COMMENT OR VOTE AND OR RATE MY POEM PLEASE URGENTLY

Hi guys,
Im new to this whole forum thing aswell as poem website.I havent been keeping upto date with this site so i dont really have any time to aswell.If you could please rate vote and or comment on my poem that would be great.I dont care if its good or bad atleast i can get feedback.Reason being these are two poems that are for my boyfriend.

Debs