Weekly Contest Results 2016 June 20

Allure can take many forms. There is the unreachable goddess, the allure of the sun and moon (Sisters of the Sky) penned by Meena Krish. There is the allure of the unattainable "perfect" Beauty, exposed to us by Courtney. Both of these poems will grace the front page.

A three-way tie for 3rd place was broken by the site. Continuing the theme, we are given the certain knowledge of your own inner torment and the allure of escape from them, though you know you never will, as portrayed by Andrea (Snipping of Feathers); the ineluctable attraction to your heart's destiny in Picture Perfect, by Ben (Naughtymouse ). Finally, there is no allure possible, but at least compassion for the loss of the innocents as expressed by Satish.

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Sisters Of The Sky (Rictameter) by Meena Krish 10+7+4=21 points
Beauty by Courtney 10+10=20 points

Tie broken for 3rd
Snipping of feathers by Maple tree 7+7=14 points [WIN]

HMs
Picture Perfect by Naughtymouse 7+7=14 points
Rape of Fragrance by Satish Verma 10+4=14 points

I always go on about the moonlight by Darren 10 points
Singing Sonnets To Different Worlds by Ben Pickard 4 points
The Crypt Keeper by Maple Tree 4 points
Martyr by Senryu 4 points

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Sisters Of The Sky (Rictameter) by Meena Krish 10 points
Meena created a beautiful string of Rictameter's this week! I was blown away to be honest.
I knew that this nature poem was going to be magical by the title alone and as I started reading, I was overjoyed.
It has a Goddess purity to it, and just elegant. Full of mystical words and elegance.
Wonderful nature poem!!

Sisters Of The Sky (Rictameter) by Meena Krish 4 points
this author never disappoints, when she posts something, you know it's going to be great. Powerful, mythical, and seductive.

Sisters Of The Sky (Rictameter) by Meena Krish 7points
The trick to poems based on syllable count is to break the lines in as casual a way as possible. There are myriad Rictameters that seem stilted and even arbitrary. Not this one. The poet structures her lines so naturally that it flows. The importance of this accomplishment is that it allows the reader to focus on the subject rather than the format. The two sisters are well contrasted and without using the crutch of mythological allusions.

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Beauty by Courtney 10 points
Reality been put out, attacked and shaped to behold the eyes of society forgetting the individual and her feelings; making her worthless and not appreciated unless she is shaped to the way of the society! It's a sad fact which everyone goes through and everyone fails to see the person for who she is rather they all take a go and try and beautify her to their ways.
The imagery is so dark and cruel and it hurts just to read it. The part that stood out for me was the image of the self emerging from the mirror and slicing away/ molding the woman and the descriptions is crystal-clear it made me cringe, it made me angry that society still has the power to put down an individual and to drive that person to madness! An aching reality it hurts to read...

Beauty by Courtney 10 points
This diatribe against social norms for beauty is made much more powerful with the active-eviscerating agent being her own self. It reminds me of the saying that when a woman looks in the mirror she does not see herself; rather, she sees the absence of what she thinks should be there. While I sympathize with her surrender to false standards, I take heart in the fact that she recognizes the horrendous mistake in doing so.

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picture perfect.....naughtymouse....7
a poem dedicated to feeling grateful for finding that special someone. Well written and message beautifully conveyed.

Picture Perfect. by Naughtymouse 7 points
Ben knows how to bring the house down with his Love poetry and this peace just proves once again, of his talent and heart.. both go into his poems.
Painting love, creating a strong abd balance portrait!
The metaphor was spot on... and what I enjoyed is the first line reminds me of an old song By Bread, called "If"... and I started humming as I read this...
Touching and beautiful!

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Rape of Fragrance by Satish Verma 4 points
The title caught my attention and as I read it I can see this in more then one way. It is the very beauty and innocence of nature been stripped, broken and thrown away to die. It's like seeing little innocent lives been plucked from their childhood and crushed beyond recognition...and then here are some who are helpless and can't do anything.
There is an important message within this write...save our mother-nature, save our children save earth for the next generation. At least that is what I get from this thought provoking write.

Rape of Fragrance by Satish Verma 10 points
This last couple of weeks I have mellowed with my judging, I will accept artistic licence as I did last week, this pick again has a made up word, albeit hyphenated. Yet weighing this against all nominated poems this week, this still tops the list for me. It is not a great week for nominated poems. If you take away those that were there from the week before it is fairly bare. There are a few that I am surprised were nominated, but this is what makes this poetry site what it is. We all have our own tastes and preferences.
I loved the darkness of this write and the imagery. I loved the line
'Thirst is larger than the river'
That last line rings in my ears also. Overall a very well written piece that I enjoyed.

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Snipping o feathers by Maple Tree 7 points
The dark sadness in this write is so chilling and at the same time
it keeps me glued to every word and line. It's as if the writer's cold
sadness is speaking to me making this personal. I liked the
opening stanza and the way it unfolds with vivid imagery till the finish.
Overall a dark sadness seem to have enveloped the soul which makes me
feel the hopelessness...touching.

Snipping of feathers by Maple tree 7 points
That opening stanza, breathtaking.
'spec'? As in specification or simply 'speck'
I actually prefer it as it is. Works well and has me thinking.
I can always rely on Maple tree to hold my attention with her writing. Nice story telling and imagery with only a few words. No 'added' words to buff the poem up a bit.
I don't believe the last stanza though, everyone who knows you know you are an angel.

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I always go on about the moonlight....Darren...10
Usually these types of poems give me fits, the title itself lends credence to the fact the poem is going to be first person, therefore all the "I's" throughout weren't necessary and actually took away from the quality of the poem itself
I never land
^never landing would have sufficed, same thing throughout, but still it was an awesome read, great work.

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Singing Sonnets To Different Worlds by Ben Pickard 4 points
String of Sonnets- My eyes got all misty with this mouth watering poem.
Written beautifully and the sorrow just made my heart ache.
This truly read like a flowing old English poem, and that is what I just had to add this to my final three, unique and powerful!!

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The Crypt Keeper by Maple Tree 4 points
As dark and "moldy" as the tone of this poem may seem, it is in reality an ironic stand against mediocrity and despair. The new day hears words that not only are defiant, but perhaps made possible by the strictures to which the poet is falling prey.

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Martyr By Senryu 4 points
An unusual first line, baby's breath.
My babies had breath of vomit, milk, baby biscuits or vomit again, hell sometimes all of them. This is the work of an intelligent mind. Stars are dying, true yet they are often perceived as life or guiding lights. Such imaginative imagery throughout this piece made it stand out from the small crowd for me.
I like the shortened nickname for chrysanthemums, helps the flow and is less of a mouthful. I love the power of the second last line.
I can hear it as I read it which usually ticks the boxes for me.

Congratulations all, and thanks judges and Larry

Congratulations to all the winning poems this week and the HM's! Thank you Larry for moderating and the judges comments.

Congratulations Meena and Courtney and to all the hms!

Thank you judges for all the lovely comments!

Ps: judge I truly am no angel, my husband says I am but he says my halo has a few dings ...ha!

Congrats to all the winners, and those who picked up a HM! Thank you judge for the comment!

alsooo thank you judges for your time <3 your term is almost up and really appreciate you guys, and thank you larry for posting!r

Many congratulations to the winners and those who almost won. Great to see Ben (Naughtymouse) posting again - a truly gifted writer.
Thanks for the judge who gave me their vote/comment and well done to the other hms

Ben

Wonderful work! Congrats to all and thank you so much judges for all your dedication and of course Larry for posting!

Congratulations winners and HMs, great job judges.

Congrats winners and thanks judges for my HM,

judge you are right and I am going to edit out the 'I's'

Congratulations Courtney and Andrea on the Win and
congrats to all the HM's!

Thank you judges for the win and thanks to those who nominated my poem.

Thank you judges for all your efforts throughout this term and thanks Larry for hosting!

Congratulations Winners and Hm's alike!

Its been a while since I've posted/written anything and I'm a little rusty so this was a really nice surprise to read the comments on the poem and the judges comments too.

Thanks once again judges for making it possible, Larry for posting.
Huge congratulations to all winners, well worth it and to all HMs.

Much love.