Weekly Contest Results August 1 2016

Good Morning P&Q! Hope you all had a lovely weekend.
I must say that this week's poems were all captivating and
touching at the same time. I would first like to thank the
judges for all the time and effort they put in each week.

Next a hearty congratulations to Hellon, Brenda and Sir
Lancelot the front page winners and congratulations to all
the HM's this week! Here are the comments:

WINNERS:

Pourquoi by Hellon

Rude by Brenda

Nights without a Cure by Sir Lancelot

Pourquoi by Hellon

Interesting use of "And" to start the poem. It makes the
reader feel as if there is a beginning and an ending to the poem. Perhaps a beginning written by our own self as we can relate to the ending word.... Why? Something we have all asked... why. I also thought the title was interesting, it led me to believe the setting was the Cote d'Azur. The setting provided the scenery in my minds eye and my brain took it from there.... Perhaps a jilted lover scorned and in feelings. The choice of words to used to describe things led me to believe this, "rusting" slouched sulkily" "meandered". Your poetry never disappoints. (10 points)
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Pourquoi by Hellon

Soothing poem. One that lingers under skin. Vague yet deep, general yet personal, a very well combined poem.

It flowed easily with imagery scenes. The poem started off in a very interesting entry, as though the poem already started silently in your head and the part you shared loudly was the this in particular.

The choice of words were parallel in their tone, very sad and touching. (10 points)
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Pourquoi by Hellon

Pourquoi: French for why... Oh how I love this poem. The setting of the ocean shoreline, is a place where you can go and question things, sort out your thoughts...

Hellon using the French word for why adds to this piece, giving it such a unique twist and flare to this poem. The visual display is breathtaking! Lovely piece!! (10 points)

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Rude by Brenda

I truly enjoyed reading this write this week because it
seems to be so fitting of the world in countless aspects
and perceptions. There are some very important trains
of thought in this piece that could really prove Gandhi
right in saying that we must be the changes we wish to
see in the world. Where the author credits their inspiration for this piece also intrigues me, while that is not one of Frost's most known pieces a fair amount of people have come across it and it seems like each of those people gleans something entirely different from the piece than the last - or any other for that matter. And even if they do all have the same interpretations so many people run in such unique directions with their own personal flares and this week this piece has done an incredible job of that. Brenda has done a phenomenal thing by sharing this here with the PnQ community. (10 points)
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Rude by Brenda

Force and power, I love these two emotions that one could easily extract from this piece. The style and structure are different and one which I'm in favor of. The multiple interpretations that could be delivered to each reader in regard how they would receive it is just fabulous. Loved the whole concept and admired the twist.

Neighbors could play a major role in how peaceful your life could be. Perhaps yours need to read this poem. Well penned. (7 points)
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Nights without a Cure by Sir Lancelot

This is without exception my favorite poem of the week.
The rhyming is excellent every stanza full of imagery,
and vibrancy. The underlying tones of humor

"Careful, Sir L, or you may mar
Your rhyming card which is your ace
When free verse leads to damned disgrace".

A seemingly effortless piece which entices the reader
through the stanza's feeling and experiencing the writers
frustrations similar to which we have all experienced in
our lives. Beautifully written and a joy to read I've given
this one (10 points).

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HM'S

Raindrop Masterpiece by Ether

A Dragon's love by Sir Lancelot

Jesus never warned me by poet on the piano

The streets by Brookie

Jigsaws of the World by Sir Lancelot

Still Growing by EM

Tale of a Miser by Shloka

Sad by Ms Sunshine aka Rania Moallem

Raindrop Masterpiece by Ether

Your poetry intrigues me. Simply put, Wow! I have always related rain to tears and it was very eloquently described
by you with one simple placement of parentheses, (con) temporary art. Both rain and tears are only temporary. I
am in awe of your talent. (4 points)
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Raindrop Masterpiece by Ether

The imagery within this piece is absolutely stunning and
the style here is so interesting - even for freestyle which
is usually interesting in its own ways with the personalized flow and message alongside images and scenes that come alive in such new ways even when they are tired or overdone. Now, I'm not saying that this piece is tired, because its really not; but what I am saying is that I love how this author took free form and creativity somewhere newer than new. Somewhere that the words could come alive in more dimensions than before. I enjoyed the way
this was simple and yet intensely beautiful. Great write.
(4 points)
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A Dragons Love by Sir Lancelot

Again another week of excellent poem submissions. It
was very difficult task to choose between this one
and "Jigsaws of the World" both excellent poems which
I enjoyed reading for different reasons. I chose A Dragons
Love because it is vibrant and dynamic and an excellent
example of a sonnet with wonderful subject, great visuals, meter and rhyming. I love the interweave of fantasy,
love and dragon and in particular the last four lines

"It is with such regret that I now spy
A poisoned chalice I cannot refuse.
When falling on love's often shiny scales,
Beware the serpent's fang that might impale".

A great example of true sonnet at its best (7 points)
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Jigsaws of the World by Sir Lancelot

The rhyming, word play and unique way of portraying
the world as a jigsaw is original and fresh. I liked the concept in the second and third stanza of Children's innocence and simplicity forming the world or the
pieces of the world. They reveal that not all is right that
it needs to be redone. I will attempt to make this right.
Face the rain and build jigsaws of our world again. The imagery and metaphors are beautifully positioned
an excellent poem with a nice original slant. 4 points
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Jesus never warned me by Poet on the piano

So much anguish, hurt and betrayal is etched forth in this poem. I personally hate this poem (not the poem itself)
but, the hurt and betrayal you have portrayed. This looks
to be a healing poem and very personal. It's hard to judge
in that aspect. It defines core beliefs of religion and morality. It's embarrassing we can feel ashamed for the father, and not that he ever would of himself. He appears to be arrogant and self serving. Narcissistic at its finest. It also appears the mother would change things if she could, but it also appears she was dependant upon him for something. Like I said this poem seems really personal and if it is I hope it has at least been healing to write it. (7 points)
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The Streets by Brookie

This poem is the heart and devastation for a person on the streets!

What a powerful and well written piece by Brookie this week! I was blown away! This poem takes you in the heart of a lost soul who just needs to be comforted and yet that fear brings them down to the point of darkness. Just a touching and powerful poem! (7 points)
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Still Growing by Em

There is hope here that accomplishes leaps and bounds to leave the page (or screen) and completely captivate the reader. The sense of strength and honest inspiration is overwhelming in a positive way that just makes the audience melt with the thought of potential in finding more happiness/love/luck whatever it is they desire from the world by finding it within themselves first. I truly love the way Em empowers her audience so unknowingly as she searches for a way of strengthening her own self, and everybody experiences that at some point in their life - so this is an excellent account of how to rise above such moments. (7 points)
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Tale of a Miser by Shloka

Interesting title. Allow me to start with the closing lines,
they were very well penned and very creative. I am honestly a big fan of this poem.

I both love the way it was penned and the messages behind it. The whole piece leaves an impact over the reader, especially this part:

why do you speak thus,
Of diamonds and rubies, when your mother says, "it will pass." ?

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it's a different form of poetry if I shall say, taking into consideration the poetic dialogue between the lines. Powerful, moral and powerful message. Thank you for sharing. (4 points)
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Sad by Ms Sunshine aka Rania Moallem

Rania, is on fire with her poetry and this week, she
proves to us yet again, just how powerful she is!

Sadness is a barrier that will unfold like a demon and consume the person... this is what I took from this poem
and it truly is an elegant creative side and way to look at sadness. Just wonderful!! (4 points)

Congratulations to the Winners and HM's! Thank you, Judges and Ms. Meena for posting! (: Have a great week, everyone! (:

Congratulations

Thank you for the HM

Congratulations all (Hellon, should you not take this as a hint to write more?)

Thanks judges and to Meena for posting.

Congratulations to all the winners and HM's , amazing writes all around. Thank you judges and Meena for moderating.

Firstly,thanks to the judges for your time and Meena for posting. Congratulations to all worthy winners Nd HMs and thank you for my HM it never goes unnoticed. :)

Amazing week, congrats everyone!

Congrats to the other winners and the HM's. Thank you judges for your great comments...very much appreciated. Thank you also to the members who nominated this poem.

on a side note...Brookie mentioned on another thread about the site insisting on a capital letter for the start word...I feel this disrupted the poem slightly because...as the judges observed I was trying to come in mid-thought so I really wanted it to be ...and...

Larry...I've always said...my poetry finds me...I can't churn out poetry like some sort of factory ...but thanks for the encouragement...

These poems are just amazing!

thank you for the amazing comment, it's very encouraging.

Thanks Meena for posting <3

Huge congratulations! Great work and thank you so much, judges. Also, thank you judge for your heartfelt comment on my poem. That meant a lot to me to be able to express that, finally...

Thank you to the judges for their time and many congratulations to the other winners and hms.

SL