Sorry about the late post this week. Big congratulations to Naughtymouse, Mr Darcy and Ether, lovely poems. Thank you to our judges for their effort, as per usual you guys rock. - Mel
WINNERS
Whisper Among Stars by Naughtymouse: 10 + 10 + 4 = 24
Twas written in the stars (Tanka) by Mr Darcy: 7 + 7 = 14
Of Peace and Chaos [Double Acrostic] by ether: 4 + 10 = 14
HMS
How Did I Get Here by No1ButMe Aka Sierra: 10
Lines in the Ocean by Ben Pickard: 10
Deadly Affections by Brenda: 7
In this web by Everlasting: 7
The Phoenix by Scott Cole: 4
Dandelion Confessions by Ben Pickard: 4
Changing Weather by Em: 4
Sensitive Sorrow Stream by Ether: 7
How Did I Get Here
by No1ButMe Aka Sierra
The policy of our site is not to recognize poems that aggrandize self-mutilation. This poem, however, does the opposite. It is as gritty as possible a depiction of the horrors that caught up to the young woman who cannot even remember the older cuts she has inflicted on herself. It shows a person just awakening to the miserable state in which she finds herself. Powerful is too weak a word. (10)
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In this Web...
by Everlasting
Questioning is a hallmark of Luce's writing. This poem is well done to depict a person suddenly becoming aware of a deeper enmeshment into an Orwellian nightmare called The Web. True, the experience on the computer often takes on greater meaning, more significant substance than one's walk-about world. It becomes even worse with the prevalence of smart phones - you take your alternative reality with you. (7)
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The Phoenix:
by Scott Cole
Like The Bruce pitching his future on the success or failure of a spider building a web, the writer presents himself with the option of accepting defeat or struggling back, born from the ashes of defeat like the phoenix. The use of the colloquial "waller" rather than "wallow" is likely intentional. But it detracts from the overall powerful imagery. (4)
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Whisper Among Stars
by Naughtymouse
This has got to be the prettiest love poem I have come across in quite some time!
The elegance of the format alone can make a heart swoon!
The eyes are key to beauty.. the soul within, fire of love-
This author lets the reader know, just how much he loves her.. we can feel it!
Just elegant! (10)
This is very genuine and adorable.
So much dedication and love. People get into this magical phase when they reach that peak of love, even if a couple of times, even if with different people.
The human heart has the ability to fall and rise, I believe.
And this, is just beautiful and magical. Happy, deep, and fruitful.
A poem worth being highlighted. Keep sharing. (4)
Another clear fan favorite this week, this piece absolutely blows the audience away. There is a great use of diversity within the lengthy content - which was intuitive for both stylistic choice and because it gave the audience time to digest the depth of the previous longer stanzas. To me the format of the piece also gives the illusion of a woman's body that repeats down the page, which might just be my mind, but it was a neat coincidence for a love poem. Also the author's sense of voice in this piece was incredible because even though the piece was directed to someone specific, the audience gets invested in the scene and almost relates in their own way, which was a cool touch to include or a great effect. Brilliantly penned. (10)
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Twas written in the stars (Tanka)
by Mr Darcy
This Tanka made me gasp!
Love is in the stars this week people!
What a lovely and well written tanka..
I like the way it flows and how graceful it is... just pretty! (7)
The imagery in this work is phenomenal and the simplicity of it actually works really well in comparison to the lack of capitalizations. The punctuation is elaborately done when considering the rest of the piece which is interesting and gives this piece a hint of much needed dimension without over doing it or losing sight of the author's intentions. Absolutely wonderful use of the format - tankas always seem so difficult to me so when I see one that makes them seem as effortless as this I can't help but be amazed. All in all, this piece is stunning! (7)
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Of Peace and Chaos [Double Acrostic]
by ether
Hats off to Ether!! for pulling off a double acrostic with ease...
I personally always hard a hard time with these..
The flow is detailed and fits.. not choppy.. just right!
a universal angle of elegance!! (4)
I've never came across a double acrostic that held meaning to it, as this one. It flowed and seemed forceless and elegant.
I admired the structure before anything else poetic in this piece. I love titles that start Of x and Y, they appeal to me in a way as though calling for readers.
I love the fact that chaos and peace were brought about in the same poem, one which starts with chaos and ends with peace.
I believe it's more than a poem. It's a smart poem, and I loved it. (10)
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Sensitive Sorrow Stream
by Ether
Your style is uncommon and different. I loved this strange poetry style well combined with sorrow and sadness.
The feelings behind this peace are so strong and touching. It had this narrative tone, almost pledging the 2nd person in the poem...I was just burdened.
It's just very unique, and very unusual, you don't read a poem like this everyday... well done. (7)
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Dandelion Confessions
by Ben Pickard
I love the format of this piece, it calls out to the audience and stands out in their memory. It does a great job of utilizing the centered format and still creates a unified piece that readers can both understand and imagine. Other site members seem to love this piece, and there is no question why, so definitely a piece worth mentioning. Beautiful. (4)
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Lines in the Ocean
by Ben Pickard
This week Ben has three nominated poems - "Lines in the Ocean" "Sonnet for Shakespeare"
and "A Soldiers Frosty Field" all of which are excellent for a number of different reasons. It makes it so much harder to judge when a poet presents more than one excellent poem but after much thought I finally I settled on voting for "Lines in the Ocean" because for me out of the three it was such a refreshing, sensitive, beautiful, meaningful sonnet. It invoked a delicate wave of visuals and emotion that left me with a nice warm fuzzy glow. If I had enough votes I would certainly have voted for the other two. Well worth the 10 points. (10)
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Deadly Affections
by Brenda
A topical piece based on a recent and true event. Brenda has managed to portray the horror of the incident and raise awareness that even though we find it hard to believe such atrocities really do happen. Not an easy subject to broach but portrayed excellently in poetic form. As I read it I felt goose pimples and a cold feeling run down my spine. A compelling read. 7 Points
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Changing Weather
by Em
A delightful inspirational write that weaves positivity through a weather filled journey, showing messages you can glean from nature. The first stanza starts with the rain pelting down the window mirroring the writer's sombre mood, then the next the appearance of a rainbow showing that there is always something beautiful to come out of any bad situation. I think anyone who has ever had a bad day will be able to relate to this inspirational piece of prose. (4)
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Twas written in the Stars (Tanka)
Mr Darcy
A perfect 5-7-5-7-7 syllables Tanka with great visuals, "Dancing in the moonlight fluttering like butterflies... and "whispered promises of an angel meant for me". So much imagery pushed (seemingly so) effortlessly into a small space. Definitely warrants an honourable mention. (HM)
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