Im, needs an apostrophe. (7)
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Rosie Contradictions
by Adreamer
This is interesting how it goes back and forth from sweet action to consequence of the action. I like the line breaks in each stanza, how there is an individual sentence separated from the stanza, making those sentences stronger. It's very well written. (4)
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Watch and See by Dagmar Wilson
very impressive , knock me down, but I'll get back up with a vengeance write,
My illness does not require rubber gloves.
^loved this line.....terrific piece. (10)
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A loving thirst by Ben Pickard
many quotes of wisdom within, and loved the slant rhyming.....great job (7)
On Mourning by Narph
I gave this poem my top vote this week simply because of how different it was from the rest. The images Narph uses are that of the common and every day environment, this is something a lot of writers, including myself struggle to include in their poetry. Narph doesn't sugar coat things, she doesn't make poems sound beautiful just for the sake of it. She just simply tells it how it is and that's what I loved about this poem. I felt myself mourning, simply because of the way the writer was able to let me get to know someone through their own memories and thoughts. This poem is fantastic and one I can see myself coming back to for a long time. (10) -
Ben Pickard
8 years agoA big congratulations to the winners. I loved Alissa's funeral poem - black humour at its finest. Dagmar - I couldn't be happier for you; time after time you come up with powerful and inspirational pieces. And a very well done to Hellon - a delicate and finely crafted piece.
Michael - sonnets are a very difficult forms to write so well done; yours is an original and fluid piece. I haven't read Narph's write yet but unlucky both of you on the tie break. Still, little sympathy here as 1) you have both won recently and 2) I suffered the same fate last week! lol :)
take care everyone,
Ben
ps Many thanks to the judges for their comments and my hms and congratulations to the other hms too. -
Poet on the Piano
8 years agoCongrats to all winners & HM's! Thank you Mel for posting and to the judges.
