Poetry Challenge part 3: Nonet

For the next poetry challenge, let's write nonets.

*NONET

A nonet has nine lines. The first line has nine syllables,
the second line eight syllables, the third line seven
syllables, etc... until line nine that finishes with one
syllable. It can be on any subject and rhyming is optional.

line 1 - 9 syllables
line 2 - 8 syllables
line 3 - 7 syllables
line 4 - 6 syllables
line 5 - 5 syllables
line 6 - 4 syllables
line 7 - 3 syllables
line 8 - 2 syllables
line 9 - 1 syllable

Okay, I'll go first:

Can you not see that I adore you?
I’m hopelessly living for you
But you simply walk away
And leave me standing here
In the doorway of
Your selfish heart
Praying you’ll
Come for
Me

I can't do that!

HAHA Natalie! Yes you can:)

You got too many syllables Ismail.

Ismail...you have way too many syllables in the 1st, 2nd and a few other lines. Good try...but try again.

Yes, today i spent my time in love.
I realised a few things with you,
that you love a useless child.
we love one another,
yet i don't deserve.
You, or this time,
you and me.
Forever,
us.

(Yes, lame)

[Edited]

HI SEAN!!!!

Good try but, the poem should be 9 lines long and yours is only 8. The second line should have 8 syllables and yours has 9.The fourth line should have 6 syllables and yours has 7. And there are a few more mistakes. So revise it. But good try. I like it so far:)

(I am not awake, shall do revisions now ¬.¬)
[Edit, revisions made]

Nice Sean! I liked it:)

did my best

I saw a light on the Horizon
And I mistook it for the dawn.
But I should have known better.
No dawn will there be yet.
I'll just keep waiting.
And be mankind
All alone.
Lacking
Light.

Here i go....:

Do breathe on me through thy parted lips
Softly, my dear, oh so softly.
I slumber in thy presence
Resting in a rich peace.
Yet the deep sorrow
Reaps tranquil souls.
Comes hither.
Robs joy.
Stays.

good one, woman=)

Thanks. :) I liked yours too. Your poems are so intriguing...very nice.

Thank you so much:)

Means alot to me...

anyone else?

Good job! But you only have 8 lines there...you missed out on the 4 syllable line.

This is gay.

: )

It's fun!

Enslavement, Dorotea, Ismail, and Untouchable...loved your poems. They were great.

Kevin, you meant gay as in bright and pleasant, promoting a feeling of cheer, right?

I wrote another one:

It’s so obvious that you want me
Don’t even have to say a word
It’s burning there in your eyes
A need you can’t ignore
Don’t try to fight it
Just make your move.
What are you
Waiting
For?

Nice Chimane!!!! Loved it:)

Everybody is searching for love
longing for the one they dream of
some may search their whole life through
I was blessed to find you
early in my life
became your wife
You love me
and I
you

Wow Mike...splendid!

Mike that was really good.
Dorotea your's was great as well.

Wonderful Nonets everyone!

Keep them coming:)

Go for it Chris!

And yeah Mike your nonet was pretty amazing!

Yeah, I can totally understand that. Work has a way of zapping all of my energy too.

I'll keep my eyes open for your poem though:)

nice topic, I think I might write a few later... help add a different pace to my writing.. thanx for the idea

Romeo and Juliet?

Only thing i can think of..

I thought so from Queen mab and the murder of tybault, and ofcourse mercutio was the one who was killed by tybault and he went on about queen mab.

just didn't recongise the place.

Chris I loved your nonet. I never even thought about Romeo and Juliet until it was mentioned. Very nice!

Chris, you've actually opend up a new world of poetry in my eyes - writing poetry as adaption to a story, a real life event....i may try something along the lines of a Romeo and Juliet poem, though i'm sure it's been done to death. (Litteraly aswell)

Trying to be something I'm just not
Always dissapointing myself
Why must I be so stupid?
Feeling compelled to knife
Should I end my life?
Put out of pain
I should die?
But how?
When?

Nice poem Charlotte.
And bob SUPERB!
I thoroughly enjoyed it!