Could some one help me?

I know I am not very goodwill someone help me out and tell me what I am doing wrong? Please.

What I am doing wrong writing my poems they seem not to be too good.

What do you mean? Is this a personal revelation, or did someone tell you that?

~Ciao Lipton

It sounds like forced rhyming...

~Ciao Lipton

Sorry about the i dont care what you think part i just really was in a bad mood when i wrote it so i am sorry thank you for your tips i havent been writing that long and now i can try and improve my writing

thanks for your guys help i hope i can fix the problems