Why????

Why am i not on anybodys fav list do i really suck that bad dang this suck i bet no one even know any of my poems

how do you know you're not on anybody's favorite list?

I am geussing im not on anybodys fav list cause truly i dont know why i would. well i geuss that all the people in here just have to read my poems to find out

...why do you care
stop complaining. You could very well suck at poetry, I don't know, I don't CARE
get over yourself and go read someone else's poetry

cool thanx for the support plz comment on my poems

mackenzie: she replied because she was telling the truth. I happened to read some of Daniel's work. The first three lines of "I love you but I still hate you" (nice title by the way, you managed to drag it on quite nicely) proceed as such:

"I love you but I also hate you,
And my love for you is still strong,
But every thing that could go wrong went wrong"

Where does "also" come in? It is an unneccessary word. The "and" in the second line should be a but, and you used the word "wrong" twice within three words.

Pinkalias has a valid point, and she guessed very nicely by the way. Stop complaining that you are not on anyones favorites. How about just get better? Maybe improve a little? Then again you could keep on bitching about it and then maybe someone will read aye?

Well ok but hey im coming out with a new poem look for it later tonight and lets see what you think

Danny boy, this is the worst kind of "poor me " way to get attention, it doesn't make me interested in reading your poems.

Grow up Mr man, get stuck into the discussions, comment on other peoples work and sooner or later, someone will dig your work enough to make you a fav...though they might not tell you.

ya just having a bad day got really bad writeres block lately but entered a new poem yesturday check it out

Daniel: I read the poem that was supposedly better than the last one.

This is one of those "cheesy" love poems.

First of all your rhyming is horrible, the sixth and eleventh line had awful flow, on the ninth line you rhyme for the third time, leaving an empty couplet, sky is spelled "ski", and line twelve is another empty couplet. When I say "empty couplet" I mean you had a word that did not rhyme with the next line. Such as remember rhymes with neither desire, or soul.

Tip:
1) Buy a thesaurus
2) Use the thesaurus
3) Learn some new words
4) Keep your day job

hahaha Nobody: you are fantastic

I'm actually really glad you put up this post Dan...it's getting really entertaining.

(Nobody: good critisizms btw, your honest with valid points along with contsructive*and entertaining*words unlike soooooooooome people we know...)

Well i can care less if anybody likes my poems i know most of them are great i dont have to worry about it i know i am a good poet i dont have to let any of you tell me different

"Why am i not on anybodys fav list do i really suck that bad dang this suck i bet no one even know any of my poems"

You asked a question, and I answered it.

"When you hit rock bottom, the only way to go is up."

I hope you enjoy improving, it's the only direction you can go.

Daniel,

You said that you could care less if anybody likes your poetry.
Why did you start this topic?
You know you blow at writing when you create a sentence like,

"i bet no one even know any of my poems"

Take a hint buddy.

Well to start a topic that people get into you need stuff to start with

well sed teys!
:D xxxxxxxxx

Well i dont really care anymore cause i know some of my poems are better than most and i know someof them have some issues with ryhming but who cares i write to write i love it

"i write to write i love it"

Obviously not! This whole post disproves exactly what you just said. You care about recognition more than you care for anything else, or you would not have complained in such a pathetic way.

True.

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Hey, I gave him constructive stuff

well go into another one and read one of my secrets or better yet read my new poem) lol its so funny it will make all you laugh ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha

hahahahhahahahahahahahahahahah
(laou)

how is it all the matts know just what to say?

you have made my day
Well said there

Yes I agree....

I thought some harsh criticism would do the trick, but apparently this twenty one year old was not what I expected.

That was my wrong for judging on age.

Excuse me...

He is actually 16.

So I guess I was right.

He is acting his own age.

I was thinking of KING, our new clown.

Being 16, I regret the association.

Being that age does not necessarily mean you have to act the age...

The association is dealt with on your decision of how to perceive it...

In actuality, my regret to be associated with the common stigma of "16" (years old) is more based upon OTHER peoples perceptions of it than MINE.

I know me, I know my mental ability and my maturity level. My regret to be associated with most 16 year olds was based upon your earlier post.

To be associated with such dumb asses would dissappoint anyone.

Simple.

And I highly doubt that your second sentence is grammatically correct. "On," should be "by."

If I change "on" to "by" will it help you understand?!

Obviously not, for you did not understand what I was implying...

I never said all sixteen year olds acted their age. I said Daniel acts his own age...

Not once did I associate sixteen year olds to Daniel...

I associated his age, with the way he was acting...

You choose wether you wish to act your own age...

I do understand.

The statement had very little to do with you as it was a sentiment of how 16 year olds are percieved.

You made a blanket generalization, and I commented. There is nothing I do not understand here. The association was to each other, it is not one way around, Daniels maturity level= 16 year olds general maturity level, or what is to be expected by a 16 year old.

Why is this turning into a debate? What we are both saying is extraordinarily simple and I highly doubt that either of us is dim enough to misunderstand something so self explanitory.

Yes I agree...

I am used to explaining myself to the half-wits who populate this site.

Though as someone will probably read this and be offended... I say to you now... for we just discussed this:

When I say 'half-wits who populate this site' it does not necessarily apply to you.

You are who you are... If my comment does not apply to you, then great.

If it does... well... that's just a cryin shame.

I concur ;)