I am looking for constructive critique.....NOT a vote.....

can anyone out there read my poems and ACTUALLY say something that will make my writing improve...

please take this seriously, no "it was good...." or "keep up the great work"....

if there is something wrong, tell me...if something makes a great saying, tell me...if something feels like it does not belong,tell me...

if anyone out there has a mind,please use it and help me out....if you feel like voting for it,go ahead...I am not much in it for the popularity contest, more to improve...

-thank you-

I will when I get the chance...

As for now, I recommend that you post this one in the forum where it belongs, "request to read"...

peace

I totally agree with you Steve. I would like some ideas on how to improve on mine as well.
Maybe we could help each other out...

Take care